All Comments on 'Carry That Weight'

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maddictmaddictover 9 years ago
Preposterous

Your a twisted old phugh. Hope I never get on your bad side.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Another good story - until the end

I can't believe he's not going to divorce her. Why would he stay? Everyone in the family knows what happened. I see no value in him being the "better man". He's never going to trust her again. Why live with the pain of having a cheating spouse? Divorce her and move on. Again, good story until you thought he should stay with her.

Then it went to hell in a hand basket.

KarenEKarenEover 9 years ago
Interesting Revenge

I wouldn't go that route.

First of all, at the risk of hurting Amber, she has to be told. As Tom said, it was no "mistake", Jeff was deliberately trying to get Tom to pass out so he could fuck Ashley, and I have to assume she knew his intentions.

Second, he has to either forgive her or divorce her, this passive-aggressive "trust, but not really" routine is kind of sick.

rightbankrightbankover 9 years ago
one huge flaw

there is no secret to keep. all the pretending in the world won't make her dear cousin(s) forget that they have already been found out.

Tootight1Tootight1over 9 years ago
good story

nicely conceived, conflicting emotions, and timing. nicely done.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
From Duna

There is a very rarly topic among the cheating wife stories. After cheating to be reconciliation stories are, but such story type where there is reconciliation and everybody thinks that marriage works the husband leaves the wife for a younger, better woman 10-15 years later (when the kids are above 18 years old...........).

I could imagine such two steps sequel for this story. What a pity HDK could think of such plote line!

Tw0Cr0wsTw0Cr0wsover 9 years ago
what he didn't say

She should be aware that he may no longer feel that he owes faithfulness to her since he has "accepted" her unfaithful nature.

He can consider this a marriage of convenience, after all her family is rich and now he is a hero to them.

He does not feel that he will be sexual with her, but that in no way obligates him to do without.

A broken contract is no longer binding on either party, she broke their contract to be faithful.

Enjoy the benefits of her wealth while being free of being monogamous.

What can she say if he treats it as an open marriage?

How can she divorce him for cheating without her own coming out, and destroying lover-boys marriage as well?

Having her cousin become aware of her role in his cheating?

Is she willing to become known as the family skank?

Unless they had a (completely unmentioned) totally one-sided prenup he will walk away fairly well off if she doesn't go along.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Crap

When he saved the family the score was even. He still owes that sob an as kicking for fucking his wife and a warning of death if it happens again. As far as his wife a warning of mayhem next time.

cap5356cap5356over 9 years ago
great story

it's funny how sometimes life moves. if he hadn't found his wife with the other guy he would not have been at that gas station to help out. I loved the way he handled the problem with his wife and friend. they are the ones that need to feel the hurt and the way he did they should.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Wife not realistic

This whole guilt trip he layed on his friend and wife, is unrealistic. The friend bedded his wife and now has his entire family intact. I'm sure he is grateful and will feel some shame and remorse for what he has done, but then he will get over it. Just like Ashley will eventually get over it and begin to resent Tom for the way he distrusts her. Poor Tom, is a four time loser in this story. His wife cheats on him, he fails to commit suicide, he saves the entire family of the man who slept with his wife, and his wife cousin Agnes and her husband knows the reality of the affair.

AwakeningofSensesAwakeningofSensesover 9 years ago
Not me

I would open that can of worms at the first meeting of all the family members and let the chips fall where they may. It's going to be a mess but his life is a mess anyway. Fuck his wife and fuck his friend.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
I had to reread this one

For someone who loves their wife and whose wife still loves them, this would be the ULTIMATE punishment! I can think of nothing more brutal than this scenario. To cut her off from his trust, no matter how innocent her comment of stopping by the store, needing to get a tankful of gas, visit someone else, all he would need to do is give her 'that look' and she would know he didn't believe her and assumed she was meeting a lover.

