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AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
SAD

Nice, stories like this are REAL, your a man, I'm a man, I can't, you can't, stop being what GOD made you, US....bill

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Well written but heart wrenching

Slirpuff, Great story, reaches to the core of human sadness.

Always look forward to your stories!!!!!!!!

5 stars

betrayedbylovebetrayedbyloveabout 12 years ago
Sad

She cheated but she was fucked up. He left but he was fucked up. She killed herself. She's not fucked up any more. He killed the man she cheated with. Now he's more fucked up than ever. Only one thing to say. Fuck it.

tazz317tazz317over 12 years ago
#2 REMORSE IS NEVER AN AFTER-THOUGHT

even when the payment is the ultimate. TK U MLJ LV NV I have always wondered, after a person M/F kills themselves or is killed by a wronged spouse and knowing there were words and bad blood that preceded the act, IF one could question them, "WHAT WOULD/COULD BE THERE ANSWER. mlj

BTTapBTTapover 12 years ago
Great, sad story

Other, similar stories on this site. Loss or illness of child leads to depression and emotional upheaval, distancing between wife and husband in their grief. Wife, an obvious target for a predator, gets seduced. A sad tale. Perhaps the most "excuseable" of on-going affairs-given the mental/emotional state of the wife. Well told tale-I liked the presentation of the story in the confessional letter. Keeps it simple and to the point. A reconciliation could have been justified in this case, but hubby's choice, which he now regrets, was valid, too. Of course, the baby would have been a bit of a stumbling block-I wonder if she could have brought herself to abort it?

LegionsOfLiesLegionsOfLiesover 12 years ago
@ phd70

Yeah the husband was so insensitive not like he had to cope with the loss of his son right, just a bastard that didn't communicate with his grieving wife cause he didn't lose anything. The wife pulled away from him to lost/concerned in her own pain to ever care about his not the other way around. (Note* I'm not blaming the wife for her pain just merely pointing out that the husband experienced the same pain of loss but also suffered an additional pain as she pulled away from him leaving him to grieve for the loss of their son and his losing of her) - (usual yadda about smartphone typing)

AustinDaniels2012AustinDaniels2012over 12 years ago
Enough! Enough!

God damn, I hate a sad story like this!

How dare you - you bastard - write such a good story...and write it so well...and make it so bloody heart wrenching!!!!!! You can put me in such a deep dark depression with stories such as this! I hate it!

But the story was so well written.....

phd70phd70over 12 years ago
Touching, but too negative for my liking.

Wife was drunk and emotionally adrift. A good lesson in the story, but downbeat stories are not to my taste. Husband was insensitive and failed to communicate and support his distraught wife.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Another Tear Jerker

Very sad and well done!!!

Your story brings to mind, raises to the surface of the conscious mind, the full impact, feeling and thought of wishing, with great anxiety, to be able to turn back the clock of time. An emotion, coupled with your story and other life experiences, brings sadness and tears - oh how we wish!

Thanks, your usual fine work!

tazz317tazz317almost 13 years ago
PAYBACK: WITH A VENGANCE

Even though, it still hurts. TK U MLJ LV NV

racoon1174racoon1174about 13 years ago

Since I found your stories I've been reading them in order this Is so far my favorite. Having lived through my wifes multiple miscarriages the emotion you've written here brought me right back to those awful days and the utter despair we both felt. Excellent work!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Really a pretty stupid story.

Sounds highly British since male never talked with the wife (as usual in these stories). Too much copying from other LW tales. Just a male character being a weak, whiney, coward; unwilling to act to change things.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
A work of pure Genius !!

Have anyone thought of what it takes to put so much feelings,so much emotions and anguish into words and sentences?

It is impossible for most people. But then you find a diamond in the trash ! Most enjoyable read. Thank you Slirpuff !!! Mr Ross Smrek.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Certainly wasn't John's fault

As someone who has lost a child, I am not unsympathetic to the mother. And I deeply identify with the friction between her and John. When we are hurting that badly, many of us choose destructive paths. Trapped in our private pain, we lash out even against those closest to us.

But she took from John the one thing they had left -- their marriage. To expect anything other than an immediate divorce at that point would have been unrealistic on her part.

