All Comments on 'Grief'

What a very evil person you must be if that is all you could take from this story. 2nd time through - truly moving. Still 5 *****

Wow, I've never been so moved by a story on this site! We were lucky to have raised our sick child to adulthood only to see a relapse. She, however, remains strong and with us. There is so much truth in this story regarding how much a couple loses during the fight for your child's life. The reproaches and recriminations over perceived slights cause pain each parent never intend to inflict on the other.

Love can prevail! It has, so far, in our real life, and this story supports that. Thank you!!!

I have sat here crying through your words. I now need to hug my wife and kids. Truly amazing story.

Very well written. I couldn't hold back my tears.

Every time I read this I cry. My nephew lost his son of three months to a heart defect. Both parents were destroyed by it, but persevered by taking care of their other children, but mainly by communicating with each other! This story rates a 5/5 as we used to say in the military!

Thank you again for the offering!

The pathos in this story is an emotionally draining experience.

So far, anyway.

Thank you for that one, oshaw.

....why they weren't at least trying to make more babies during Rachel's early years. Most couples I've known who are working on growing a family like to have them a couple of years apart. Lord knows I tried to make that happen when I was living that part of my life, but it took a while for Mrs. B to catch the second time.... ;-)

In any case, this story is a real tear-jerker on many levels. It was truly sad to see so many years of joy devolve so quickly into the near-death downward spiral that almost consumed their marriage. To say that I'm happy with the resolution you provided would be a significant understatement....

Thanks for another fine read!

The snowflakes in the end was a great touch. I had tears flowing down my face. You're amazing author to elicit that type of emotion from the reader. Too many stories and in pain with no resolution. I think everybody likes a happy ending. The stories have pain with no reconciliation is too much of a downer. Great story. How could anyone give you less than a five?

This is the second time I have read this story and it's still a tear-jerker right to the end .Excellent writing and I wonder if the author shed a few tears when writing it and proof reading .

Oshaw, this story may be the most intimate and introspective of your writings that I have read so far. So absorbing in its depth of personal perspective. I am pacing myself through your stories and dread my completion. Was so glad to see your new work posted here. Thank you, again.

Thank you for a very good story. Now I need to blow my nose and wipe my eyes.

This is a tear-jerker without being maudlin. You masterfully articulated the difficult description of the reconciliation end. A lesser story teller might have made it unbelievable. Having your characters not actually committing adultery made that easier. Very Well Done!!

It doesn't matter how many times I've read this story..it still makes me cry. I'm happy..

This the story I have ever read and I cried four time .I have lost my sonTodd and my wife . Thank you FF5

Earlier this am I read your story Interest. Enjoyed it immensely. So want looking for your site and just finished your Grief story. Very well done, I can't wait to read the rest of your stories.

Thank you for a most beautiful story, held me gripped from the start to the end, not many Literotica stories have held my attention to such an extent.

I didn't guess the ending about half way through, I feel that the writer probably has had some sort of similar experience.

You made me cry. Please keep up the good work.

Damn....!

Oshaw

Thank you for this wonderful contribution. I must admit to going through quite a few tissues while reading your work. It was able to produce powerful emotions in your readers and that elevated your tale from those others that appear in this category. I hope to read more of your contributions. Must remember the Kleenex!

Reading on a phone and my wet eyes make the tiny text even harder to read.

On a porn site no less.

Well done

I'd of filed for divorce as-soon-as I could after the funeral services were over with. Her lack of trust, love, cheating and the belief that I could get the law suite over turned would be all reasons why I would file.

One of the absolute BEST stories on the entire site! It could have been a real downer, OSHAW did a superlative job of balancing emotions surrounding the emotional turmoil surrounding the impact that the stress of losing an only child can have on a marriage.

Kudos OSHAW!

All I can say is WOW you need to write more than on a porn site. Never had a story hit me like this

5 stars right here what resolve and dedication

Not ashamed to admit that i cried at this is sadly beautiful and pulled me in just as your others have done ,welldone 5 stars

The emotional upheaval throughout this story was heart wrenching to say the least. I found myself emotionally involved and hoping Oshaw would find a way for two hurting soulmates to renew their love and faith with each other by the end. Like any roller coaster ride, the last climb followed by the last almost free fall and then coasting to rest while wondering if your legs will work when you finally climb out of the ride. OMG.

Yep. Time to find the dogs and my wife and go for a walk and tell her how much I love her.

