- Non-Erotic Poetry
- who knows?
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Click hereOpen doors usually have footprints on them
Imprinted with force and friction
Generally near the door knob
Or the bolt.
The frame is cracked.
The edging shows its staples
And eventually falls off.
Off in the distance sirens are blaring,
But we don’t hear it
For we are in love
With violence,
Hatred,
And nothing.
The neighbors smile smugly at this factoid,
But they are hypocrites
One and all.
But aren’t we all?
Or is that too cynical…
Is anything?
- COMMENTS
unpredictablebijoualmost 16 years agoThe emotional tone is bang-on, and I like the way it's constructed, sort of a wide shot and then moving in for a close up of "us" as individuals with a response to the scene. Very nice work.
sassynycalmost 16 years agoregardless of the subject matter, i like your handling of a canvas. you always construct a lucid picture of what you want your reader to see. this is no exception.
Unbridled_Passionalmost 16 years agoif I like it or hate it. But it peaked my interest. That is enough to make me give it notice.
Angelinealmost 16 years agoof course (and as I indicated in that thread in the forum) not much is too cynical for me. This is very good, really. I don't like the ellipsis points (I almost never do in poems), but it's tightly constructed and the tone, though dark, is solid throughout the poem. Please keep writing. You're good.