As for the others in the church "hating" John, screw them all, the self-righteous scum. Walk a mile in his shoes, and then judge. He lost his son, and then his wife shut him out, and then sought comfort from another. At that point, it was past time to call it a day.

She chose to engage in actions that destroyed her marriage. I write that as a fact, like "the avalanche started." It's not that the village "deserved" to be destroyed, but that once the snow begins to rumble, the conclusion is foregone.

Then she chose to take her own life, in an attempt to end her pain. That's a damned shame, but it was her choice once again. I can have sympathy for her character -- oh BOY do I understand that impulse -- without in any way putting even one iotum of blame on John.

Well done.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
misdirected anger

The hostility towards this guy? There is the probability that the content of the letter will not change all minds. Sometimes, its just too late to salvage things.

0649d0649dover 13 years ago
wife sick, not husband's fault

yes, he loved her but nobody can expect him to do more than he did. it's good that she got rid of herself so he didn't wimp out and have to raise the bastard kid (i can hardly see her aborting a baby after the first one died). now he's the one who needs therapy. hope he has a nice life!

AnotherClosetReaderAnotherClosetReaderalmost 14 years ago
I must be missing something,

Why is John getting all the hate looks when he comes to the church in the beginning? I didn't read anything that would have supported that much animosity to the 'wronged party'. Who wants to be married to a person that is taking an actively destructive position on their relationship with the spouse. I got two words for that might have altered the situation: Involuntary Commitment. Might have opened up a whole new can of worms for marriage counseling, but she might not have taken up with the jack ass, thus not gotten knocked up, thus not gotten dead.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
WOW

This was a short but very powerful story ! One of the reasons I keep coming back to you a one of this sites better writers . Keep up the good work !!!!!

jd927jd927almost 14 years ago

I guess I'm supposed to sympathize with Ashley but I cannot. I try to accept these type of stories, but I can't agree with suicide notes that are (likely subconsciously) intended to cause severe feelings of guilt and shame toward someone.

quote "John, I needed you more at that moment than I'd needed anyone else in my entire life. You were my knight in shinning armor. You were supposed to take care of me; you were supposed to save me. I tried so many times to call you but you never answered; I guess I didn't really expect you to. You were done and so was I." /quote

She loves John so much she'll write something like that which will only serve to cause irreparable hurt and heartache to the man. Maybe she didn't intend for that, but it's stuff like that that cause these stories to be so displeasing for me.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
wtf?

are you an idiot? HIV doesnt hate women, and neither do most of the readers on site (at least im hoping they're not that stupid). the fact is, adultery is adultery-there is not circumstances or excuses. excuses are like assholes, everyones got them. you can try and rationalize anything, ya know so instead of it being black and white, its in the gray area. that doesnt change anything and it certainly is the spouse's (man or woman) fault if they just cant see themselves staying together. it certainly is not johns fault that his wife cheated or that she killed herself. now, i will admit it sounds like ashley was depressed, possibly suicidal after the death of her baby, but at what point do you say enough is enough? because she obviously didnt want help and sick as she was, didnt care about her husband. what, did it slip her mind that not only did john also lose a child but hes losing his wife? maybe he needed help, maybe he needed comfort. anyway, my point is that divorcing doesnt make you a bad person or "unenlightened" or whatever pc bs people spout, it just means your human and yes i know, its human to make mistakes and cheat but that same logic can be applied to victum-they're human and they cant get over your mistake.

thebulletthebulletalmost 14 years ago
It's about the human condition...

misogynists like HIV and Zed just cannot see past adultery to try to understand circumstance. Their unending distrust and dislike of women in general leads them to always want to torch the bitch.

Losing a child is at the top of the list of stress factors that negatively effect a marriage. Often one parent has a far more serious reaction than the other and dives into depression so deep that it is insurmountable without professional help.

And even with that help, the marriage itself remains on the ropes. This is not the fault of the husband or the wife. It is simple reality.

Why can't people like HIV and zed and their woman-hating brethren understand this?

Their reaction is to blame everything on the cheating slut. HIV, of course, must also usually denigrate the author. And writing is something that HIV hasn't the guts to attempt. He knows he would be eviscerated by his very own ass-kissing buddies. (Hey, ass-kissing HIV pals: that means you would cut his balls off.)

Let's just admit it, guys. HIV is a cunt.

