- Non-Erotic Poetry
- You and me
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Click hereWe are like a bonsai tree.
A pretty seed meant for great things
planted in a pot too small. Gnarled
by force, fed by roots too starved,
sustaining atrophied limbs, cut again
and again, never meant to bear fruit.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 1 year agocan i please read others works shared by you? Honestly this resonates with me more than i can handle
Anonymousover 9 years agoI gotta say, not a fan. An effort, worth a C - if any of my seventh graders turned it in. For an adult ... not that much. More like prose than poem.
HoneyAdoredalmost 10 years ago...each word packs a punch.
I think you did right to trim it down to the perfect size and shape ;-)
Less is definitely more!...This is a prime example :-)
Tsothaalmost 10 years agoAuthorThank you all for your comments, and for reading. I appreciate it.
@HoneyAdored: it was originally longer, but I decided to trim it down to bonsai size to make each word relevant. It's all arguable, though — sometimes I feel it could use some padding, to gradually go from the "pretty seed" beginning to the "atrophy" end. Hm. *scratches chin* Circular editing...
@Maria: Thank you again; I'm glad it has facilitated those images for you. Though hopefully good images. :)
@Tazz: Hm... I wonder what is the legitimate function you speak of.
@Trix: and pain in beauty. ;)
