All Comments on 'Carry That Weight'

how is being disappointed in her a punishment. Parents, kids, grandparent and teachers get disappointed. Slut get divorced, not some bullshit about living with the pain of not being trusted.

First, anon on 11/12/2011, what he did to Jeff with the head trip was far worse than what he could have done by beating the shit out of him. Jeff will carry his guilt and fear for the rest of his life. I am sorry you are not able to see that.

The story was fairly good but had one big missing for me. He never asked her why she did it. She said it was a mistake. What the hell does that mean? She could have meant "It was a mistake because I thought his dick was bigger than it was."

Regardless of the amount of alcohol, I would want to know just exactly what went through her mind when she laid down and spread her legs. If you do happen to write a sequel, which I doubt, please explore that question.

What a pussy the bastard fucks your wife and you basically pat him on the back and tell him nice job utter bullshit

All that's missing is revenge sex with Amber.

I have been rereading a few of HDK's stories because there just aren't many good new stories on the site.

As I read comments I must confess, I just don't get it.

Why all of the over analyzing?

HDK stories are known to be short while providing sufficient substance to allow for reader creativity.

I don't know of any other author on this site that can provide as much entertainment in as few word as HDK.

Stories like "Back to Bristol" by GaryAPB which are 22 chapters long are the type of story to analyze.

These types of stories are also good but delve into far more environmental and emotional background for the reader.

HDK's stories are just as good but are meant to be lighter and in most cases just a fun read. Doing math calculations on the the number of rooms? Seriously?

With this story as most of the HDK stories, a sequel would just detract from the original story.

I miss your writing HDK.

While there are other good authors on this site, no one currently fills the void of the types of good stories you have given us.

Thanks.

Your story leaves a lot of options for a sequel. I suspect that many of your readers would like to see a follow on.

Thanks for writing!

Please consider a sequel. I think Ashley was sincere and it would be worthwhile to see how she held up under the stress of his distrust.

is that Jeff planned to get him drunk. There was little in the story that let me believe it was a drunken accident, though that was essentially what Ashley claimed. If you had shown where the three of them had been drinking and then he fell asleep and then it happened it would have been more believable. None the less, a good story.

Yeah, Jeff needed to lose his family. But he didn't want to hurt Amber after saving her and her baby and Jeff's daughter Amy. Jeff will have to live with that as he showed himself as not much of a man or friend.

Ashley would probably not make it very long in real life as this all will be passed around the family. Jeff will be disgraced along with her because his daughter Amy and Amber will want no longer respect Jeff for screwing the hero's wife while the hero was saving theirs.

I liked the story, and yes, a sequel would be wonderful even at this late date...

Misused words. Poor sentence structure in places.

But...I still gave it a five. I loved the story. It very much worked for me.

I would suggest you read Ashely's statements out loud and see if you think a human being speaks like that. Hint: they don't. Not so much.

Still, I loved the story and your writing has improved. You do interesting stories. Grammer and spelling can be fixed with practice

most of the anonymous trolls on Lit are not literate or mature enough to understand a story like this. Most of all, they cannot understand the method that HDK uses when writing a LW story.

It's all about the plot twists. It's all about originality. It's all about not writing the same story that everyone else has written time and again. I challenge anyone to write a couple of dozen LW stories and have a couple of dozen different plot twists and different takes on the genre. Most writers on this site write the same story over and over again, only changing the character names.

And of course, the anon trolls are looking for one thing only: torch the bitch. That is their criteria for judging the worthiness of a story. The kind of payback used by the husband in this story is far too subtle for the limited intellectual and emotional capacities of this crowd.

Nice, well written with a great twist. I keep rereading it. Write a sequel.

... was not one of your best would be like saying the Hindenburg had a "small" leak! This story proves that even the best writers on Literotica can still post some really bad tales! Sorry Harddaysknight but this "post" just sucked!! Maybe next time .. huh?

Great story with a great revenge twist at the end. Years of guilt for the two perps.

They should post this story as it is by far the worst and dumbest story i have ever read, retarded is all i can say about this so called author.

with a bunch of people there, then fell asleep afterward - no way was this the first time. The plan to get him drunk went awry and they got busted, now they have to live with the consequences (if that is what you can call them).

Deluded sister in law is kept in the dark while the adulterers are punished by a guilt trip (pretty weak, but whatever). Would be fairly easy to find out if sis in law is the kind of person who would want to know if her spouse was a cheater and if so - tell her.

No clue what he actually does or does not believe or what he will or will not do - awesome -

but in this case, I think she should have been toast. Just my opinion.

Talk about a lost of trust. How does he know his two children are his? I am suspicious of Ashley stating it was hers and Jeff's first time. Seems like he planned it, as Tom states by giving him beers knowing he is fly weight. And there must have some attraction between Ashley and Jeff before this family reunion. Afterall, what was so important or compelling, that she had to stay up after her husband went to bed? She should have retired with him. I mean, Jeff was able to seduce her pretty quick or was it Ashley who seduced him?

