Woman

byJanerochester©

I knew that if I pressed my ear
Hard, against her chest
I would not hear the
Predictable, warm beat
Of a human heart.

Instead, it would clink
Erratically
Against her rib cage
Like the sound of ice
Hitting the edge of a glass
Wielded by an angry drunk.

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by todski2801/23/14

thanks for this poem

a multitude of interpretations, and evocative,

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by Tsotha01/22/14

I really like the flow of the words in this. The drop from s1,l1 to s1,l2 ("Pressed my ear / Hard,"), from s1,l3 to s1,l4 ("hear the / Predictable,"), and the break at "Erratically" (s2,l2).

I agree withmore...

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by Janerochester01/22/14

Thank you all for your kind words! Also, I love that I now know that the word "enjambment" exists :)

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by greenmountaineer01/22/14

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by Koba01/22/14

This is quite good. Although it certainly could be about someone with a bad heart in the physical sense, I think there is a lot more going on. It seems to be aimed at someone without being specific whomore...

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