Thank you...I think

To real for me . Wonderful story of the heartache of loosing a child and what it does to a marriage. Thanks.

Love, despair, grief and more emotions all in one story.

Thoroughly enjoyed it and even though i am an older guy, i cried like a baby..

Thanks a lot !!

Sad, well written....JUST WOW!

This is a real life scenario that is played out f2ffsomewhere in this country every day that unfortunately does not turn out with this ideal ending do to human emotions, pride and ego.

Great story, so many of us go similar hints in our lives without noticing those beside us and we miss those simple feeling by getting list in the day to day. Thank you for the 2x4 reminder of not taking things for granted.

I just got feelings in my eye.

I came here to feel things that aren't feelings Dammit.

GREAT STORY. CRIED LIKE A BABY, OR MAN. I'M IRISH AND SLAVIC AND A VIETNAM COMBAT VET. I CAN CRY IF I WANT. (GREAT NAME FOR A SONG?)

Probably the best story by this or any author...Well done !!! Thank you

No contest. Gonna go hug my girl now.

I really hope that an independent filmmaker's reading this and is thinking about asking the writer's permission to make a movie out of it. Because it has every aspect of becoming an award winning movie if done rightly so.

Sometimes beauty is so powerful it transcends death and alters life forever.

You touched it here oshaw.

Wow, unexpected but just what I needed.

It stared off with the very sad illness of Rachel. I kept on thinking ... For Fucks sake get on with it!" But when the surprise came and they found each other again I was rooting for their marriage to work. I am reading this story on a Christmas day 2017 and thank you for sharing! Loved it Stukkend! like we say in South Africa. It means a hell of a lot!

Glad I'm typing, not speaking, for my comment. Too choked up to talk.

This story is so raw, so evoking.. One of the very best I've read - it might as well have been a beautiful movie I was watching as I felt the range of strong emotions.. Drifting from love to passion to pain to awe to joy.. great story.

Well Done.

What an incredible read. Thank you for writing such a great story.

It is hard to write whilst trying to stem the flow of tears that came while reading this story, Thank you very good read.

Beamer 142

I just read this for the fourth time. The first time was on the first day it was published. My reaction was same as the first time I read it...I cried like a baby. The story is that real and that good. What more can I say.

So well written not what I was expecting from this but a fantastic story .

Only two criticisms:

1. I found it difficult that he took equal if not more blame. He was rug sweeping her emotional betrayal of him which happened long before he strayed. This never works in infidelity.

2. Why on earth did they not take her to a snowy region at Christmas, quite astounding and reflecting their selfish thinking throughout their daughter's illness.

Otherwise superbly written tale of tragedy, great sadness and emotional cheating with a happy ending if that is possible in the circumstances.

The story pulled the right strings, I have to admit. The one where uh...whoever...drew a picture showing her position after her upcoming death was a good device. I mean it can probably be reduced to an academic exercise, but as it is and where it's used, it's special.

One thing that worries me is that the female child was emasculated. It doesn't follow. Emaciated would make sense, however.

The story goes into good detail while spanning long periods of time. The detail was closely tied with moving the plot along. If it's not done right, the end result is terribly boring, and the story avoided that. Of course, the more compelling the plot, the more you can get away with. The editor(s) did a job worthy of praise for their discretion.

OK, I know pain can allow extreme changes to occur, and the pain can be emotional or physical, and can get people's asses out of their heads so fast they'll get whiplash. The scene that sparked the reconciliation, whether aware of it or not, is believable, for reasons. Any number of outcomes could come from that. But they dropped the people they were loving too fast. It is more thermodynamically favorable to continue with their new loves if the divorce is friendly than to battle the baggage of resentment in my opinion. It was already in motion. And apart from that, they led two people on for years!

Damnit. Then The waterworks.

Obviously 5-stars... 6 if I could.

Alphabetically, this is your best story yet. Thanks from an old grandfather.

This is the first time I have ever cried reading a Literotica story.

There is something odd about a 54-year-old 6'7" 260lb still chiseled man crying at his computer at 8:30 am on a Saturday morning. I think I will go wake up my Grandkids and hug them.

Thank you for a very emotional moment while reading your wonderful story

Are those you can read 3 to 5 times, and each time you get a very strong emotional reaction. And this one makes me sad,,,,,in spite of the quasi- happy ending

Great love story! 5*

Sad but close to the heart.

Tears, tears and chuckles; thank you for a wonderful read, one that I will return to!