Great story!

Tell her she may do jeff or anyone else, and not worry about him. The reason, they are over it no longer was a concern for him. No need for pretenses or facades. They don't stay together and he is actually happy thereafter. For her, so it goes.

Even after several reads I still enjoy this story. Thanks!!!!

This is one of your best ... fast pace, plenty of emotion, action and a very clever husband (Tom). Shit, I wish I could think as fast on my feet, sorry I mean on my back, as Tom in this story.

..Amber should have been told. Cheaters must suffer pain and humiliation before reconciliation.

I was wondering if you were going to add to this story.It leaves some things to be said i think the strain of living with guilt like that would be too much for anyone to bear and i was just looking for your thoughts on this.Thank you for all your stories.please keep up the good work.

EVEN HE COULDN'T PITCH A NO-HITTER EVERY TIME.

This is the HDK I like and look forward to reading. Yes it is not as free flowing as others but in away it works for this one. It kind of like a black and white detective movie shot at odd angles. The more I think about it the more I like it, not for all of the stories just this one.

I love the HDK twists and turns and side comments. I hope he leaves the linear stories to others and keep us guessing.

how about a nice creampie?

So I guess you can be allowed the occassional stinker

You have a high action scene and say the man appears ready to strike! the woman? Then the mother exited! the van? Poor, poor choice of words to describe action. Kills the emotion of the scene.

Did enjoy the mind game at the end, but could have been expanded a little to show real anger over betrayal. Pretty hard to accept Jeffo working to get hubby drunk; even more to accept hubby being such a doofus over drinking beer at all.

I do enjoy a good mind fuck!!!! lol

Keep up the good work, HDK

In this category one always hears, 'that is so trite', 'same old, same old'.

This story has passion and originality.

I see the anonymous wimp Nazis are still here, trying make sure the rest of the male persuasion are just as machismo and immature as they are. You know, I truly believe these guys secretly watch soap operas and are part of that group of mostly women who actually believe the characters on those soap operas are real people. I guess they also could be a bunch of teenagers or adult losers who've never been married and think that being married is the same as going steady and all you have to do is break up.

To the author: Keep on writing entertaining stories and don't let these cowardly jerks who won't even sign their name get you down.

I THINK THEY SHOULD CHANGE THIS SITE NAME TO "WIMP INK". I DON'T CARE HOW MUCH YOU LOVE A WOMAN, IF SHE IS SCREWING AROUND ON YOU SHE DOESN'T LOVE YOU. I DON'T CARE IF IT IS ONCE OR A THOUSAND TIMES.

BY THE WAY THE WAY YOU WRITE, HOW OFTEN DO YOU CHANGE YOUR KOTEX?

and I loved the ending!

She demonstrated contempt for him by screwing Jeff a few feet away from where he lay sleeping. A few words explaining where that lack of respect came from would have improved the tale. A woman doesn't do this kind of thing to the man she loves.

after saying be discreet...'ashely, you seriously nevergave to worry about my feeling or what you think are my feelings, again. i'm going in without you and the children, the property, money and so on will be worked out. Be it jeff, or anyone else, i won't be a reason for you not to. NOW, please go...'

Not big on wasting my life making people feel guilty, if he can't get over it and enjoy life with her, move on and enjoy it with someone else, as we all find out, life is to fucking short to waste it. Well written and really enjoyed it, just not the way I would handle it. Thanks.

It was very exciting up to the ending. Then the passionless way he dealt with wife and her lover was just too cold and tactical, aside from that, it's not even a very good revenge. As far as the people who are asking for a part two, I don't understand it. Him acting like a living martyr, continuing his marriage with her, lying to everyone they know including their children, in what will now be a loveless marriage. That doesn't sound like a good read to me.

I felt it was kind of soulless, like with the dialogue and everything the characters were just doing everything by rote or something.

LOL! Like this. different and the characters seems to have a heart.

Needs part 2

I think I have commented before.

My comment here is to wonder if it is possible to publish POL's sequel to this story on this site although he has no presence here. It is worth being appended to the story.

Thanks.

Excellent story. It certainly gives one food for thought. Keep up the good writing.

This is a wonderful story. It should give others food for thought as to encourage better thinking for their revenge stories that the Neanderthal mental format that is so prevalent in many of these stories. Loved it.

excellent story all though how long she will keep up with that pressure on her is the next question, soon one of them will crack. Thanks for the entertainment. Mike from Texas

When you cheat, trust is gone, without trust there is no marriage. She cheated, kick her to the curb and try again.

Heh! Love it!

But you should have written this for the "Humor & Satire" section, and then not posted it.

