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Click hereIf thoughts were words, as tides whose ebb and flow
Our mother moon’s celestial gaze commands,
Each word, in waves ruled by thy lustrous glow,
Would flood thy heart to plead my heart’s demands.
Were dreams but deeds, to such glad disarray
Thy sacred smile would rouse cares so intense
That, though the sun might stir each dormant day,
My lips would mock its dull-eyed diffidence.
But hope, dear doubting hope, will e’er resist
In thy fair eyes their motive alchemy,
And, words unspoken, grateful kiss unkiss’d,
Shall bind my love in steadfast slavery
To moon and sun, thy faithful acolyte:
Unheard, unseen, thy constant satellite.
the Complete Works to find which one you copied. You didn't.(Or is this Dryden?) No it's just you, complimenting some of the greatest poets with your exquisite mastery. I've finally scored someone 100. I must read it yet again, but add praise because it's actually not even my favourite of yours. You have in me a genuine 'fan'. Mancelt.
The meter is very good, and flows (at least for me) unobtrusively, which is difficult to do. I normally would complain about the poetic contractions (unkiss'd) and the use of anachronisms (like "thy"), but they seem to work here because of the formalistic tone of the sonnet. Well done.
I like the way you combine the celestial imagery with the human.