Meanwhile, people like Zed who root for the wife to die are just plain sick motherfuckers. Are you guys posting from a prison cell or something?

RonRWoodRonRWoodalmost 14 years ago
Rehnquist has it right

Some of you hateful women hating slobs like Zero and Harry turn my stomach! My first wife and I lost a child after birth and we never recovered what we had even though we tried for another eight years. The pain and sorrow is unbelievable. But then, hateful commenters like you don't understand or care about feelings in any story. Why don't you read violent, action stories, and stay away from the loving wives? All you do is draw a crowd of the unloved or inexperienced readers that don't understand the complexities and pitfalls of a "Real" loving relationship.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Well Done

Well put together. Really tough to read

Thanks

sexmatesexmatealmost 14 years ago
Emotional read

Story was tough to read. Why because it was close to home.

My brother was killed when he was 7. I was 12. Some of the actions these 2 did I had witnessed with my parents. Their marriage survived but it was never the same nor was our family. The pain/emotion from that time will always be raw for me. It changed everything!

Thanks for writing!

SleeplessinMD2SleeplessinMD2almost 14 years ago
Blame John?

Although Ashley did not have to write the letter she wanted to get her ultimate revenge on John - guilt for her death. Ashley's story is really not that unique - lost of child lead to rejection of husband permiting another lover to move in. Ashley started cheating on John when she first entered an emotional affair with her boss. First feelings and then actions usually lead to an affair and this case was no different. What was sad was how she subtley put the blame on everyone else but herself and then took the coward's way out. She gave up on any chance of reconciliation with John even before John did and she was not willing to fight for him. So what if it took months or years that is how you show someone you love that you will work to rebuild their trust. No ashley wanted a quick fix to her mistake so the only thing John is gulity of is not jumping to her "I am sorry and it will never happen again" plea. Absolution of the cheating is not a right and the wronged spouse has every right to pick the time of the reconciliation if any.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
This Hurts to read, BUT

No one wants to see anyone dead. But if Ashley did not kill her self, they would have gone on with life. I think Ashley kind of got revenge for John not forgiving her by writing the letter and killing herself. At the end I don’t think Jim should have dyed. Just dismembered, remove the member and ten fingers.

shangoshangoalmost 14 years ago
Harry is right and the Bullet is off-course once again

Does anyone OTHER than Harry remember this? "I suppose my good friends ratted me out and with the hotel manager in tow you walked into the room."

"Ratted me out?" Does this read like remorse to any thinking human? She was still blaming loddie, doddie and every damned body but herself. Post-partum Depression? A Doctor visit or two could have fixed it. I sympathize when people get caught up in something other than their own creations. Hubby should be sad, but ONLY FOR HIS CHILD! Obviously, anyone's death is not time for rejoicing in most situations, but by the Author's own admission, his female lead was accustomed to taking the easy way out. Personally, I respect Fighters and have no use for quitters.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Rating it a "three"

This story is a sad tale indeed. Reading about people dying as a part of a "loving wives" story "imho" changes the genre and despite the tragic character that the wife was, I do not see anything loving about her. This story was about the choices that she made to throw her husband and her marriage away. The husband did what many other men would have done. He divorced her and left her with what she had chosen. The fact that she could not handle the consequences of the pain that she brought on to herself was not the husband's fault no matter how much she might have wanted to force him to share that pain with her. Why else send the Dear John letter? In the letter, she complains about her friends probably "ratting her out". Well WTF? If they hadn't and she had gotten away with having sex with her boss without her husband finding out, would that have made her marriage stronger or her a better wife or a better person. I doubt it. The marriage was dead. She had killed it before she killed herself and her unborn child. The husband may feel horrible but he has no reason to feel that he was in anyway at fault. I didn't think that having the lover killed in the end did much for the story except that it made the husband's character seem less sympathetic. I don't usually agree with Harry's comments but this time I do. In Slirpuff's stories, there can be no ending it seems unless or until the husband either: accepts the fact that his wife is a cheating slut but he loves her anyway and must reconcile, or he gets trashed by his own kids for not reconciling with their cheating mother, or he gets beaten up by one of his wife's drinking buddies or boyfriends or he accepts the fact that he really caused or at least had something to do with why she cheated on the marriage in the first place. I'm not saying that in every story the wife needs to be sent packing for her indiscretions and I am not saying that in every story the cheated upon husband needs to be depicted as an arrogant saint. It would just be interesting to sometime read a story where the husband turns out not to the be the bad guy and be strong enough to walk away from the wife and get on with his life. I really do appreciate Slirpuff's efforts. Thanks for sharing. Ohio, USA

RehnquistRehnquistalmost 14 years ago
Harry, I'll Be More Clear . . .

