by virtualatheist
Silly story..stupid pretence just to keep the suspense? What? She did not know the length of Bobs dick? So why specially re indicate it’s length here?
Love the story idea but she had thoughts that would be impossible to have knowing it was her husband. You can't put impossible thoughts into a character in order to fool the reader.. It fails, regardless of the feel-good ending. You just can't do that.
Yeeesh. Is a fictional story people. Enjoy the twist and celebrate their love for one another. Maybe method acting? Hehe.
I suspected that Allen was actually her husband early on the second page for some reason. Not sure why; it just occurred to me. And I kept thinking she forgot about her husband and especially her kids too easily on page 1 especially after protesting and dismissing guys easily all night. Turned out to be right. Actual loving wife :) Though there is a danger here that someone else not her husband in future will seduce her like this, especially as she gets closer to milestone ages or if hormonal imbalances strike.