- Romance
- Far Too Choosy
- Page 2
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Six months later, Caydence was wed to Julian, now Mrs. Julian Perretta. The ceremony had been small and beautiful with her father giving her away. Their mothers had been wrecks, crying as expected. All of their friends had been there. Jean had been the ring bearer... But in the midst of their company there was one special soul yet to grace them with the satisfaction of its physical presence... A baby... Yes, Caydence was pregnant... She was showing tremendously with only three more months to go having conceived the night before his proposal. The couple couldn't be happier. Caydence had never imagined in a million years that she would have met the love of her life in a club back in New York City.... Wonder Why....
- COMMENTS
sailordblj1966over 13 years agoI liked your first story. I thought there were a few fragmented sentences but in all a very nice story. Keep up the good work.
dreamcastteenover 13 years agoAuthorYeah I kind of rushed it, just to get a feel for what it would be like to write on here. I should be writing a next one with an entirely different aim soon and hopefully it'll be better, but thank you for the feedback. It is much appreciated.
darkstone57over 13 years agobut not bad, i agree it could have gone slower, more involved, but you have a good start here.
I'm not a professional writer, but i will offer you three pieces of advice,
1 always write from your heart, and even if the public says it stinks, keep on doing it.
2 never let the worst of the comments knock you down. You never know, they might be some jealous writer who is just being a bitch
3 never stop writing if this is what you love. It's been a passion of mine since i was in grade school, and until i found this site, i had never had the guts to hope i might have a future being one
and lastly
it's good, i gave your five stars just for the effort you took in writing it.
Anonymousalmost 14 years agoIt went by wayyy too fast. You should set a slower pace next time in your submissions. There's nothing worse than a romance story that's hard to believe. The story was good but it would have been a whole lot better if it was elaborated.
YornHalmost 14 years agoa pretty nice love story but way too brief.
It lacked character development and a basic interest in the characters and their thinking, emotions.
Keep writing but try to develope your stories.