I was not trying to say that the wife's adultery was either justifiable or excusable. Nor do I think she would have or should have been forgiven. The point I was trying to make, and the reason I think the story had such great impact, was that the husband had now suffered probably the worst fucking three months in history, and he's left devastated by it. Are you telling me that you wouldn't be left a shell of yourself if (1) your child suddenly died, (2) your marriage immediately started crumbling, (3) your wife pulled further away from you and had an affair, (4) she became pregnant with her lover's child, then (5) she killed herself, all in a 3-month span? I'm not saying, and I don't think the story was saying, that he should've gotten back with her. I think the poor bastard is just looking at the charred landscape that was once his happy, perfect life and thinking he could have--should have--done something different to prevent all of this.

I'm pretty sure we'd all be asking ourselves the same thing, whether we'd have forgiven her or not and whether we'd have been able to do anything about it or not.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Wow

That is all I can say it brought tears to my eyes it reminded me of the time I lost my child. Me and my fiancee never made it after that and this just helps personify what I felt then.

oldwayneoldwaynealmost 14 years ago
I had to give it Five Stars...it was so well written.

I have no sympathy for wimps, cheaters, and weak asses who can't face up to the mistakes they have made. Suicide might be understandable in some circumstances, but does it ever serve anyone well, even the selfish person who is led to commit it? Not all good stories are happy ones, and this one was very gripping. Thanks for your work.

chytownchytownalmost 14 years ago
So sad!

ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ and borinnnnnnnng! Damn it!!!! there are about 50 storys on this site with the same story line.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Very Good Story

This was a very well written story. Unfortunately, it was a little too dark for my tastes. To each his own.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Very Well Written Author

But you are guilty of wringing as much emotion from a story as you felt possible.<P>

That isn't bad but in a purely unemotional analysis his last reaction was contrary to the facts presented.<P>

Suffice it to say his last emotion was spent because he was hurt by her actions and is now alone.<P>

Anyone would have the right to feel that way at that time even though there really wasn't anything he should have done differently.<P>

Very Nice Work Author - you efforts to grow are more and more tuned into life's complexities.

With High Regard

FireFox59FireFox59almost 14 years ago
Sad Story

Well written Slirpuff. Thanks for sharing.

jiminabjiminabalmost 14 years ago
Thank you....a very good read

not a happy one but a good story. And Harry it is just a story. Keep your bp down.

vietvetvietvetalmost 14 years ago
I hate cheaters

but this STORY broke my heart because of the circumstances.

Good writing, keep up with the imagination.

They cant all be killers but most should. I know this sounds hypocritical but thats just the way it is.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
You know I see it too

My opinion is similar to Harry's and a couple of other posters.

The wife pushed the husband away in the story, made him feel betrayed in the story, and ended up in bed with her boss in the story. She betrayed her husband in her time of need time after time at every turn when he tried to be there for her.

Then when she dies, the "Story" tries to make it seem as if the husband felt it was his fault for not forgiving her for her liaison with her boss after she betrayed him at every turn.

What some of you all are missing is that, from what I read, Harry and some others didn't miss that. And they aren't unfeeling A-Holes because they don't have sympathy for a stories character who so grievously betrayed her husband and only felt sorry for her actions "after" she had sex with her boss.

If you feel an affair or two, or cheating a time or two is ok, then sure you'll be able to sympathize with the wife. You'll never understand why some readers don't like the story.

