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Click hereWritten by wildsweetone
Illustrated by tolyk
Where do they go each night?
these diurnal beings in
heavy metal vehicles
rumbling through car parks
and
streets
in
search
of
?
travelling alone
or in
Bunches
By-passing
turnoffs
Driving through traffic
travelling home
or
returning to a lost
moment
These creatures of the day, for what do they search at night? Or have they found it and are now going to their burrows to slumber - eventually?
These creatures of the day, for what do they search at night? Or have they found it and are now going to their burrows to slumber - eventually?
A lovely nocturnal photo that assists immeasurably in telling the story. This rendering had an interesting format.
...the spacing of the words has the feeling of traffic weaving in and out. Well worth reading. Kudos to both!
Tess
My comment is slightly nervous having admitted last week to being perceptively challenged by illustrated work. However as WSO also said last week in another context she sought criticism.
I suggest that the role of the picture might me greater and more interesting with a few words omitted .These are 'each night' 'vehicles' 'car' 'travelling' 'driving' 'travelling' (again).Notwithstanding that,good work.
Nicely describes and illustrates the travels towards unknown destinations.
The visual layout of the poem adds to its content beautifully and is very appealing. My only criticism is 'heavy metal vehicles' feels a little cumbersome for such a delicate poem. Just a thought.
Otherwise, lovely poem and congrats to the photographer.
b'brig
You make my photos speak volumes.. thank you so much for this honour you pay me.