HDK it is a good story but it does need a second part. How you have left it is not clear and it should have a follow up.

Another great story from one of the best!

As with all your works, excellent story. I hope you continue it, for better or worse (hopefully better, but she has a LOOONG way to go if she ever earns redemption)

First, in general your work is top shelf!

Second, and in specific to this story, the response is perfect. No one (except perhaps someone whose head is residing in a body cavity in which it does not belong) can call the protagonist a wimp. Tom's response is perfect. Until now Jeff had the high ground, he had saved Tom's life. Now not only has this high groung been taken, but Jeff has been driven into a swamp.

As to the wife, Ashley, she will live forever knowing that the entire family believes her husband, the man she has betrayed, is the bravest of the brave, the best of the best, the ideal man. All of this while knowing that he has no reason to trust her. Wearing a condom when they have sex would be a tremendous put down of her. It would say, "I'm keeping you for appearances sake, but I don't trust you", every time they had sex.

In some ways, it would be interesting to see a follow-up, say two -years down the road to see where they are. On the other hand, maybe it is better for all of us to conjure up our own image of where they are at that point.

even if it was their first time cheating? We live in an age when Presidents, sport/entertainment icons and just regular people manage their "shame." They go off to rehab clinics, anger management sessions and other retreats for a time and then come back new and unshamed. Based upon your story, within six months Ashley would have done her pennace for her " strayed only the one time, with Jeff" and she will be tired of Tom making her feel like shit. So they will either reconcil or things will get worse for Tom. Note I did not say bad for Ashley since the time for Tom to act on her mistake would have passed. He will be the bad guy because he will not let it go even if the one night cheating comes out later. What the World will see is that Tom accepted her mistake. Tom saying "I made them feel shame" will not be understood six months later. Tom's family and friends will only see a man who is being spitefull and mean to his wife. That is why I called Tom a wimp. A wimp is someone who betrays his or her core values for expediency. Tom had felt so strongly about their cheating that he had went to violence. Violence is while being human is just stupid - he had kids who needed him. By the way, I see no impact on Jeff from Tom's shame revenge.

Anyway, let see a sequel so we can see how this will play out.

Wimps, like heroes, are made not born! Saving a child and accepting a cheating spouse have nothing to do with each other. It is so like a women (or in this case a non-man) scorned, to just lay a big guilt trip on the cheating spouse. Admittedly murdering Jeff would definitely be a bit of overkill, delivering a lesson in "don't fuck my wife" etiquette using the gun stock is perfectly acceptable. Letting Amber know about her cheating husband, and getting a revenge fuck (or at least a knob job) would go a long way towards getting his man card back. I would like to believe his motivations have more to do with her money and I would hope he plans on getting himself a girlfriend in the near future.

How did it happen? How long had Jeff and Ashley been carrying on? How long would it be before Jeff or Ashley cracks and confesses their sins? Tom then can move on to the younger and cuter cousin.

Another example of why HDK is the best!

Fine story - by making the revenge so simple, ultimately it was the best. The only question is if that guilt is used for good or bad. Your guilt can make you a better person, or you can be crushed by it and become resentful. No doubt that they deserved that cross. Now it up to them to bear (is that right) it. Thanks again to the author.

You still alive? I thought one motherfucker expired due to septicaemia in his asshole. Afterall it has been used sooooo much by so many people.

There are no words for how perfect this is. I almost don't want to read any more stories. This is the ultimate revenge.

Is beliving this was the first and only time she sliped up. Doesn't sound like much of a marriage or life and why put yourself through hell cause someone else fucked up, he needs love and sex himself. Well written, as always, thanks.

The revenge was even worse than a physical one. We both know he wasn't sincere when he told them to continue there affair discretely. That was much more powerful than asking why and hearing her feeble protestations. His marriage may be essentially over, but he kept his pride and made the adulterers feel like shit, and he has them worrying about when, if ever, he'll spill the beans.

I, too, wonder if this was the first time. It seemed too set up to be an accidental coupling, but it could have been planned and still be the first time. No matter how drunk Tom gets when he overdoes it, a serial cheating wife would be smart enough to leave her lover's bed and return to her husband's just in case. Who knows when he might awaken.

Can Ashley regain his trust and love? Can Tom eventually forgive and trust again? Will their marriage survive this? Just as in my favorite HDK story, "Eleanor Rigby", I believe we need a second chapter to resolve these issues. I know, we can provide our own resolution, but give us a break. I'll do anything to read more from you.