In my own mind when he came home from the hospital, he would move into a guest room. He would be kind, considerate yet cold and distant, if those things can be implemented. He would not allow her to touch him, there would be no physical contact. I would envision him asking her to bring home a medical report to see if she were clear of disease, each and EVERY MONTH. They would socialize, they would live life as normal, with the exception of physical contact.

What she did was stab him in the heart, before he was ever stabbed in the chest. In retribution he would slowly drive her away, forcing her to look for cock elsewhere, just to show her she didn't truly love her. It might take years, but over that time he would wink and nod knowingly when she said was going to the mall. He could destroy her psyche until she was the wreck she left him in when he found her with his best friends cum draining out of her skanky cunt.

I can envision no punishment worse than what was laid out and I added to.

Tootight1Tootight1almost 10 years ago
nicely done

exceptional foresight, or did it just happen? fate, what a word

IrfonIrfonalmost 10 years ago
WOW!!

What a deadly smack in the head !!

Has to be the best you've written - well done HDK.

Tim413413Tim413413almost 10 years ago
Not enough emotion

from any of the three. Ashley cried and dabbed her eyes. Jeff looked nervous. Tom had no emotions. I expected more from HDK.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
great way

5 stars

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
fuck her

Leave that sorry assed bitch. She was part of the plan. What? Can't part from the money? Fuck her.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
revenge

the never ending revenge. Jeff`s family loves tom and the two cheaters are torn

with never ending guilt.. to bad tom`s life is going to be crap.

edwusaedwusaalmost 10 years ago
Silly Sugna, Silly Tw0Cr0ws

Sugna -- see Tw0Cr0ws quote from the story: "What would my two kids, Arlene and Jeffrey, think of me if I shot their mom?" See? Kids. As far as learning the truth goes, she is still in the process of getting the message. Carry that Weight. Get it? That's fair. You write the ending.

Tw0Cr0ws -- nobody got shot.

One of my favorite stories.

SplitAcesSplitAcesalmost 10 years ago
I thought I'd read all of your stories

But somehow I had missed this gem. I'm sure glad I found it! I haven't read through the comments, but I would guess that I'm not alone in wishing it was not so terse. This was a brilliant concept, executed with perfection and is complete as it is; but it raises many questions that beg to be answered. I would love to see you revisit this to flesh it out; or even better, follow it up with part two to uncover all the who, what and whys.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 10 years ago
Need more

This story needs closure.

Really good concept and story line,thank you

Tw0Cr0wsTw0Cr0wsabout 10 years ago
kids

Sixteenth paragraph

What would my two kids, Arlene and Jeffrey, think of me if I shot their mom?

Amber deserves to know what she is married to.

sugnasugnaabout 10 years ago
Read it Again

Do they have kids? Didn't see anything about that. He did say he had a vasectomy, why if there were no kids? You see, kids are the only reason to stay with a shitty spouse. I would bet at any given moment 50% of married couples are only staying married for the sake of a stable home life for their kids. I didn't say happy home life, stable is good enough to raise a healthy kid. If they don't have kids, it is time to call the marriage quits. When it comes to cheating on your spouse, it is never an "accident". It certainly may be a mistake, but that is one that the cheater has to live with, not the cheated. So, once again the verdict is: Tell the truth! Let the other offended spouse know what she is married to. She may chose to wait another 18 years, but she has a right to know that her marriage is dead and who killed it. If you are not honest, it is just a matter of time before he does it again. One day she will find out that everyone lied to her with a lie of omission and she will hate you for it. The truth is the truth and it is the only way to sanity and one day, happiness!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
hmmmm

This is one of my favorites. So many possible options in this story.

Was this an accident, was it planned, will they divorce or not.

I truly would love to see another chapter.

excellent writing.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
To all of the anonymous that crying he was being made into a wimp......

Listen to what the author is trying to say! He is showing us another way how to get revenge without going all caveman on his wife and Jeff. He show he was a man by showing what he did with the kidnappers. And for his thoughts of suicide, thinking your world collapsing and family rip from you is a powerful motivator at the moment to consider suicide, albeit a bad choice.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
A 2nd Part

It is a good story and it should be further explored

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Mmmm.

