- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Miami Sunset
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Click hereWe waited all summer for
that poppy to die but
it died anyway
bleeding its love
into the white sand
World girded a loose
cloak on our bodies, sun
woven into the folds, nuts
squirreled for winter we
agreed the season had expired
and
parted with a desultory kiss
- COMMENTS
YDDalmost 20 years agoThe first three lines seem confused
and the enjambment doesn't work in the second stanza.
The final stanza has impact,
but "farther country" is somewhat trite.
The -30- gives you away.
Not one of the poet's best offerings.
lipsticksunset1984almost 20 years ago...yet complex, written with powerful script. A fine read.
