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Click hereA look of pain crossed my daughter's face. 'If you truly loved me, then you wouldn't have done this,' and she pulled out her hand to show the long, deep gash scar on the side of her otherwise perfect pale flesh. 'It's been three years now, Mom, and it still won't go away.'
My wife tried and failed to contort her face into sympathy.
'I want a divorce, dear; and I want you of the house. Now. Angela will stay with me.' I informed her.
'But, but, where will I go? Where will I stay? Who will give me allowance --?'
I laughed at the look of despair in her face. 'That it not my concern, dear. Though, I must say, go live with your friends who were clearly more precious to you than your own husband or daughter.'
She changed tact, and tried to cry. 'How could you? The mother of your child!'
'Not any more,' I said, satisfied.
'Wha --? What?'
'I missed my period, 2 months in a row. From this,' Angela scooped out my cum from her cunt with her fingers and licked them clean.
My dick got hard.
Her mother was stunned.
'Well dear, I believe we have said all there is to say; now please, remove yourself from my house.'
Angela instantly noticed my erection and started fisting me.
I didn't wait for my wife's reaction; I immediately threw my daughter on the couch beside her mother before climbing on top of her and sliding my cock nicely inside her warm pussy and pounding away. We made a real show of it.
After we were done, my wife was no where to be found. Eventually, my wife got all of her things and I got the divorce that I was looking for. Because of the pre-nup she had sighed, she got nothing more than her material belongings. Word on the street was she had to sell them one by one to the pawn shop to buy groceries. Even her friends kicked her out of their house within few days... She eventually found work as a secretary; though to be honest, I could care less.
True to words, Angela's tummy grew and grew and I really shouldn't have bought that test kit to know that I was going to be a father again. I was very, very happy.
The baby had its mother's hair and its father's eyes. Though to be honest, both my daughter and I have the same eyes... We were still trying to decide whether Angela is the mother or sister, and I the father or grandfather...
In any case, we were planning on having a big family. And so as nights rolled into days, and days into nights, I would find myself happily buried inside my daughter's pussy; pounding the living day lights out of her as I suckled away from her tits. We couldn't tell who the biggest titty sucker was; the baby or I. I squirted inside my daughter as she squirted inside me. We were one big, happy family.
You should have kept the old bitch around to babysit your incest babies.
Now my daughter, gave me another daughter to fuck, and to freely fuck, she taught my daughter to fuck me
After you and dad get married you should use mom to babysit your incest children to really put her in her place.
So the mother is a horrible person because she beat the daughter...but the father obviously never stood up for the daughter if she was constantly bruised & beaten by her mother. Further, she has to wear long-sleeved tops to schools to forever hide the bruises that her mother gave her, but she's on the swim team & can wear swimming garments w/o the bruises & cuts showing???
Because of this, as well as several other mistakes that I immediately noticed, I couldn't get beyond the 1st pg. If you want readers & you want them to respect you, then proofread, proofread, proofread. Then attempt some logic or believable premise before writing again.
This sucked so badly it was ridiculous!!
Hello, SexySweetKitten: I thoroughly enjoyed the premise of your story and I think the dialogue was quite believable. Moreover, and because of the obvious, close relationship between Angela and Daddy, Daughter Do Right is a good beginning to a story that has a few distinct expansion possibilities.
With that said, I hope you continue with your writing, and as you do, it will become more clear to you the importance of the simple things that all good writers' utilize: an editor that will not rewrite an already good idea, and the oh, so important value of proofreading your work.
Now, although there were some grammatical errors that even the most prolific authors are guilty of committing, those types of errors can be fixed. All you need to do is take your time, and not worry about whether or not you are going to make the five o' clock submission deadline (so to speak).
SexySweetKitten, you have a knack for the dialogue and your characters develop easily with one another. All you really need to do, as I have mentioned, is proofread it, proofread it, and then proofread it again, give it to someone else to read, and then proofread it once more, and that three (3) I scored you will easily become a four or five.
Respectfully,
Michael A. Moreno
Even though the storyline isn't very realistic, it still was a good read and having the reader sympathetic towards the father and his daughter.
The author did create an exciting and erotic story that was good to read.
Thanks
I've got 3 words for you: Full Body suits.
Its what most swimmers wear during the Olympics.