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You build me up when I'm on shaky ground,
And you shelter me until I settle.
You are that nonmoving foundation on which I've begun to grow roots,
A steadfast presence in my life and my heart.
You see in me what others can't,
You're teaching me to see what I can be.
You make me a better person simply for having known you,
You make me more blessed than a person has the right to be.
You have the ability to calm my storms,
You have the power to churn them inside me.
You have the strength to stand by my side,
And the strength to step back.
You are patient, kind, and understanding,
You are selfless, sexy, passionate and gentle.
You "get it," you get me.
You are, by grace, mine.
- COMMENTS
LeBrozover 18 years agoNeeds a bit of editing to tighten it up ~ use of "you" is too overdone. As an easy example with the first strophe:
"You build me up when I'm on shaky ground,
And you shelter me until I settle.
You are that nonmoving foundation on which I've begun to grow roots,
A steadfast presence in my life and my heart."
Could be tightened up a bit:
"You build me up when I'm on shaky ground,
Then shelter me until I settle.
You are that foundation where I've begun to grow roots,
A steadfast presence in my life and heart."
Message tends to get lost with all the repeated appearances of "you."