Loved the Beatles title, and it is appropriate. The weight of guilt and shame weighs quite heavily on a person. In my case, my least favorite time of day is when I shave. I can fool myself into believing I'm still the strong, sort of handsome fellow I was in my thirties, but then who is that old man looking back at me from the mirror? Such will be Jeff and Ashley's punishment. Unless they are completely evil, which I doubt, they too will have to look at this every day. As I said in my intro, a very thought provoking and excellent story. Thanks, HDK. Paul

For this revenge to work, we need some background on the personalities of the two villains to make sure that it is effective for them. If they don't respect you, they do not give a shit how you feel about them. The other part is that their shame should be publicized to a limited degree, e.g. the other wife has the right to know. It is not your right to leave her in the dark.

<br>Another little thing is that Jeff can't be considered a hero because his despicable behavior saved his family.

<br>Finally, a little more was needed to show how things progressed for the next few months after he left the hospital.

<br>Thanks for writing.

This was a very enjoyable story with a moral too rarely seen in these genre. The greatest pain is that which you inflict upon yourself, but it takes a wise man to unleash it. The two cheaters were not totally bad people, and because of that, this unusual punishment is evermore effective.

Oh the inhuman pain Tom inflicted! Is this the bottom of the plot barrel for LW stories? This is really awful. Tom catches the couple naked. Kill 'em? Kill himself? Nope, run away. But Tom becomes the accidental hero and is almost killed. The consequences: GUILT TRIP. He says to Jeff, who set the dirty deed up, "Gee. if you hadn't fuck my wife, I'd never been able to save your family." Wife says I'm really, really sorry through Crocodile tears. "I've only been fucked 1 time (well 1 time by the Red Chinese Army). Now you're saying you're forgiving me just to make me feel guilty. Well, I come from a long line of rich, phony snobs and this is the role I was born to play (until i get bored with you again Tiny Weiner)."

By the way this is all based on a faulty assumption: "that hurting or disappointing those I love was more painful in the long run than an old fashion ass whipping." The author is falsely assuming that Jeff and Ashley, people who planned to betray Tom, have consciences or even like him.

...NFL got da rights bro!-Pay up!-Fun story HDK and deb and wing wang and you other dolts please stop misconstruing what constitutes "wimp" behavior and better yet stop trying to analyze that which is not a subject for analysis. Better you spend your time doing sudoku or maybe gleaning gnats from your lovers hair or some other anal retentive OCD behavior.Or just Hold your breaths till the Richmond Rotgut releases his latest bombastic barrage of beer infused mutterings.With luck he'll be passed out and so will you!

The setting - Agnes explains to the hero of the story [at the hospital] that poorly little slut wife Ashley is "mortally ashamed" to face the wimp husband.

So after fawning over the fact that she is invited to sit next to the cluck victim of this story, her reaction to hearing her husband's speech to Jeff is to "swear that the male cheater will never touch her again" and by the way, poor Jeff [and herself] feel really terrible about the speech and feels unfairly misjudged by the hero husband. Oh my, ""He's going to suffer, Tom"" - what a repentant slut wife we have as a main character.

Ashley's remorseful dialogue:

"Tom, you're harder now than you were before this mess. Jeff will never touch me again, even if I wanted him to, and I don't. Now he'll always worry that you believe he and I are having an ongoing affair. It was only that once, Tom, and it was an awful mistake. It won't happen again. Jeff must feel terrible after what you told him. He'll always worry that Amber will find out about us. So will I, for that matter. He's going to suffer, Tom.

Yikes - with friends and slut wife like Ashley & Jeff, who needs the Taliban?

Just some additional thoughts on this "interesting twist" on the "cheating slut gets away with it again" genre.

This was a fun story despite trying to keep straight who was related to who. The end was wonderful, the ultimate revenge that will haunt her and Jeff forever. Thanks and keep writing for us.

I'm confused - Jeff created an alibi while those he hired were doing away with his wife and child. They didn't go after the mother-in-law - clearly tried to kill the pregnant mother and kidnap then ransome / kill the daughter.<P>

The question of why is answered by inherited money, insurance money and a new wife from the same money tree.<P>

If it isn't that then the story has gaping holes and isn't very credible.<P>

Perhaps the second chapter will enlighten us.

This was a good and well written story. Something us readers tend to expect from you. Just one thing, you left a few questions at the end of the story that leads me to think that there will be a sequel to this story. We, the readers have to know if the wife and his best friend can redeem themselves...or go out in a not so glorious finish. I personally, like happy endings but see that anything will work well for and ending.

Not the typical Harddaysknight fair. Better proofing required with this one, guy. Still enjoy the works and effort, though. Thanks.

Nope, I don't think it was the first time. I think he may have been drugged when they saw Tom was not asleep as soon as they hoped.

Good read as always. How could Tom be a wimp? He is still healing from his wounds and has not had time to really "deal" with anything. Just because there was no violence does not mean the revenge will not be exacted.

in the beginning. That was some twist at the end, if Momma ever found out Ashley and Jeff would be disowned, tared and feathered or worse. It's like the Godfather, nothing happens while Momma is alive.