But if you feel when your trying hard to work on a marriage and your wife goes out and gets laid by her boss, while your doing everything in your power to save the marriage and she isn't and you end up leaving her after you catch her in bed with her boss, then you'll understand why having a story where the husband blames himself for her death at the end of it isn't a good read "after" he's done all of that.

jasonnhjasonnhalmost 14 years ago
Powerful story

I guess I find it curious that people are praising the death of this poor lost woman. Her child died. For most woman that is devastating and for some women it is insurmountable. John tried to stand beside her but she wouldn't let him. That is not surprising. In some mixed up way he probably reminded her of the baby. I'm not saying it makes rational sense but it is real. She didn't deliberately try to hurt her husband, her emotions and thinking were all screwed up. That doesn't give her a pass. We are responsible for our actions. But it does give an understandable explanation. What John did was understandable as well. He reached his limit. We all have them. With all he had done to try to keep her on track she cheated on him. It was just too much. However, her decision to kill herself was just that. HER DECISION. I am intimately familiar with such decisions. But no matter how much you realize that the person made their own choice it is VERY difficult to avoid the guilt. John recognizes he has some ownership. If he had stayed with her through this or maybe stayed closer she might have realized she had other choices she could make. John didn't kill himself or crawl into a bottle but he is very sad and lonely. That is not surprising. And, after the church, no one seems to be blaming him either. They all know the tragedy of his life. In the end I feel compassion for the situation, similar to what the people in the church felt after he read her letter. She isn't a nasty bitch. She is a woman who lost her way and unfortunately couldn't find her way back. I think the story conveys that extremely well and therefore is a very successful story. Great job.

PistolpackinpetePistolpackinpetealmost 14 years ago
Great story simply because....

...it evoked such raw and guttural emotions. Post partum depression after sids or other such tragedies opens up behaviors that have no reason, all the fucking time. Doesn't take a genius or even a pseudo intellectual to get that one! Most people, men included, have no Idea what "for worse" means.

ReadTooMuchReadTooMuchalmost 14 years ago
Sick Puppies

Many of the other commentators are unbelievable haters. There is a lot of pain in this story all around. Nobody got what they deserved.

lancewmlancewmalmost 14 years ago
I also agree with Rehnquist and the bullet.

This was a powerful story about human suffering. Harry is on a rant about males taking the blame. That is certainly a Harry button that any author can push without even trying. But in his blind rant, Harry missed the simplicity of the story -- the human condition played out in a powerful way. Harry often has a good critical eye, but he got his button pushed and he closed his eyes.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Thanks

Good writing as always. Can't say that I care about the slut wife dieing. Talk about Karma coming home to roost.

Thanks for a good story.

kelly_kellykelly_kellyalmost 14 years ago
Was ok...

But not your best like someone said.

zed0 is funny, he said — "The slut killed herself, and good riddance, the world is now a better place." — now that's a hilarious joke. Isn't it funny that the world just got a "better place" after death of "fictional" character? Ha-ha! Thanks for the big laugh.

~Kelly~

bruce22bruce22almost 14 years ago
Brutal

Very well done and very painful.

Average_WriterAverage_Writeralmost 14 years ago
Curious.

Don't people read stories just to enjoy them anymore? I thought it was a good read, thanks for writing the story Slirpuff. And keep them coming.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
So she emotionally manipulates him one more time...

From beyond the grave. I guess it's either forced reconciliation or horrible suffering with your stories. No one is happy ever again if they split up with a partner in Slirpuff World.

digdaddyrichdigdaddyrichalmost 14 years ago
A very believable and heart felt story

Really close to being real life.

Well written and the story kept my interest through out.

Life has a way of beating us humans down sometimes, and this story shows just that.

Thanks

Harryin VAHarryin VAalmost 14 years ago
to ANONYMOUS FIRST CLASS poster

since you asked

..."I think that you consider "guilt" and "fault" to be synonyms. I read that John felt guilt over Ashley's suicide. I never read anything where John felt that he was at fault for her death...."

as I quote from the STORY 5th paragrpah from the Bottom

.............It wasn't an accident and Ashley didn't die as a result of the crash. She died months before she got in her car that day and IT WAS PARTLY MY FAULT. Why didn't I love her enough to forgive her and start over again?...

you may not agree my view which is ...of course....100% fine.

but the husband DOES actually say/ think this is all HIS fault.

you may be right that john feels guilt... WHY i dont have clue....unless he caused her car to drive off the road/ cliff at high speed???

energystarenergystaralmost 14 years ago
I agree with Rehnquist and the bullet.