A heart-rending and heart warming story of love, anger, despair, death and rebirth.

Quite wonderful.

LA

We lost a young son. He lived 58 days. His mother only got to hold him once. I got to hold him after they removed all the tubes and wires. I sang softly to him as he took his last breath, That was 18 years ago. My heart was breaking then. My heart is breaking now as I type this.

It was a good well written story. I'm sorry I could not finish it. I am crying too much to read any more.

In loving memory of Thomas Stanley Dvorak

George J Dvorak II

I would have rated this higher if I could.

I know the pain of losing people I loved.

This story is more of a reconciliation despite tragedy.

That which and who seek to destroy us can only make them stronger.

Please continue to honor us with these incredible stories.

Man. I never thought I would read such an emotional story on this site. It was wonderul and any score given to it would be just not enough.

Thank you so much for such a sweet emotional story.

Brilliantly written and very emotional but I do not think it belongs on Literotica! Did not like it at all! I keep on hoping that SOMETHING good was about to happen only to end at the gravesite! No! NO! No!

Very well written.

Engaging and emotional story.

one of, if not the best ive read on this site.

a shame the stars only go to 5.

This story is emotionally drained me.

But honestly if i were Ray, i wouldn't put up with her disrespect n bringing another man to my house a talk down about me. I would have just let Marilyn cried herself out on funiral day. N next day would just announced n serve he divorce paper. Seriously, I wouldn't have believe her if she said she hadn't fuck John. Would be on my way starting a New life without her.

Until you have walked a mile in the parents shoes dont judge. It is an awful trial, I have walked some hard trials with one of my children health wise amd can relate. I am glad she found the drawing and it came to pass😀 about the brother amd sister that fortold there arrival.

Our daughter was diagnosed with a brain tumor when she was 5. Her first surgery was 12 hours and now, 15 years and 36 surgeries later she is still with us albeit with several major health issues. Unless you have a child with life threatening/changing medical issues you can't possibly understand the feelings, anger, joy, sacrifices, pain, empathy, guilt, sympathy, fear, exhaustion, and everything else that goes along with that emotional journey. Depending upon where you look, divorce rates of couples with a child with severe medical issues range from 24-90%, with most estimates being in the 70-90% range. It takes a lot of work to take care of a sick child; multiple weekly doctor visits, frequent hospitalizations, oftentimes massive amounts of medications which with today's insurance nightmare is a full time job keeping track of, physical therapy, physological therapy, insurance forms and payments, and keeping all of your child's conditions/past treatments/ history current and available for regurgitation at every doctor visit. THEN you can start thinking about your other kids, and THEN, each other!

I can't say I haven't thought about what it would be like to walk out of this situation and start over sometimes when I meet a woman that attracts me. But the thought of leaving my daughter and my wife, whom I dearly love even though we've had more than our fair share of trials, leaves me with a guilty and terrified feeling and knowing the pressures we are both under, even though we talk openly and constantly; I would be very hesitant to kick her to the curb for doing what the wife in this story did, which was merely vent to a friend when her husband would no longer listen.

There's a lot of truth in the old adage about "walking a mile in one's shoes" because it gets you, as the great Paul Harvey always said, "the rest of the story".

It was a very emotional story. I got so involved that I had tears running down my cheeks. Well written. I have two healthy children and I can understand the number one priority is to concentrate on the sick child, This puts extreme stress on the marriage, individual feelings, job distraction, etc. Well done with the story......

having lost 3 before they had a chance to live . they were between 3 months of being born . has to be worst after 5,6 or 7 yrs old then losing them . lost a niece at 5 &1/2 yrs old to brain cancer

It's been a while since I read this, so I won't say that you're wrong, but I don't remember him "no longer listening," and she wasn't "merely venting," but was dangerously close to AT LEAST an emotional affair.

This is hard to read. A very emotional, moving story. I , fortunately, have not had the experience of a sick child. But as an ER nurse, I interact almost daily with people in this situation and one cannot avoid being emotionally invested in their grief. My first time with this story, but I will read it again. Most likely more than once.

That was some emotional story with heart felt love and a massive amount of pain for the parents. This a complete great story - thanks for sharing.

Wow!

I have said this to only one other author (Althea Rose) on this site: What you write is not story telling. You are producing literature.

Thank you.

I do not give fives!

This is not the kind of story I would have ever expected to find here, but I'm so happy to have discovered it. You really can pull at the heart strings.

