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To listen to them
You would think they knew
Who I was behind their veil.
Speak no, hear no, see no...
Just write the evil
Stories that sell the rag.
All mighty buck
In it we trust
Facts, what do we care
Have it on my desk by Friday.
And make it good
What if he does die
Oh well what of it
Widows sell much better.
Saturday the women shop
Get it to the check out line
While grubby kids grab the candy
We grab their three bucks
And say thank you for shopping here
They need our guidance
To tell them what to believe
It's up to us to help
Feed their soft oatmeal minds
And lead them to the following story
I am seeing some real improvement in your work. Good for you. Getting a recommend.
Pretty good. My bias is the poem might even have been better if S4 began the poem, the last stanza followed, and S5 ended it.
ditto, with Ang.
and this is good
Just write the evil -kind of trite, but an excellent job of subverting the triteness with Speak no, hear no, see no... (probably better with some other punctuation)
Also don't think you need the first three lines.
Congrats - Mike, real crit's, real development
100!
because you've already implied what it says with the whole poem. And if you take it away, ending on the "say thank you for shopping here" you have a much stronger piece with an interesting ending. Just my opinion of course.