All Comments on 'Fugitive'

...means no custody has been determined. No division of assets. Not sure why Mounties would be involved

Send dvd of conversation about murdering him. No charges would be filed but it would give explanation that he ran fearing for his life which he actually did.

He hires attorney and he would end law enforcement looking for him.

So over loaded with misstated slang, utterly improbable concepts. I do try to suspend all logic and belief while reading on LE but I just can't. Is that Canadian Maritimes syntax and grammar? Perhaps Newfie jabber. Just can't do anymore. 8

Nitpick: "To whom that pussy belongs?" - Who talks that way during sex?

"I met somebody way better than you." - Yet you ended up cheating on the "better guy" with the loser!

Definitely needs a chapter 2!

Needs more to finish the story off.

You Please Finish The Story! ... As it is, Their forever on the run!....Like watching

re-runs of The JERRY SPRINGER SHOW!....You forever have the runs

Anyway that's my Comment 5 ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!

Oh Oh Oh JERRY! JERRY! JERRY! JERRY! See Ya!

Fact is, you may have ruined what could have been a GREAT story. I hate being critical, but it seems you had great idea, you just didn't want to put forth the effort to complete the job. Can't give you less than a 1, so I won't bother with any at all.

Too short, too rushed. This could have been a classic LW story.

Finish it...or lets some one else...not me...to finish it...like FTDS tho I don't think he's around anymore. 4☆

But this was a pretty good short story.

would have given this chapter a 4, but the story was never finished. So I have to give it a 2.

Left me wanting more. Please finish it. Should be interesting to see what wife does once kids are adults and want nothing to do with her, and the husband can go to a country that doesn't have extradition rights with canada.

Leave us with a story not finished for what reason? Come on finish the dann story.

I still think that with a little fleshing.out that this could be a classic.

I enjoy likegoodwine stories It just seems he has a bad habit of ending them to quickly and leaving the readers hanging

I find myself rooting for him.

Different, that's for sure. I was looking for chapter 2, and was disappointed. Hubby did everything he could, not to be confrontational. There didn't seem to be any malice in his actions, as compared to the wife's. I guess I was just looking for some retribution.

Million dollars he could hire all kinds of people to get cheaters

Has plenty of time to clue kids in to really what happened

Had plenty of time to have plan b and c etc

3 stars for trying

We see the hubby finds out what's going on...and does what he has to do to get his kids and himself away...good for him...but we have another wimp of an author here... the wifes cheating is also part of this story...what happens to her when she loses the kids an her hubby... but I guess that's not important in the eyes of the author...and of course the story goes unfinished and flat....what a crummy ending here.......

Didn't like it. I hate a runner. Stay and handle your business. Give Steve a knee injury he'll remember for the rest of his life. Threaten the wife you'll turn her in for conspiracy to commit murder if she doesn't agree to your divorce terms. Once all that is done then leave.

3* for an unfinished story. Hell he had the DVD's he could have staged his disappearance and make Steve look like they did it.

This was a good start to a story, but only a start. It is incomplete. I was thinking 4 -5* until you just quit. Seems like you just got tired and quit. What there was of it is pretty good. 3*

good start for the story, but where's the rest? What happened to wide and Steve. I hate partial stories. Need more payback.

where is the rest?

I enjoyed it but like most commentors say there should be a sequel. Also, a million in cash should have at least paid for a PI to let him know whats going on back home. And maybe get Steve's nuts in a sling lol.

not much.

Another good story without a finish.

Good story. Could use another page??

I read it again and this still needs a follow up

A good setup, but no real follow-through, just left dangling in the wind. Pity.

Good start, but wheres the rest of the story. Disappointing.

Looked like the author had PME…pre mature ejaculation!

What a great half if a story. Did they make it,

Desperately needs a sequel, a long and involved one.

It was a good idea for a story. But you never developed it. At the very least, he would have confided in his kids, so they knew the “why” as to he left. And hiding in the USA is a lot harder to do, than a shithole, Latin American third world country. I am pretty sure if this was for real, he would have totally gone off grid. And this includes, a third world new wife. I gave it two stars for the story line.

4 stars - Yes, I agree with a comment below about leaving North America. I have traveled to many countries and there are too many better and safer choices around this world. North America would certainly be my last choice.

This is the start of a great story. Please continue the series.

Another cop out ending.... this style of writing is annoying. If you are going to write a story please bother to actually have an actual conclusion.

Good story a follow up would be great.

Nice but about a third of a story

seems like u wrote this when u were shitting in the potty?

Incomplete.

⭐⭐⭐

1 star for the extreme disappointment caused by an unfinished story.

Utter shame. Compared to your other stories this one feels like going to a restaurant, ordering a chicken parmesan and getting salmonella from eating it, because while everything else looked good, the chef was an idiot that believed serving uncooked chicken would get him famous because nobody else would serve it and only he thought of this "bright" idea.

Now the cook is famous, famous for being a plonker.

Good start, incomplete

No ending

How did this unfinished crappy story rate over four stars? 1*

What a load of shit

As others have said- another unfinished story.

It needs a private confrontation even if it's over the phone.

time to change your name to 'Like rotten wine'.....

“TO WHOM THIS PUSSY BELONGS??” Are you taking the piss. Not only one of the most over used cliches used in LW, but by far the most hilarious example.

Sequel, please.

Our hero could start by sending his DVDs to the police. Or to his attorney, with instructions to show the police.

DVDs would not convict her. She did not sgree with Steve. MC fled and took the kids out of the country. He is a fugitive. Glad the kids ate behind him now. Who knows what happened to Steve. Probably left her when no gravy train. At least the kids ate the MC's.

Absolutely wish this had a sequel to it, feels like it could be a great series of stories.

kids ruin absolutely everything

Probably the most used comment but damn it finish the story. Chapter two would have them over 18 and livin a good life while the slut goes broke trying to find them.

I still like this a lot!

wanted more of this story.

Not a bad story… to start with but the author must have gone to sleep (or was he the runaway dad) because he forgot to FINISH THE DAMN STORY!!!

Good stuff. Loved how he convinced the kids.

Good start, but needs more!

When you write a story (and this one has a good start) FINISH THE DAMN STORY BEFORE YOU POST IT!!!

story needs to be finished

Nope, sorry a whole lot too simplistic, and the bookkeeping needs tending to, million bucks, must have won the lottery on the way. BUT hey it was entertaining and that's all that counts in the end.

Good concept, but you cheated us out of an ending.