Guy saves a Buddy. Screws his wife gets Caught. Hubby leaves and saves his Family. then gets in Both of their heads by telling them to Continue Fucking. Taking the Feelings out of their Sneaking Around.

and making both Pay by telling them what he thinks of Them.

the weight which he laid upon his wayward wife and wayward best friend. That is all I'm seeing here. An interesting twist to an age old story.

There were some things I found interesting in the story. He knew Jeff was trying to get him drunk but he didn't suspect it was to be with his wife. Instead he thought he was being plied with drinks to embarrass him? I would have suspected immediately he was trying to get with the wife.

I've never found my wife in bed with another but I think my reaction would be immediate and loud. Instead, our hero vomits and then has a clear enough mind to find the hidden key, open the gun safe and select a weapon.

Then during his climb up a stair case he rules out shooting his wife and within a few more steps rules out shooting his friend. He decides to show them and kill himself but finds himself unable to physically accomplish it. That little nugget was precious. This is the man that vomited at the sight of his wife's infidelity. If he had the power to get the gun someone would have been shot. Regardless, I liked that section of the story. I enjoyed his reasoning and his angst at not being able to commit suicide.

As for the convenience store, I liked the actions there. Most of us at seeing someone we cared about being manhandled or put in serious jeopardy would react without thought. Him killing the perpetrator with two cold beers was great. I'm not going to weigh out beers but I imagine the weight of two beers is substantial and know it would be solid. The sling effect would have amplified that. It was another nice touch. What was unbelievable was that he was stabbed and didn't realize it for a significant amount of time. If you are aggressively hit in the chest, once the immediate danger is over, you reaction is to put your hand where you were hit. He would have found the knife before he got in the car. Even if somehow he didn't, I think it would be noticed in your actions of driving. Then there is the blood. There would have been a huge amount of it and it wasn't noticed?

The scene at the barn was good. I liked his idea of reporting a fire because he was familiar with the ways of volunteer fire departments. It was another interesting twist that got him fast energetic assistance.

I don't live in a black and white world but a lot of people seem to think it is that way. The world is full of shades of gray. Probably, if all parties gave it their best, there is at least a 40% chance this marriage doesn't make it. (I've pulled that number out of my ass and just wanted to be clear that reconciliation would be difficult) However, there are a lot of people that think it should end immediately with no chance at reconciliation. I recently read a line in a book that I will have to paraphrase here. It was something like, God loves to humble a man that says never. Yet there are so many people that say the man should walk away from the woman. Never mind that he was building a life with her and loved her. Never mind that his children would no longer live in a two parent home. People make mistakes all the time. There was nothing in here that proved to me that his wife hadn't done anything other than make a one time mistake. People do it all the time. It isn't always as cut and dried as she should have done the right thing. There are hormones, emotions and alcohol involved. That combination has made cheaters of many. I for one do believe it is possible for most people to make a one time mistake given the correct wrong circumstances. I haven't cheated on my wife and as far as I know she hasn't cheated on me. However I do know a few good people that made a one time horrible mistake. In the narrow black and white world of some, there should be no redemption or forgiveness for these. If this was a true story, how dare you dictate and label a man a wimp for making his own decisions about his life? In this fictional tale, how dare you label a man a wimp for not adhering to your narrow world view? This is a character damn it. Someone created it and your jumping on the wimp bandwagon is disgraceful and disrespectful. If you are daily attempting to prove your moral character by the name calling that happens in the comment sections, then you probably have nothing to prove.

At the very least, our hero is in the market for a new best friend. Jeff has lost that job. I would have liked for the hero to recover and give his former best friend a sound thrashing but this isn't how the author decided to play it.

All in all, it was an interesting tale with interesting twists. I enjoyed reading it and look forward to your next.

This was a well written and nicely paced story. It was certainly emotional for the husband who at first appeared to have lost all and by the end of the day he was everyone's hero and he extracted his revenge with it weighing heavily forever on the cheaters minds. Thank for sharing, great tale.

There was so much genealogy and age reference at the beginning of the story that I opened up a spreadsheet program in order track who was related to who and all possible age difference relatedness. Then suddenly I was googling architectural reference material to ascertain if fourteen bedrooms and sixteen bathrooms could safely accommodate 60 family members and not cause a code violation resulting in a visit from the local fire department (oops, I've skipped ahead in the story already!)

I must confess that as a certified math-phobic I was shaking in fearful anticipation that at any moment someone would posit that when two trains traveling toward Chicago from opposite directions pass one another at the same time the smoke goes straight up ..."

Fortunately the story changed to poignant family tale of drunkenness, fire code violations (oops there I go again) and potential frostbite issues. Thank God Amber felt the need to visit Ashley's mother and bring her because why would a daughter avoid her own mother and let her 7 months pregnant cousin drive all over holy hell!