Do you write ANY stories where the guy ACTUALLY stands up to (and punishes) his cheating spouse? Damn. You turned this guy into the biggest pussy as far as his wife's faithfulness is concerned. Really? You think slinking out of the house like a 12yr old was the best way of dealing with infidelity? I understand that he didn't have to shoot them both to teach them a life lesson,but at least wake them up...and kick someone's ass!

IGotYurWifeIGotYurWifeabout 10 years ago
NEVER! ........

Lose your head over a piece of ass. Man up Tom, you pussy.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
The reality is that she is a cheating woman...

There is no forgiveness for their unforgivable and preplanned scurrilous cheating. And, to do it so in such a physical location as to guarantee being caught. Clearly there is no respect for him. Tom should quietly divorce her (with all the family knowing the "why") and making her an outcast. He is the hero and she and Jeff are the low life villains.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
That is fantastic revenge

Both of them know how little they are trusted, how small they are in his eyes. While I'm a big BTB fan, this may be the ultimate. And all it takes for the next 50 years is just a dig here and there to let them both know that you assume they are still low life bottom feeding cheaters, but that you are willing to put up with their cheating.

Nice 'un!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
I think that he should have dropped the bomb on them in the hospital

The hospital would have been the perfect place to exact a fitting revenge rather than the lame ended this story had. Just imagine the two cheaters exposed in the hero's hospital room after he saved the pricks wife and daughter. There is no way in hell that I would ever take that cheating bitch back. He did not owe his friend the use of his wife that's for sure. I have saved several peoples lives over the years but I have never felt they owed me anything. I drive allot for my job and I have come across a number of motor vehicle accidents. I was there at the right time and place and able to use my safety training to help out.

Lonewolf2013

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
What the heck happened?

Started off OK,then turned to shit. So....all he gets out of this hospital stay is a cheating wife and friend,neither of which he can trust. Even though he was really trying to guilt them by his hospital bed(by giving his tacit approval),he's given his permission to cheat together.If he was to deny Ashley intimacy for any length of time,that permission to stray could be used against him,whether he really meant that approval or not.In reality he's given her Card Blanche to have affairs not just with Jeff,but anyone. Re:"Show me a small amount of respect and I won't interfere with you fucking other men." Bad,bad,move. He better be able to get it up for her,or that statement is going to come back to bite him in the ass.

Tw0Cr0wsTw0Cr0wsabout 10 years ago
debts

If Tom owes Jeff for saving his life, then what does Jeff owe Tom for saving his wife and children ?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Good story - bad ending

Yeah, he laid a head trip on Jeff. But he never got any real revenge on either of the cheaters and he admits that he was never going to trust Ashley again. Who wants to live life like that? Better to get a divorce.

rightbankrightbankover 10 years ago
the hero cousin and loving planned to cheat

the wife planned to cheat.

The cheating cousin planned to cheat.

the trusting friend/husband was set up with extra booze and disregarded.

the unsuspecting wife and daughter were deliberately scheduled to arrive the day after the rendezvous, by design.

By accident the unsuspecting cuckold saved the lives of the cheating husband's family.

Do the two cheaters deserve to get off without consequences?

Hell No!

And, the whole family knows it! Get Real!!

SyrustheVirusSyrustheVirusover 10 years ago

Why don't you ever finish your stories? Right when they start to get interesting you stop writing..... that is cheap!

Storm113Storm113over 10 years ago
Finish This please

I know it's pretty much complete, but I would really like to know what hppens next. Gave it a 4 instead of a 5 for that reason. Still enjoyed it though.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Nice ending..

But I would keep her around just so that I could spend money, none of it on her. Separate bedrooms, never touch her, certainly never fuck her. And if she complained about the lack of sex, I'd just tell her I imagine she was getting all she needed elsewhere. Plus, with an infected cunt like hers, for me to use two or three condoms at the same time wouldn't let me get the job done.