Almost 400 comments! That must be a record for this category. And no wonder. It is a magnificent story, presented professionally.

I don't normally take the time to comment on stories, but i had to this time. My daughter-in-law is a childhood cancer survivor. Leukemia. I cried thinking i wouldn't have known her nor play with my grandson, if she had died. Later that day I was thinking again about losing her like in your story, and I realized I felt that way because your characters were so real and their emotions spot on. Thanks for a great emotional rollercoaster of a story. Worth the five stars.

Best story I've read here. Truly touches the emotions of dealing with a sick loved one.

Fabulous writing of a great story. Don’t like admitting that you bought me to tears as I read this piece of work!

On 9/15/18 I left a message of praise here. On 9/20/18 my wife of 66 years died of leukemia. She was 92. I wish the tears helped, but they don't seem to.

Is someone cutting onions here? Or did my room suddenly become filled with dust? Someone, pass me a tissue!

This is the most gripping and emotionally draining story I've ever read here. You have written a classic.

I came here because of a tale by Randi, I am ever grateful to her for pointing out this masterpiece of emotions.

You have taken us on a rollercoaster ride of love, grief, woe and recovery. Thank you for this tale that can only have a max rating of 5/5 even though it deserves much more.

There are so many stories of couples who split up because of the loss of a child that this story stands out as remarkable. It's easy for me to say that when this all first started and the cancer was diagnosed Ray and Marilyn should have anticipated the extraordinary trauma that would come to them and prepare by making a vow of communication. The only way to weather this storm is by working together, not just by tending to their daughter, but by tending to themselves as well. Only by making the extra effort could they avoid the separation that is almost inevitable. For someone who has not really experienced this horror I can intellectualize this sequence of events, but I know it can't be easy. Their doctor or a parent or a friend should have warned them, but everyone gets locked into their own heads and their own needs. Ray and Marilyn's reconnection is somewhat miraculous, but I'd like to believe, not improbable. The whole package was very well done and deserves all the 5* ratings it received.

I wish it were longer so I could feel the emotions of the story and the characters for a longer time. Truly moving and excellently written.

I hate to be redundant, but WOW! What a story. This author, “oshaw”, is a master at weaving tales, and this one is a masterpiece. Thank you, oshaw.

Sad but BEAUTIFUL. Great writer.

what an emotional roller coaster, cancer is the worst thing that can happen to a family, Knowing that drug companies have a cure and wont release it, because lets face it. There is no money in healthy people. Drug companies own the politicians which is why I cant stand politicians or lawyers, Most politicians are lawyers and what do you call 1000 lawyers at the bottom of the ocean? A good start 5 Stars on a very well written story

I have a different opinion to the other comments.Sick daughter or not ,once he learnt about John he should have divorced .her

Too many times a family is destroyed by the loss of a child, either by cancer or an accident. No parent should outlive a child. I love the story because two people held onto their first love for each other and survived. Five stars!

P.S. Contributions to St. Jude's Children's hospital is a good investment that can make a difference in saving kids like Rachel.

stars would be nice. Just re-reread this wonderful example of a true wordsmiths art. You brought me to tears again Oshaw - well done!

You need to read something beautiful again after reading through.most of the stuff posted here. This is absolutely one of the best.

You make an old person sorrowful. Slap hapy papy #9

Pure crap, I know it happens all the time, just makes me frustrated. The women was just manipulating both guys. John the cheater, deserved to get shit on, but the husband just took it, and forgave her, why. Cause she spread her legs, guess thats good enough. After all the drama with the little girl i just don't buy it.

Mate you need help......how about you try writing a bit of fiction, see how easy it is!!

OSHAW, awesome story, tears smiles and a bit of sex thrown in, Very few times do I give 5* but you got them from me.

In circumstances such as this story, emotional cheating is not cheating in my book.

God forbid how I would go thru anything like this

JJ

But God it’s wonderful.

This is one of the greatest, and most realistic stories written. A most excellent job!

Been through the exact very same thing in the story except for the ending a few years ago. Lost my daughter to cancer too, just a different type. Your story had me in tears several times so I couldn't read it all at one time, you captured the agony perfectly. If you didn't experience this yourself I'm glad, if you did you have my sympathy. Ignore the doubters on this one, they just can't understand. Signed: BTW

Your to good to be writing on this web site. Take your talents to a publisher. You ever head of Sandra Brown? She is a world renowned writer who writes similar stories. You are as good if not better. Don't sell yourself short.