I can't begin to tell you how relieved I was that Jeff was trying to get Tim shit face drunk - finally a plot point I can believe in! Then in a clear conspiracy with Morpheus (The god, not the Matrix character) Tim falls asleep, Tim falls asleep, Tim falls asleep - only to awaken to in empty bed ... oh Ashley!

OH ASHLEY!

(Quick fyi to all of you thinking about using a shotgun to "opt out." TAKE YOUR FUCKING SHOES OFF and use your big toe!) And now back to the comment in progress.

Then flight, then sight, then fight, then fright, then ... then haste, then chase, then call, then fall, then wake, then ... oh I give up.

Personally my money is on a lost bet.

HDK bet on the Colts (too bad, so sad) and LOST! He was therefore compelled to write the most cliche ridden, take it far afield and somehow pull it back together by the end story that he could ever imagine.

To which I say - well done. Well done indeed.

But what if I'm wrong - well then ... wait a minute! There is no way I'm wrong. Definitely a lost bet.

WHO DAT? DATS WHO!

As a lot of other people have noted, the fact that this is an HDK story tells you right there that it will be good. This one had it (almost) all, including a lot of questions. You don't have to be a genius to figure out that wife and friend have been carrying on for a long time. And it's pretty clear that she's going to continue and is going to try to play mind games on the smart husband who;'s playing head games with her. Husband knows something was going on and that's why he didn't allow himself to get drunk this time. All the bullshit about him being a wimp is just that. he couldn't bring himself to kill his wife, her lover or himelf. Big deal. Most people, believe it or not, have a hard time killing people, even in the hot blood of rage or passion. There'd be a lot more dead people otherwise. As far as the Rambo stuff, it's pretty clear from what's already been written in the comments section that it's dramatic, but he's acting in an adrenalin rush and there's nothing in there that cops and EMTs and even police reporters haven't seen in real life. The intriguing twist that HDK rings on this situation is the hero basically giving the cheaters a free pass as long as they're discreet. That happens in real life too. As to why a husband would do that with a wife he loved, maybe he's thinking about the kids, maybe he's hoping it will eventually drive her crazy, or maybe he thinks that a cheater who believes she's been getting away with it for years and pulling the wool over her stupid husband's eyes with the beer trick may start having second thoughts when she knows he's aware of her treachery. Only psychopaths have NO conscience. No matter how big a bitch she is, she can still be made to feel guilt. Or maybe that's my take on it. And what does the family wealth have to do with it all? So many questions. Please...a sequel or two.

Best Bud and Ashley planned the whole setup. Why? Best Bud's wife was not to arrive until the morning. Both of them knew about Tom's weakness with alcohol. Why didn't Ashley go to bed with Tom or when the other couple went to bed? Ashley's attitude about Best Bud is also telling. She acts like Best Bud just drop the Memorial Day Family Cake not someone who took advantage of her. You expect some anger or outrage toward him rather than musing about how he feels. Lastly, it was just an accident is an easy cover story which does not explain why Best Bud's room was locked. If you are so drunk you do not know what you are doing how do you remember to lock the door? Yes- Tom is a wimp! His form of revenge only works on people who believe in trust, honor, respect and love. The fact that Ashley and Best Bud would cheat at annual family gathering clearly show that they do not hold any of the above virtues. Sorry - It is not clear to me after the dust blow over the excitement of the weekend how the cheaters's lives would be affected.

please, if you're going to fuck my beloved wife again, as another one time as you say or on a continuing basis, do me a favor: put on a condom, and be really discrete,,, as I don't want her to get pregnant, or being seen by others fucking around on me... since I had a vasectomy 10 years ago, okay? and I also have some false face to save, being the head of the family and all that...

LOL

Wow, people sure do have a lot of strong feelings about HDK's latest! What I'd like to say is, it's original and very thought-provoking. You might think that his rescue of Amber and Amy is a bit over the top, but in fact stuff like that happens to me all the time. Why, just the other day there were these four nuns in a runaway car....never mind.

As always, HDK gives us something we haven't read before, a new twist (or several) for us to enjoy and ponder. Whether this marriage will survive is beyond my ability to predict--but you've gotta love Tom's approach: far more subtle than the old "beat him up, kick her to the curb". We've all read that one a hundred times--hail to the master for a different answer!

Thanks, ohio

Well, I used to really look forward to seeing a new HDK story, now I think "oh, well, will he have the wimp husband take the cheating slut wife back, regardless?" So, at least in that regard, you didn't disappoint me. Put a guilt trip on her, screw that crap. Kick her ass to curb, once a cheater, always a cheater, especially when she & Jeff didn't apparently hesitate to do this one {?} so casually. She only did it once... what a pile... that, & $4.00 will buy you a Starbucks Grande latte. So, in the future, I'll just pass on reading another wimpy cuck husband, slut wife reconciliation story, & read the comments. They are much better anyway.