Gentlemen, there many ways to skin a cat and sometimes not divorcing and writing them off is the best form of revenge. Keep her around to keep the house clean, cook some meals and some conversation. Past that? Not much else...

2ndThoughts2ndThoughtsover 10 years ago
His Decision

Having laid guilt trips, doubt about their future fidelity, their character and the suggestion they keep on fucking...three things are going to happen...

1) His image of what he saw and knew would continue to manifest and grow bigger and more difficult for him to deal with!

2) She would get rattled, hurt, horny and in need of release to the point that she convinced herself that he really wanted her to cheat and to leave him alone.

2) She would feel helpless and unloved to the point that she finally decided 'What the Hell', she was a cheater and he didn't believe she was or could be faithful so...next opportunity with anyone interesting - "SHE Will Get Laid! After all, we know she didn't have any moral scruples and only needs a little flirtation or excuse to consider a little play time SO>>>>>>>

If you had written a follow-up to this fantasy story, I'm wagering that I'm on the right track. This guy is an old fashioned romantic and was totally and emotionally in love with her. What he saw, what he realized, he could never again believe her, trust her or eventually even touch her.

A follow-up would be interesting but then - we run the risk of you patching things up so - Good Ending!!!

Thanks!

BfreetorunBfreetorunover 10 years ago
Well, Jeff saved his life once so he owes him. His bitch slut wife (she planned this)

deserves all the mistrust she gets. I hope she suffers. If this was real life instead of a story this marriage would not last.

EgoTrixiEgoTrixiover 10 years ago
Would have liked an other ending...

...they got off too easy for my taste. Nevertheless: Well written, even though you seemed to rush at the end.Do not let the "Anonymous´s" impress you: They are too wimpy themselves to sign with their names, a habbit they share with many "micro-cocked" (let us call them) "men".

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
nother

wimp hdk wimpy tale, maybe an autobiography

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago

1 stupid mother fuck wimp ass

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
WIMPY

burger. -0*

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago

Fuck! another little jnr wimp on the way. Connor's lepers.

amyyumamyyumover 10 years ago
Original, entertaining, and more

The word "awesome" is overused, but is the only one I can think of to adequately describe this story; 5++++

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
NOTHER

hdk crapola, like jpb

FD45FD45almost 11 years ago
Read again

And I have to say, every time I've read this story, I am more and more horrified by it.

This is not a critique of the writing (there were a few sins in that regard). Nor is it a ding against the realism, or the quality of the mind fuck.

However...as a writer, I take a look at the plot threads and I cast them in the wind to see where they will go...and every time I do, I see agony, pain and loss, huge quantities for everyone involved.

Maybe it is because I am a drama king. Maybe because I favor dark stories. But this man, in his short sighted way of wanting to get 'mental pay back' is sowing the wind.

He will reap the whirlwind. Which is too bad because I generally like him.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
I Hate Open Endings...

...and this was!!!

My epilogue, she finally gets totally annoyed, angry, hurt, cold and kurt with him because of his aloofness and unwillingness to talk about the past.

In the event the children are his and as much as he had once totally loved her, adored her and felt complete with her, he would torment her until she ran off pulling her hair out (figuratively) to her parents, a girlfriend or even someone she had worked with and then, he got total custody of the children and she would get visitation and possibly even chaperoned visitation.

You write well but this guy is too deep, too emotional, too romantic and too caring to ever be able to not constantly relive the experience of that evening and night...it's too bad but they won't make it and that is sad because he really is a good husband and a real, honest man.

Epilogue here, even after all this time, would be appreciated by many, many of us!!!!!!!!!

