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Click hereThe lightness of a summers day ~ reveling in the days activities. This poem strikes a magical balance between warmth and brilliance.
besides needing spell check honey.. I so get this and loved it ... am impressed with your efforts always.. give the artist of the crane at least a 12 year old credit (wink wink) nice work Art..
Du~
Did you mean the words you chose?
"a wings flare" or "a wing's flair"
You could argue for the word play of either flare/flair because of the poem's theme, but "a" makes "wings" singular and possessive (either the spread/span or the talent/skill).
"Ariel" or aerial"
Are you using "Ariel" as a proper name (if so, to whom are you referring) or do you mean "in the air"? (i.e. "prancers of Ariel" or "prancers in the air")
And a constructional question, why did you pick green for the final line/s?
like me who burn both ends of the candle sleep in when ever they can get a chance ;) Thanks for this, Art.