Great story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
My Marriage Nor Anyone Else I Know

Would not have survived her actions, pulled away, lied, cheated, pregnant, please, she didn't love her husband. Where all this remorse comes from is she is still unbalanced, too bad but not ex husbands fault. That he is all weepy just shows they both had issues, most would have moved on.

gatorhermitgatorhermitalmost 14 years ago
I agree with Rehnquist and TheBullet

One thing that SP got right in this story is that for women it is all about relationships. The mistake the wife made was transferring friendship from her husband to her boss, who was simply playing her. The sex was ancillary.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
First Class

I completely agree with woodmanone and Rehnquist. They expressed my opinions better than I could myself.

<P>

Note to Harry:<br>

I think that you consider "guilt" and "fault" to be synonyms. I read that John felt guilt over Ashley's suicide. I never read anything where John felt that he was at fault for her death.

<p>

Patiently waiting for the next installment of your Vietnam vet series.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
wow

wow, they had some pretty dumb friends, as far as feeling sorry for her i do but more for him.

anothermarrieddudeanothermarrieddudealmost 14 years ago
It's always a treat when Slirpuff shares his literary stylings with us

I would never have thought that I could generate so much sypathy for a cheating wife. Powerful effort.

Harryin VAHarryin VAalmost 14 years ago
sorry Rehnquist YOU are the one missing the point

the fact that the husband has been through so Much hell is NOT the point.

the point is that this author is once again waging war upon anyon who is straight and male.

the wife's pitiful self serving confession is the Key... at no point did the husband emotions pain or anguish over losng the baby ( SIDS??) and then losing his wife as she INTENTIONALLY walked away from him and the mrariage ... ever matter.

To anyone in the story. Lots of folks comforted the wife,

almost all of slirpuff's story operate on this premise.... that any Husband's feelings emotions ideas values dont matter... why?

because he has a cock... which to this author means no matter what this wife ever does it is ALWAYS the husband/ man's fault

Harryin VAHarryin VAalmost 14 years ago
of course it HAS to be is the Husband fault!! he is man right? ask the author...

that seems to be the premise of every story this fuckwad had ever written.

.....She died months before she got in her car that day and it was partly my fault.....

HOW?

she shuts down and refuses to get help

cuts him off emotionally and sexually for MONTHS and Months .

WILLINGLY gets seduced by her boss ... anyone who believes the cunt whore wife argument tnat she had no idea... is an idiot...

ignored the husband warnings

lashed out and attacked her hsuband for even being concerned

then comes home very late after being fucked... which the husband sees

finds out she is PREGNANT by her boss.... and if that is not a tooal rejection of the husband as a man and Human being I dont know what is...

and this mentally unbalanced author has the wimp husband say

"this is partly MY fault?..."

god almighty.....

thebulletthebulletalmost 14 years ago
the comments really say it all

There are readers on this site who are just total and complete heartless assholes.

Do they ever attempt to understand the emotions behind some of these stories? Do they ever even attempt to understand what Ashley was going through in her mind? Does her baby dying in her arms not give a reason for her turning off the world - even her husband?

This has nothing to do with forgiving adultery. It has to do with understanding human suffering.

Still, Under NO circumstances is adultery worthy of death. If a husband can't live with an adulterous wife (and few can), then divorce her. That's what I did. Still don't like her much 35 years later. But never once did I plan her murder. And if she dies, I will not be dancing on her grave.

Praising the death of the cheating wife as a couple of these readers did is a very sick response.

zed is just one sick motherfucker. He looks at a heart breaking story of loss and thinks it is funny? He can't be serious.

And please don't say they don't really mean it.

My theory: their wives dominate their lives and this death-wish for the literary wife is really a way to silently get at their real wives without making waves. Pussies all.

bigguy323bigguy323almost 14 years ago
I agree with Zedo, this has a happy ending.

Zedo said it just right.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Loved too much

Just a comment that love and hate are both strong emotions. The opposite of Love/hate is indifference and that is not found in this story. The point of my comment is that to love too much (or hate) is to lose a bit of your grip on reality. Would the husband have been better off to love a little bit less and possibly be more forgiving? Is a marriage more stable if a little bit is held back to make the rocky spots more bearable?

Nature does not tolerate extremes and seeks to equalize everything. Are we mere mortals with our short life spans able to prove nature wrong with our strong emotions?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Let me see if I get this straight........