Thanks!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
really excellent revenge

Tom is obviously capable of violence, but the mind-fuck he lays on the two cheaters is truly first rate.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
To Anymous 6/20

you can neither spell nor use proper English, yet you berate (is that word to big for you?) one of the best authors on Literotica. And no, not all his stories are reconciliation, and this is not a reconciliation story. I suppose the concept of mental revenge is just too complicated for you. BTW - proper etiquette (sorry, another big word) in comments is to criticize the story, not the author.

cantbuymycantbuymyalmost 11 years ago

the ending is perfect the way it is. everyonbe will know she is a whore and he is a hero.

she fucked him and then slept in his arms, that is not a first time thing.

if you do write a follow up, and i hope you dont, have a DNA that makes the kids be someone elses.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Please add a sequel

Please add a sequel. It's been three years. Let Tom come to some closure. Let him bang Amy and Amber and reconcile with Ashley. Or not. It is time for Jeff to pay.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Just fuck my wife/yr whore

The author is a cuck and cock succer.

beside the above, he writes well, so ask Lit to have Cuck section and post yr crap there

Mustang88LXMustang88LXalmost 11 years ago
Applause for sugna and firas01

You both have great views on this. But someone else does not seem to like it. they are so far up HDK's butt it is pathetic.

Mustang88LXMustang88LXalmost 11 years ago
Still a weak ending

Sorry Cantbuymy, you went a little deep. HDK just didn't finish it. It looks a little weak. Could have used a epilogue or something. She is now free to fuck anyone. And will he be real and not have sex with her again or will he be a wimp and let his cheating bitch wife shit all over him?

cantbuymycantbuymyabout 11 years ago

the story is finished. too many people know they were fucking and that hubby saved the studs lchildren and wife and did it with a blade in his chest, chasing the bad guy down. everyone will know it was not a secret. come on, dickens wrote the last line of a tale of two cities with something like, It is a far far better place i go than i have ever been before; it is a far far better thing i do than i have ever done before, or something like that.

was it bad because he did not write how he walked up the steps, how bad he felt, the hands on his body forcing him to kneel, placing his head in the device. his view of the bucket where other severed heads had faled before. the look of fresh blood and the smell of death in the straw that failed to soak up the blood so that it ran like water in the place de la concorde. is dickens a wimp author becasue he did not describe the act and terror of the beheading or was his last statements enough?

HDK finished it, you have to look at the beheading yourself without the description being written for you. the marriage is over, what is left is not a marriage. duh.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago

Did she or didn't she? Did they stay together or not? We will never know, because like so many LW writers this one does not have the balls to finish it. Rather let us use our imagination.

If he finishes it where they stay together, then his scores will suffer. If they divorce his score will go up.

Just finish what you started, coz what you have is good. So damn tired of these open endings

firas01firas01about 11 years ago
There is an eternal question

when cheating like this takes place, a best friend and a loving wife who didn't show any signs that she is dissatisfied with the marriage, when they cheat and it was clear that they did plan for it, thought about it, and try to make it happen, they were not both drunk and found themselves in bed by accident, she did not fuck the other guy and after the rush cooled came back running to her husband bed, SO, the question is, was this their first time, and if they are planning a first, is it logical to have it in the family house where they could be discovered, no, but if it was a full blown affair then probably they got careless because they have done before and were not caught. The eternal question is, does he know his wife and best friend enough to assume that they will feel guilty and by this he is punishing them, does the question that people change ever entered his mind and did he wonder that the man he knew all his life and the woman he fell in love have changed and he did not realize it or notice it, his wife planned on fucking another man under his nose, isn't that a clue enough that this a selfish woman who doesn't care about her husband, and her reaction after she was found out was simply as it is, being found and by a member of her family and not because that she faced the horrible truth that she has cheated on her husband, . I know that authors try to find new plot all the time and new angles the life long story of adultery, all i am trying to do here is discussing the idea of punishment by guilt,, the writing is the best as usual, thanks for sharing.

cantbuymycantbuymyabout 11 years ago

giving a shit about doing something is different than giving a shit about others knowing and more than the fuck buddies and the hero know, so it will get out.

