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Stranded on an arid thought
Devoid of blooming flowers or
Even drops of water.
Only there could I learn
Appreciation
Only here could I learn
Even an oasis
Can't make a desert blossom
When only arid thoughts thrive.
- COMMENTS
average ginaover 19 years agoA truth spoken in pain could not be more true. Even in darkness, there is a lesson. Remarkable visual picture. If only I could use words more beautifully.
echoes_sabout 20 years agooff to a breathtaking start! This leaves me wanting to read more, but there is no more that can be said in this poem.
jthserraabout 20 years agosparse and beautiful. I think you have said it all here. Though early, this is not premature. Well done.
jim : )
Anonymousabout 20 years agoIn my view, it's neither too short nor too long. It just is.
Beautiful work Carrie.
Anonymousabout 20 years ago...for the "Only" challenge it's gonna be a good one! I loved this tight, visual poem, Carrie, thanks.
BooMerengueabout 20 years agoOh, Champ! I love every word you write! Only this time I agree w/ YDD (glancing over my shoulder) it's waaay too short!! Thanks, kid!
Angelineabout 20 years agomaybe a wilted flower, lol--but the writer's voice gives life to the dry landscape...
Angelineabout 20 years agoYou've created a strong visual image (I see a desert flower) in a fairly abstract poem, and a short one at that! Really well done!
YDDabout 20 years agoThe first line is excellent!
"Stranded on an arid thought"
I wish you had expanded this poem a bit more.
