A Halloween Mishap

The nickname "Kitten" reminds me of Elinor Donahue (that's a good thing). The overall story is "warmer than average"; however, there are some serious defects that prevent it from being all that it could be. Here's a list that's not comprehensive, but that highlights some of the major problems:

(1) Eric doesn't seem to have a personality -- which may be explained by his participation in the hive-mind of football, but that's not explored and readers are left to their own imaginations to explain his exceedingly strange psychopathy.

(2) The domination/hyperassertive interactions are turn-offs, and (IMHO) they only potentially have a place inside the haunted house -- provided there's a better connection between the aggressiveness in the present and the violence in the past; unfortunately, we don't have that, so our imaginations again must fill in gaps that shouldn't exist.

(3) The interplay between Janice and Eric is bizarre and jolting; was Janice an hallucination? There's much to suggest she wasn't; unfortunately, she seems to have been added as an afterthought. Abandoned properties have long histories of entry and trespass by unauthorized persons who, if the story's narrative is to be believed (suspension of disbelief needs to occur), would have proliferated tales of the haunted house; even leaving a municipal household unattended for a week or two is enough to all but guarantee B&E, ransacking and theft. Why were the spirits apparently okay with that? Again: there should have been a LOT more history regarding the haunting(s) of the house and what ghosts/spirits/etc possessed that place, and what was the nature of their respective personalities ....

(4) Eric and Amber seem almost dismissive of their encounter with a tangible ghost -- REALLY? How do we reconcile that Janice was tangible to Eric; why did she seem to use conventions such as stairs; why did the earlier ghost pass through furniture and corpses ...?

(5) As others have asked, why didn't Amber and Eric recognize each other MUCH sooner?

Having said all that, the post-coital acceptance of their sexual relationship as a continuing part of their lives is rushed, but the conclusion isn't entirely beyond belief; the problem is the backstory (which, in this case, is the whole story, less the conclusion) and the almost "... and they lived happily ever after" nature of the conclusion.

Still, good enough for a tug. Don't get discouraged, but keep developing your art: you'll get there.

This was seriously hot. I didn’t much care for him dominating her. Honestly, it didn’t fit the story.

(1/27/2022) Well, this was different and an enjoyable read. I would have liked them to revisit Janice. Maybe they could have had a ghostly threesome. Now that would have been interesting. I also liked Amber’s suggestion of having her as his French maid moving forward. Five stars.

Longest 7 minutes in history. No way they didn’t know who each other were.

Was going good until harshly telling her suck me. Then harshly saying I’m going to fuck you. Would have been better if he didn’t say anything. Other thing is she is talking now but he don’t know the voice. How does he not know? I’ve stopped at this part and don’t know if I will keep reading. Hate forced sex stories.

Honestly brilliant story i loved it , slow starter but cant wait for the next part

This was fantastic. Beautiful. I loved their sweet nicknames for each other. It made them feel more realistic. As did their hesitation and doubt intermixed with their obvious love for each other. It added a wonderful layer of realism.

And to the commenter that said "seemed kinda rapey in the closet", I say that they were under the influence of a powerful supernatural being in a haunted house at midnight on Halloween in a fictional story, so maybe cut them some slack.

the girl says no a bunch of times and then he makes her fuck him anyway, huge turnoff

The Crash on October 29, 1929 was a Tuesday (Black Tuesday).

Like the others I found this Story Very Good ..

I don't normally leave comments. Nor do i find stories as good as this one. I am astounded by how well written, descriptive, and hot the entire story was. 5 stars for sure, bravo!

Yep, really good story. It's a pity the author hasn't posted anything since 2012.

I loved that Amber and Eric's relationship developed from their Halloween experience and that it continued on. Shame that the author didn't write a sequel.

My one gripe with the story, and something that other authors of sibling incest stories are so often guilty of, is that they always use 'we can't get married' or ' we can't have children' as a way of trying to re-enforce the taboo nature of the relationship.

Yes, blood siblings can't marry but they can have children. Just find it irritating.

I got to the flashback to when the girls switched costumes, and I was like "Well yeah, duh." So I scrolled until I found the next bold text to resume jacking, but I was completely thrown when the next jump was 83 years earlier. And I was really weirded out by it, but then when you brought it back I thought they were gonna die or something! When they came out of the house and they said they hadn't found them, I was completely engrossed in the story and briefly thought they actually might have died somehow!

A fantastic sex story with a well timed and well executed ghost story tinge. Great work. 5 stars.

Thoroughly enjoyed this story. The idea, the execution and the sex were all excellent. I'd like to know more about Kitten and Tiger.

Great story i could tell it had a lot of thought put into it keep up the good work.

Tiger and Kitten need to invest some money in buying the Peacock House and restore it to its original grandeur. That's gotta take several years and I'm sure the parents won't mind their only daughter moving out to be on her own ... as long as they know her big brother will be able to keep a protective eye on her.

Any chance Janice can become more active in their lives.

Great story. Great love scenes.

I wish literotica's related stories algorithm worked better instead of pushing same old most populer stories down our throat. I found this gem while searching another. No regret, unless if I count not finding this old gold before.

Within moments Eric, and Amber were in bed naked together. Eric loved his sister's body, her tight ass, her firm tits, and he'd never felt a tighter pussy than hers. The evening after mom picked up Amber, she surprised me by stopping by unexpectedly. I was watching porn and stroking my hard cock when she knocked. I pulled up my boxers, but my erection could not be hidden. When I opened the door I could tell by the smile on my mom's face, she had talked to Amber. I let her in and asked if I could take her coat? As she took it off, I realized she was completely naked underneath. She came up to me and dropped to her knees, freeing my cock from my boxers. She gave me the best head making me cum quickly. Within minutes I was hard again, and fucking the shit out of my mom. I made her cum three times, before I was shooting my spunk against her pussy bottom.

This was great but it could be longer and better like if Maggie came to try to seduce Eric at his apartment and found Eric and Amber in bed and they all get together with Maggie being his public girlfriend while Maggie AND Amber be his private girlfriend Amber moves into his apartment under the guise of not wanting to waste money by getting her own place when her brother has an extra room but hey that's just my opinion even alone this was fantastic thank you for posting it

Could have been a 4 but the language, oh God the language. My ears are still bleeding. 2.

Ive been reading stories here for years, and this was by far one of the best. I loved it!