All Comments on 'Halloween Mom'

kill his own father but let graham live?

at least give some justification, like, jealousy of ownership of her or something like that

Good stories? Meh! Some are,some aren't.Give you one thing tho',you sure know how to wind up the audience.

Cheers,GreWulf.

Didn't need the murder

It was a good story until the murder of his dad.

Sorry, but. Now it just sucks.

God you think these people never heard of Oedipus

Wtf, so good till the end! God now i can’t unread it.

Yuck why murder?

Can understand when he scares the shit off Graham!

I agree with the others, the murder of dad was bad

Interesting little twist at the end. I was curious as to why the son chose to reveal himself but damn, I was not expecting that outcome!

Murdering the dad ruined it. Should have caught him doing men or something and that would explain why he didn't do it for his mom. Also the ending was to abrupt. This is a mistake many amateur writers make and often ruin what could have been a good story.

Killing the dad and using the word slut and slave ruined it

Great except for the ending...

Interesting story, but the end didn’t work at all for me. Didn’t really see a need for the story to go there. Thanks for sharing.

Good story until the end!! I know it's fantasy but that ending is ridiculous. But, for some reason you like to put duff endings on your stories !!? Why?? Before reading this I was in two minds to go back to the main board and start reading another author. You made my mind up for me!!

Build p u was Great. If you has spent as much time on the sex and end as you did the build up it would have been Great.

Whore and a murderer? A waste and insult to this particular 'genre'.

Fair story up until the ending. Also, why did you feel it necessary to through in the pregnancy bit? Way lame . . .

It ended too soon. As for the dad, he just put him out of his misery. The wife is better off. He'd probably have suffered a heart attack if he told him the truth anyway.

The rape aspect was not good for the story and the killing of his father was over the top