All Comments on 'I Had a Plan'

Selling organs is not legal in the United States. The premise therefore is flawed and absurd. I am sure that selling an organ happens and maybe illegally in the USA but that flaw kept your score low.

it is a very touching story but what it is doing in a erotica?

What else is there to say?

Like most everyone that commented, I thought this story was well written and an interesting consept. Ohh, Anonymous, It is very illegal to sell body parts...but who said that he sold it legally? There is a blackmarket for things like that. Many people will buy anything, if they need it desparately enough.

It is against the law to sell an organ. You can donate it but not sell it. Other than that it was a good story.

This was a very smart and well thought out story of just desserts. I don't think it's at all likely, and as the child truly is an innocent bystander, thankfully so. It works well as a fantasy though. Good job.

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Damn good story. Very well written clear and concise!

one more thing to add, to aonymous: anonymous dolt.

thanks for sharing on Lit.

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A very succint and clean revenge tale, except that as always the true victim gets the same punishment as the guilty parties.

Short and to the point, it's good. I have to say, all the other background info another commenter requested is not needed. That would just be fluff around the actual content. As it is now it certainly gets the message across. Good story.

Agree with another poster - to bad the ex-wife was not dying at the same time.

No buildup, nothing. Reads just like that, a paragraph in a newspaper.

Just plain dumb.

The only thing that he would like to see is her head on a stick. Where's Vlad when you need him?

One of the best story lines I have read on this site. Great Read. "Thank You"

Read all your stories here on Literotica and SOL. Keep up the good work.

Very good story, it was very succinct. If I've to put it straight, you lost a "golden opportunity". A little more background, how they met, their marriage, why Rita wanted a divorce, his really tough days when he was labbled as a pedophile, start from the scratch, little Amanda's story etc. You should've worked on these details and take it from me, this story would've been even better.

There are not many writers from India here on this site, so keep writing, but you sure need to work on few things, especially on details. Thanks for your sharing.

Good read .

Thanks for sharing...

If Rita had just gone for the divorce without trying to destroy him Mark would have been more than willing and able to donate the kidney to save Gordon; but then the church may or may not have been able to raise the funds to save Amanda.

Well written quick story.

Thanks for writing.

I love the story line, but it could have been a little longer. Some description of the faces of the two animals that tried to destroy him would have been good as realization dawned .

it was too short. it does suck for "little gordy" but then, thats what happens when you have monsters for parents. they planted kiddie porn so theyd get everything!? jesus, i hope they die a slow, painful death.

Except for the "sale" of an organ, something not allowed by law anywhere, your story is quite good and strikes home for me. That organ sales are illegal does nott mean they don't occur, of course; they do.

Your story hits home because I have a daughter named Amanda who has had two kidney transplants in the past ten years, her first from a cadaver and her second from a man who was a live donor.

I like it. Not exactly erotica but as divorce/revenge porn it's very workable. ^_^