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Click hereMorning Coffee
Your hazelnut voice wraps around me,
Embracing me, pulling me.
I tumble into your soul through
Your mocha eyes.
Vanilla kisses sprinkle down my neck.
Bitter black coffee bites
Sting my nipples, followed by soothing
Iced latte licks.
You pierce me like a spoon,
Blending our bodies as
Coffee and cream, into one delicious
Recipe.
--Cate Colbert
I have a tiny problem with the descriptions...hazelnut, mocha etc...suppose a NON coffee drinker reads this poem, has no idea what those flavors are ( as pertaining to coffee) is hazelnut sweet? bitter? sharp, sublime? how does mocha relate to eyes? and so on...
I am not criticizing, just pointing out that words are only as good as their role in a poem and these are just well, just sorta stuck in there...
how would/could you change this so that the words are felt, not just "there".It is an interesting metaphor, I agree, but plainy put. I believe you have it in you to do much better :)
Wow I don't even like coffee but this poem is wonderfully evocative!
Using the different senses and the anatomical geography was really nice!
coffee and sex, images that work well together, so many
types
Fragrant and sweetly erotic--the metaphor works perfectly. :)