sugnasugnaabout 11 years ago
Flaw

There is a flaw in your characters revenge plan: They don't give a shit! If they were decent people they wouldn't intentionally gotten him drunk, and went of to fuck! They are selfish, low class shit. What he should have done is to be honest, let the whole family know what happened, refuse the honor of having the assholes son named after him - who'd want their name on a cheaters kid? Let all the nurses know what happened and ask them to keep those people away from you so you can heal up and get out of the hospital. Then call your lawyer and get a divorce. Move on. There is nothing worse than living a lie in a sham marriage. Fuck it.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago

Sorry but you wrote 2 different characters for Tom. The guy who saved his neice is an entirely different person from the one in the hospital. Boy he really showed Jeff too didn't he. Hoping a person who just plyed you with alcohol so he could fuck your wife in the same house as you has enough conscience to feel ashamed about it is like asking the Taliban to feel ashamed about killing americans. Not very likely so that part fell way short of intended target. A guy who is tough enough to go through all that he did while saving his neices is not the kind of guy who would just say please be discreet while fucking my wife in the future so you don't humiliate me and my standing with the family. Those 2 characteristics don't make sense in the same person. A guy like that would definitely not wimp out in the way you just had this guy do. Come to think of it though, maybe the hero action is the part that is out of character for him because he was acting real wimpy when he had the gun too. Hmmmmmmmmm!?!? Seems to be a huge contradiction here!?!?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
An okay story effort....

Although, the stupid cunt got away with it [again] -that sucks!!!

cantbuymycantbuymyabout 11 years ago

this story is finished. she will forever pay. the other family members will know what happened within a week, the otehr two will say something. she fell asleep with her fuck buddy in his bed, that comes only from a casualness that comes from repitition.

and you know she will break - the pressure will be too much and he will be the good guy and she and the brother in law will be garbage. the stroy works for me just like it is.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Although

You are not writing much, I would enjoy to hear the rest of this story!!

BfreetorunBfreetorunover 11 years ago
Exceptional!

Sweet revenge and be able to feel good about it. Of course, his wife is a slut and always will be. I hope she feels uneasy the rest of her life. She will pay forever.

Yes, I realize it is just a story but you made it seem real.

Drbeamer3333Drbeamer3333over 11 years ago
Enjoyed it

It is a clever attempt at revenge. Only problem is that he will be the one suffering the most. Better to simply leave her. If he stays, she will suffer in silence for a while, eventually begin to resent him, and finally become the habitual cheat he pretended she was. He becomes a cuckold. Doesn't sound like much of a revenge plan. Thanks.

Dubby49Dubby49over 11 years ago
Fabulous Punishment

that will go on and on. Ashley has no way out without alienating her entire family.

LickideesplitLickideesplitover 11 years ago
COLD!

Once trust is thrown away, it is gone! And the effective 'stop date' for the trust is NOT at the episode where it was destroyed ... it is from the couple's FIRST memories to the indefinite future!

This is a powerful morality play! Another tale which should be required reading for both parties before granting a marriage license, and annually ever after!

5.9 = 5*

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
I gave it 5 stars ...

... his revenge was perfect.

Panther Fan.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
HDK - Your one of the best

I read this story and actually really liked how it ended. Unexpected, but too the point. It was her problem now and he would either accept her efforts or he would decline them, but none of the groveling and wondering whether he was man enough. He KNOWS he is man enough, the question now is she woman enough?

It sorted reminded me of Clint Eastwood in Grand Tourino (sp?). A very clever way to deal with the situation. And like that movie your ending is very original and not much like many here. I wish you would write more your humor, and twists are fun to read and really to the point.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
the Title...

...says it all. nicely done! I LOL'ed. I love the black humor. seems that some readers did not get it, oh well.

cantbuymycantbuymyover 11 years ago
not the first time

She did it before. she went to sleep after fucking him - women don't do that on a first fuck, they get out of dodge if it is not their bed. and everyone will know - there was another family group there and they will eventually talk. the bitch and her stud will fall and damn soon.

chytownchytownover 11 years ago
Good Read***

Good story thanks for sharing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
HDK

You are a very gifted and talented writer. You kept the reader involved the entire story. It was a fast-paced, heart racing plot. I loved the story, but hate the notion of such a noble and courageous protagonist being stuck with a cheating bitch. Dump the bitch at the end, and its perfect.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
great story

please keep writing .it looks like you slowed down lately.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
I gave it 5 stars ...