You feel justified in getting SO self-righteous and moralistic about straying wives while revelling in tales of husbands who unashamedly strive to shag anything with a pulse.

Jeff had certainly planned on getting Tom drunk so he would pass out. I have to believe Ashley was also in on the planning. Jeff's wife being delayed I think the two took the opportunity to set it up. Was it the first time? Possibly but you have to wonder.<P>

Why? Why does she do it? No motivation is revealed but it appears her actions were very deliberate. <P>

I do not care much for Tom's revenge. It's a revenge on himself as well as Jeff and Ashley. Can't say I much care for wallowing around in the ashes of a marriage. Move on.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

I always read Harry's comments. I may not agree with them all of the time but they frequently do make points that many people miss.

And I have read several stories in the past several months where he has commented favorably.

please .... nobody will stay married with that wife.

how long she is fucking around?

is clear not the first time. he is giving beer to make him drunk.

sorry but is not a real end.

for his own sake he will divorce.

I should be ashamed of myself for even being a bit surprised. Any story by HDK is by definition outstanding, as is this. Wow, how diabolical. Damn, I do love his tales.

I realize that emotions can run high with these stories. And... people always exaggerate to make their point. But "Really... Rambo... WTF" No matter what he was going thru before the gas station part. When a guy sees a girl kidnapped and a pregnant lady attacked.(let alone that he knew and was related to them.) He swings a sack with a couple cans of beer in them and gets stabbed for the effort. Where the hell does someone see Rambo in this? Or Navy Seal or whatever... As far as going to save the girl... adrenaline is an amazing thing, and it is real, ask some first responders if they have felt it or seen it. Hell he only made it as far as the help arriving. Again sorry HDK, I;m sure that this will rile the natives up more, but I just had to put my foot in my mouth.

Gus

Thank you for another fine story! I would sure like to know what happened over the next few months and how they got through it. If not,my imagination will have to deal with it.

At least after a fashion. Lots of people have a similar "line". My brother is an EMT and sees all sorts of accidents covering everything from whiplash to death and has no problem dealing with it. Cousins and friends he can handle fine. But put his little girl or his wife in the accident and he cannot behave like a trained professional at all. His brain refuses to shift gears when it gets too close to home. So I can understand how a guy would lose it when he saw what our intrepid hero did, and then goes on to acts of impromptu bravery. As far as the "revenge" goes, all he did was put in plain english what would be running through his mind for the foreseeable future for the wife and pal. It was going to happen any way in his psyche so why not let every one know and share the pain. In the words of Douglas Adams "Share and Enjoy!" (I'm sure that's going to be considered blasphemy by someone.)

I truly enjoy your tales. Your imagination and contributions are much appreciated. Its always a good start to the day, when I see one of your posts. I normally like your stories to end where you leave them, but I have to agree with a few of the comments, that this one needs a follow up. It could all be as the characters state. A one time occurence. But... a few too many things, do not appear to fall into the drunken mistake category. The locked door, sleeping peacefully spooned together, etc... Even if it was more than one instance. The scare could put the cheaters "on the straight and narrow" However, it just seems that this is one you could return to.

Thanks again and waiting for your next...

Gus

<p>You had me all the way up to the end when you had him waffling between giving in and taking her back and having her earn his trust all over again, like it was a possibility.</p>

<p>That lost me, while I appreciate a good story or two from you, you set a stage then had it play out like the man was a idiot and he was trying to figure out how to stay with her. I mean think about it, not what he did, but what they did. Jeff tried to get him drunk. They locked the doors, and they had sex and she was still in bed with him because they figured they had till morning before he saw she was gone.</p>

<p>And reverse psychology was what was used to get revenge? And at least five people know his wife cheated but they are "all" going to keep the secret? Really? Even then I might have bought it as a new twist to get revenge, but he talks about forgiving them both long as they feel bad about a planned cheating session? That killed the new twist.</p>

<p>It might not have killed the story for me if they had somehow worked at truly earning his forgiveness. But they <i>both</i> did nothing accept say "I guess I'll just have to live with the guilt I caused" and walked away. Want to know how many inmates who would say that if they could get out of jail? All of them. Know how many would actually mean it once out? I willing to bet none. (^_^)</p>

-Risq

this story is neither forgiving or condeming of the cheaters. Write a new chapter were the two are togehter again, this time getting cuaght and exposed and thrown out from the family, GET EVEN

Just doesn't fit together... he's sick, he's angry, he's rambo... he wants his friend to fuck his wife... you made the guy a complete nut case that wouldn't even pass a basic mental evaluation. And there isn't a place on this entire planet where two people end up in bed fucking next to their spouses room NO MATTER HOW MUCH THEY DRINK! Seriously, so many stories on thsi site have such wild behavoir from drugs and booze... don't any of you people drink or do drugs?? Booze lowers inhibitions it DOES NOT turn someone into a mindless robot.