The husband tries to be there for the wife after the death of their child, but she pushes him away. She ends up building a relationship with her boss instead, even though the husband is still fighting hard to get her to come back to him, making every excuse he can for her behavior, and tries very hard to get her to work with him to save their marriage, she continues to push him away regardless and is getting closer and closer to her boss.

She ends up sleeping with her boss at a party, where he was invited, but she refused to let him come. She ends up pregnant with her boss's child, but only after her husband catches her cheating on him does she want to work on their marriage, the same marriage she had no interest in saving when before she cheated.

And because she died, at her own hand, after he left her this is a powerful "gripping" story? That speaks to you? My god some of you folks need to get out into the daylight more.

What you should have said as comment is "If you cheat on your spouse, and you feel really bad about it, you should be forgiven because everyone gets one free get out of jail free card in every marriage because face it, cheating on one's spouse is 'no big deal' anymore."

I'm sorry, but cheating creates victims. Same if she was drunk and hit someone with a car. No matter how bad "she" may feel, the person who had no control over what she did, received no pleasure or enjoyment from the act, now has to learn to now live with the pain and heartbreak from what she's done. To many writers gloss over that in a rush for a romantic ending (or in this case one where the reader feels bad for her)

And because he choose not to, because the pain was so great she inflicted on him, he's the villain?

*Sigh*

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
sad

Thank you for writing this sad tale and sharing it with us.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
One of your best stories to date!

So sad and emotionally exhausting! But wow - you've come a long way baby in your writing!!! The emotions that are evoked in that letter are amazing. Just one more area where our world is not always black and white, when there is no 'right' answer to the same question. Thank you for a powerful story! Very sad but exquisitely written.

~S

zed0zed0almost 14 years ago
I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING!

The slut killed herself, and good riddance, the world is now a better place. Although piling up the car is a bit extreme, it makes for a better story than just leaving town. I'm surprised that he bothered to attend the funeral at all, and I'm even more surprised that anybody at the funeral blamed him for dumping her sorry ass. It was a nice comedic touch that she actually expected him to save her from herself(?) when she found out she was pregnant with the boss's bastard. You save your friends, you don't save cheating bitches that turn toxic, and stab you in the back. Now that would have set a new low in "reconciliation at all costs stories." Thank you for not going there. (You also had me going for a minute, I thought this was a continuation of the Steve & Cindy "Dear John" series).

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Would or Wouldn't?

I notice people are unable to tell the difference between positive and negative, I hope you just mistyped.

It is perhaps a symptom of people not being careful about pronouncing words correctly (spell as you hear), and folks are actually leaving off the "nt" sound. If so, they should just go ahead and not use the contraction and instead actually say "Would Not".

RehnquistRehnquistalmost 14 years ago
Masterful.

The first few commenters, I believe, miss the point of this story. You took a letter and, through her now dead eyes, encapsulated the painful disintegration of a marriage. All too many marriages collapse in the wake of a child's death, and it's hard to hate the wife in this situation. Is cheating wrong? Sure. But this is truly one of those "walk a mile in my shoes" situations. And you succinctly, and with great emotional impact, used the letter to convey the entire thing. I mean, John has now, in the span of a few months, lost his child and the love of his life through a one-two punch that would leave even the most calloused bastard reeling. What kind of sick fuck thinks he should be dancing in the streets at this point? No, your theme was honest and realistic.

Sad to be sure, but fucking awesome writing! I compare this to some of your stuff from six months ago and the difference in your writing is night and day. You're living proof that practice makes perfect.

Keep up the great work.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
The cheating whore.........

.......killed herself? GREAT!!! I don't see what the husband's problem is with that. Oh, and belated revenge on her lover -who gives a shit about that???

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Good Writing

But I hate the second guessing the husband is dealing with, he did what he could to save the marriage, she threw it away. Sounds like they still had a relationship untill her boyfriend dumped her, then she wanted her husband back. Four lives ruined or dead, hell of a thing, good writing.

woodmanonewoodmanonealmost 14 years ago
Applause

This maybe one of the best pieces posted on this site. So gripping, so deep, so profound. You can almost feel the hurt and sorrow that haunts John.

Concise and to the point but I felt I knew the characters intimately.

Well done sir.

AgenaAgenaalmost 14 years ago
Excellent

Excellent story. Well written, great story line.

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