... HDN that was a very interesting and entertaining story. It does cry for another chapter. I would be interested on how you see the long term affect of the "weight" on these complex charactors. Will it cause a change for good or worst.

MattblackUKMattblackUKalmost 12 years ago
One of the best stories on the site

I have been a professional writer for over 25 years.

Your story rocks!

auhunter04auhunter04almost 12 years ago
IF

If you cannot forgive and move on, move out

no need to suffer yourself to make someone else suffer

the old saying 'when diging a grave for revenge, dig two' is right

cantbuymycantbuymyalmost 12 years ago
i keep coming back here

this is just a great story. you know everyone will know she is a cheating whore and he is being the man and you know she will be dumped sooner than later. very subtle. well done.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago

the better option - I think - is to avoide even the need to be concerned with trust issues for Ashley. Go forward without her, and maintain a happier life without her.

And Jeff, any debt is paid. Sentimentality toward the cheaters is gone, with eyes directed elsewhere.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
a hero who ran from a adultress wife

why did he not even the scorel he was not a wimp but his lack of action made him weak. he will get a divorce because he cannot accept her cheating and will never trust her again.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
HDK

Another "Nice" cuck story! Glad to know your readers can "count" on you just like Tom can "count" on Ashley to be "faithful" when it comes to telling the truth!!!

TavadelphinTavadelphinabout 12 years ago
Some ambivalence -

Ambivalence because I understand the mindset that had him turn around and walk away from the scene after NOT suiciding (that would have been the runaway option IMHO) he had a debt of honor to the bastard and so he decided it was paid and he would walk away not everyone's choice but still has integrity. But there is not enough clear detail in the story to give any sense of comfort about WHY or how often they do make a difference in this story as laid out.

We have to assume it was planned by at least Jeff from the start it MAY have been a follow up to something from their past and Ashley was vulnerable (not excusing folks just looking for knowledge) or it could have been conspiratorial and consistent (no ground work for that - the behavior was odd enough he caught on immediately) - sooo if this was a pattern or she is capable of that level of deceit then his tactic may work for a while but is more likely to fail although not absolutely - otherwise the guilt is likely to keep her straight as an arrow longer than he is likely to care heh.

The rest of the family is likely to feed into this as they learn about what happened as is almost certain to happen.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago

What a wimp of a man. Bad story, cause that wimpy excuse of a man should have tossed her halfway through the room..unsatisfying ending

IrfonIrfonabout 12 years ago
Ha!

No one seems to notice that his wife wasn't drunk.......

Therefore she knew it was going to happen and gladly cheated - AND she did it bareback !!

Damned if I could do as the Author wrote.

I don't think his wife will stay true,and she will cheat again.

This story left me angry and uncomfortable,as I was not at all satisfied with the ending.....which means that it must have been a well written story !!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
cantbuymybrain

because he doesn't have one. face up to cuckhood boy, you imagine additional infidelity even if the author omits it because that floats your boat. come out of the closet - your denials are embarrassing.

betrayedbylovebetrayedbyloveabout 12 years ago
Just Fair

Tom is a better man than me. I would not be so accommodating to my cheating wife and my friend who betrayed me. I don't know exactly how I would have handled it but it would be different. Perhaps a "Carry That Weight" Redux might be coming.

We'll see...

