- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Quan Found his Daddy in Frisco.
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Click hereI'm sure that he got his poontang and rice
hot from Nam Ha` every Saturday night
while he told his USA white knight lies,
how bright the steel of the Golden Gate was,
bright the dawn, and safe the homes in his city.
The nuns never told me who Daddy was,
but they told me God it was who made me
and told me about Our Lord Jesus Christ
while I, burning midnight oil in their office,
taught myself clandestine history.
Later with nothing but holes in my pockets
to play with I hitched to the Tenderloin
and found my Daddy in '93
half the way into his brown paper bag:
"Quan? Shit! I wanted it named after me."
I stared at him like the katydid did
I saw on Willow Street, eyes on an aphid,
John a slow moving bug on a limb,
in a manner of speaking, of course; I
pretending to sip his bag, he pretending
I was his son when I split his nose
for my patrimony, a measly five bucks
from his wallet I gave a tutelary
spirit, selling her love, a drop-dead beauty,
haunting me with a drop-dead Nam Ha`.
- COMMENTS
Angelineover 11 years agowith so many twists and turns, you keep the reader wondering where it's going next right down to the last line. I'd need to read it a few more times to get all the nuance, the layers of meaning and get used to some of the sonic tricks you are trying out. But. Just really good, too good to languish here. Please submit it to a poetry journal!
tazz317over 11 years agoagainst a race instead of a human, TK U MLJ LV NV
buttersover 11 years agopithy, and yet another slice from life's past-its-sell-by pie. glad not to have missed this gritty rendering.
greenmountaineerover 11 years agoAuthorNam Ha` refers to Quan's mother. I do not speak Vietnamese, and there's always a risk in relying on one website as I did here for a female first name that has 2 syllables and a distinct punctuation mark as I have seen in other words associated with that language.
Desejoover 11 years agoBut I will ask about the last line, because I'm stumped. What is Nam Ha' ? I thought it was a physical area, but it must have another meaning I am missing here.
twelveooneover 11 years agoseems flawless, you want a fan rave, you got it
I stared at him like the katydid did
I saw on Willow Street, eyes on an aphid,
this little bump stands out, it seems strange that it seems the perfect touch
i don't quite know how to put this is words, but the dynamics act like a wave, very nicely breaking up what just could have been a linear story, very subtle, any way this is one of those bastards that warrant further study. You been reading Frost again?
Ashesh9over 11 years agodeserted him ,left him to rot in an orphanage & fled to 'States ; the protagonist hunts him down & the bounder gets his comeuppance ?!! Poetry of Vengeance ---wow ! very good plot'n poem GM !