you cant end it here! it needs at least another chapter and maybe im being harsh but id rather they seperate. anyway, like the other guy said it did seem a bit weird that he couldnt handle the cabin bit but when he sees his family, he turns into rambo?

it must be me, i read the comments and all liked the story i thought it was the most unbelievable tale i have read in a long time, for a man who could not do anything but throwup he suddenly became rambo and at the end sigmund freud, anyway it was not a story but a fairytale. I at one time enjoyed your stories now it seems you can't write without a silly idea or to but maybe it's just me.

1. It is implied and inferred that Jeff & most likely Ashley set this up in advance and had already made the critical decision to cheat before this incident. Once a cheater, always a cheater. Is this addressed in the story or is it simply left to the reader to figure out how long & why she decided to so remorsefully cheat. It would interesting to know who locked the bedroom door so they could engage in the supposedly spontaneous coupling. Had the husband not actually seen them in bed together but had witnessed them coming out of the bedroom together - would she have confessed? Obviously, the cheaters had decided the risk was worth the opportunity(s) again.

2. Notice how quickly Ashley assesses her upcoming situation after a few moments with the resourceful level headed quick thinking wounded husband, hmm... - what is wrong with that picture? With her caviler attitude she assumes the "non-emotional & suffering wife attitude which translates to "shucks, I got caught - now damage control time, woe is me". Surprised she did not pull out her finger file to past the time because she is "so remorseful". As typical, she is only concerned with how her adultery is going to impact her comfort level and she may actually have to pretend she is in love with the husband. Geez, what a cross for her to bear - do we now feel sorry for the wife? Nope, but would HDK infer that we should?

3. Hopefully Tom will have enough brains to DNA his kids to ensure they are really his but in reality it mostly will not change his love for the kids. Does anyone really think they will manage to maintain the "great family & relatives" relationship they had before this minor event? Surely, Tom & Jeff will get together to celebrate the birth & naming of Jeff's new son [with Jeff's hero status name] and carry on as best friends! Hmmm, maybe Vegas should take bets on the success of this next scene?

4. Did anyone notice how quickly & concerned Ashley is about how Jeff's mental health is once he gets the "speech" from Tom?

As always, a skillful effort by the author but the character development was rushed and incomplete. As for a follow-up, why bother if the original character development is so weak? TD

I have a problem with the story in that it left me with more questions than answers. So many questions that I am unsure what to think about the story. Hubbies solution was certainly creative but will it be effective? Did inlaw and wife plan it in advance? Other family members had to know something was going on and what was the impact? His kids and on and on and on. Oh well. Thanks as always and should you care to expand a little on this one..... Mike in Missouri

This is what "Reverse Psycology" is all about. Fun story, I liked this one.

I don't think Tom's a wimp, the line –- I saved his wife. He fucked mine. Who was the better man? Tom's the man. At least he's got his self respect, he won't be called as a "cheater" "back stabber" "wife stealer" (Please add words as you wish).

Carry That weight -- the title says it all. Jeff and Ashley are going to "Carry That Weight".

P.S -- Today I'm really missing commenting in BOLD and ITALIC. This new system sucks.

there is a reader who is actually waiting for good old Harry to put in his two cents worth. Of course, how could we not wait with abated breath, to read the king trolls analytical opinion of a well written story, with a different twist. HDK, you're are so totally screwed. The battle between the "reconciliation and flame the bitch crowd is about to begin. Never mind that it is just a story to read for ones entertainment. Oh, well you got broad shoulders, I'm sure you'll handle it. Oh, hell with all my moaning, I forgot to tell you I liked your story. Thanks.

If Toms actions in stressful situations, like those shown in carry that weight, are true to form, then what he said to them in recovery room should carry a massive amount of weight. Jeff was almost running when he left and Ashley pretty well summed up what her life was going to be like, at least for the immediate future. Seems family means a hell of lot more to Tom than either Ashley or Jeff. A much better man than I, for sure. Five stars from me.

He's no wimp, that's for sure. But it seems a strange family to mee. Even if Jeff saved his life, the was no friend at all by trying to get him drunk, knowing he would pass out quickly. And his wife's behaviour is anytihing but. Makes you wonder indeed. And her cousing Agnes who's treating all of this in such a casual way wiht her cover up, that one could really think there's more at her end too. He admitted that he married into a wealthy family, and one his greatest concerns was about his standing in this family. is this what it's all about?? I don't see a need for another chapter, but I'm sure if HDK would bring one, it will be well written as usual.

Well done! Very entertaining! It was a good read. Thanks for sharing!! Ohio, USA