HA

cantbuymycantbuymyabout 12 years ago
Johnny

it is a story with implication and insinuations. the wife said it happened only once and my comment was to that and it being a lie, by implication. he gave her permission to continue because that was all he could do, to save the kids. his marriage was over, it was a lie, just like her "one time" statement. of course it is fiction, like all these stories, but it was supposed to have a moral or theme, and she and lover were going to have to carry the weight, especially her. in the end the weight would crush them, others knew about it and the hero took the high ground for his kids, knowing the low ground would soon turn into quicksand, because the others would talk eventually. i like the theme, not sure about keeping the bitch, but that is not the story i read here.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
poor Johnny

The closet cuckolds that dominate this category sprout wood based on long term rampant cuckoldry, not one night stands. If it isn't in the story, they fantasize and add it in. Let them get their jollies how they want.

Johnny1MJohnny1Mabout 12 years ago
Stupid comment:

the more i think about this

the more i believe she and he had been doing it a long time. you dont get fucked by someone and curl up with them for a nights sleep if it was a first time.

This isn't a real story. The author made it up. Got it? So if he says it was just once, it was just once. If he wanted us to believe it was a long term affair, he would have told us. If you want a different story, write it yourself. I do not understand readers making comments like the above. You might write something like, "I don't feel the story is consistent, because I believe that any woman who curls up and sleeps with a lover all night, wouldn't have done it if it was a first time." Of course that doesn't make sense and the author implies it isn't true, but whatever floats your boat. Just don't write as if you know more about the background of the story than the author. That makes no sense.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
To quote Tom "That's what I want to hear, Ashley,"

and to finish Tom's thoughts " that way I can keep eating Jeff' creampies he leaves in your slimy cunt". If this isn't the biggest Cuck/Wimp story on this site .. well I don't know what is! Go Cuck Yourself Harddaysknight!

Scorpio44Scorpio44about 12 years ago
The gate is open...

and permission given for Jess to keep fucking his wife. It will likely happen again and they will get caught, again. I guess that makes him the willing cuckold.

The story was well written and flowed well.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
it's "you hurt me

and I'm going to make goddamn good and sure you feel like shit for the rest of your fucking lives."

sounds like a fair trade to me

no one forced them to fuck, so what he did is fair and valid.

cantbuymycantbuymyover 12 years ago
the more i think about this

the more i believe she and he had been doing it a long time. you dont get fucked by someone and curl up with them for a nights sleep if it was a first time.

count2threecount2threeover 12 years ago
All hail the Wimp ...

"Lets make suicide infront of them, that will make them feel guilty when they wake up"

God some Authors here really are into wimp-porn...

DunaDunaover 12 years ago

There is a 5th alternative the mutual suxual activity (swapping,swinging and the true open marriage), however to bring up children well the best the monogamous (with faithful or relative faithful spouses) family. I suggest to read on SOL (storiesonline.net) from Flavian's newer story the "Biggest and Best". Excellent example......

DunaDunaover 12 years ago

He could decide on these alternatives:

1. Divorce soon after the affair, to struggle the custody (generaly lost it) to divade the assets etc. However the exhusband psichic integrity will be 100%.

2. Divorce when his less child becomes 14 years old. Te children can go to his new condo/apartman/condo freely the custody is not a obstacle to meet his children..

Some years together without love and less psichic integrity.

3. Divorce when the less child becomes 18 years old. The children are adults and the effects of their future life is the least. More years together without true love and less psichic integrity.

4. To live together long time and to hope the wife does not cheat again. If the wife a little slut the likelihood of the cheating is almost 95% (15% of the wives). If the wife is an average bitch the likelihood of the cheating is 70% (25% of the wives), if the the wife a relative fidelity wife the likelihood of the cheating is 20% (15% of the wives).

cantbuymycantbuymyover 12 years ago
since others already know

the husband will get his revenge by "trusting" his wife and denying her his love. you know that the others will finally find out so this is a real ass kicking for the cheaters. and the dude will always have to call his child by the cuckolds name and fear that the wife will find out.

not my way of doing things but it sure as hell works.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
better to wallow in cuckhood

than headtrip the betrayers. WBC prefer the humiliation, not let on so maybe some photos/film, then exposure to the world so the humiliation of the cuckoldry really hits home, then they blow their little loads.

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