All Comments on 'Mom Submission'

great story would like to read more

like to know when your next story will bill published

outstanding as always. cant wait to see jane get hers and then the sister and who ever else he wants

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I had to do a couple of re-reads on page 8. I got lost for a second when He became the feminine form "Domme". Thought I had missed something. Otherwise good story.

If your cunt got as wet writing this story as my cock got hard reading it, you must have had cum running down the crack of your ass!!!! SO GOOD.

My first, but not my last of yours.

it will be nice to see the next part

First one of your stories that I have read, but definitely not the last if you others are anything like this one. At the end of each page I found myself hoping there was another page and then another. Great story!

That is one sexy horny story thank you so much :)

This is why you are a fav of mine. Your stories aren't just sex stories but they have excellent plotlines. This begs for part two. I'd like to see her seduce her sister and give her to her son. Pretty please?

Absolutely outstanding story. I loved the Dom Bull son training his mother into being a slut. If there's not a follow up charting how the son fucks his Mom's sister into submission then there'll be a riot! Hopefully it's coming soon (no pun intended!)

When does the story with her sister come out, along with his other aquisitions and them getting together in multiples.

I truly hope you plan to add to this story.

more please much more the fifties and the now speaking up would do wonders forget subtle hints ask for it

Would love to get into these hot cunts. My harem could not wait to fuck and suck each other into oblivion. cunt lapping sex manic uk

I really got into your story and I enjoy the 'banter' back and forth. It's been a pleasure.. thank you for submitting your stories.

Excellent story line . hope you will continue with further chapters . there are so many angles left open for future development .

I could not get through pg 2 without going off. Then read the rest and went off again.

Another great submission - pardon the pun and double entendre. By all means, this story should continue - Sarah making Jane her bitch would be sweet justice - Mom seducing her sister for Joey - a 3 way with Joey, Mom and his aunt - Breanna bringing Sarah into the swinging realm as her sub. So many story lines just waiting to be continued. Great work Jasmine!

I hope that there is more of this story yet to come, with his mom probably getting pregnant and seducing her sister to give to her son as a slut, plus Jane being a submissive lesbian to his mom.

Damn that is a lot of story yet to be told.

Thanks for the read

It started out ok but is not worth wasting my time reading 8 pages of banter back and forth that I dont even care about... I give it a 2

This was a wonderful story and I loved the different angles you used. I thought the pregnant dom was a great idea and I love how you tied the entire neighborhood. One of your best stories and I hope you have a sequel.

You could have knocked me over with a feather when I saw my story, How to Dom Your Mom, mentioned here in your story! (Maybe you made up the name, too, but I'm going to pretend, at least, that you actually are referencing my story! lol) You are such a popular and respected author here--thank you!

I really enjoyed this story! So-o-o-o hot! Like Joey, I really get into the lead-up, the seduction, the capitulation. You did a great job here--and I particularly loved the sort of role-reversal you wrote here. I'll join the chorus of requests for a sequel!

wonderful

He asks his mother if she is protected, she replied she wasn't. So, does he end up making her into the ultimate mommy-slut but knocking her up? Does he end up doing the same to her sister? So many ways to take the next chapter...please continue.

There is only one problem, you leave us wanting more of another of your stories. Normally, this is a good thing. But your getting quite a few irons in the fire.

Anyhow, great read as always.

Your Fan,

MasterJ

First, I want to thank you for completely submitting, a complete submission. :/)

I love being able to read a story all the way through, not having to wait an unspecified time for the next submission, more often than not I won't visit Literotica for a few random days, and miss the next chapter completely.

I also love your writing style, and the depth of your fantasies. I have always had a very deep well of very taboo fantasies to draw from, starting at a very young age (4 or 5 yrs. old). Your ability to put your readers right there with the characters is a trait few writers, at least here, possess.

Tanx again, Tony

A really talented writer is silkstockingslover.

Uses Great imagination and skill to produce fabulous tales.

Not only that, but also when writing for the Inc genre, she creates truly believable submissive Moms, which is not an easy thing to do.

Thank you silkstockingslover, for at least making the Mom submit completely to her Son in this story, even if she apparently has to also submit to a lesbian lover!.

Now if only most of your talent was not wasted on the lesbian slant for Inc. the most popular genre here at the Lit ... :)

I know and I am only kidding.

Well half kidding actually.

really sexy, felt like i was their watching, i hope joey knocks up his mom and aunt in the sequel while also seducing the ministers wife. and despite the fact that their not milfs i want him to get his cousins too.

anyway, update soon

Your story deserves more than 5 stars. Good luck in the contest

No affection and in my opinion your structure was just an illusion. Your protagonists seemed so flexible, too flexible in order for you to 'paint your picture'. There was no challenge and it spoiled it for me. Their comical conversations during fucking were a major turn off. Of course that is just my opinion and of course it doesn't mean I'm right. Just commenting.

rather normal in a Harem that thier is structure. in ours Mistress is on top, our twins then this one is bottom.

Very sexy story, this one made a puddle that dripped onto the floor.

Can't wait for the next chapter; and Aunt Carissa. Keep on trucking.

good pace to this story; loved the concept. will there be a story of aunt Carissa's seduction?

The pace of action in a story this long is amazingly consistent. Congratulations.

Why anonymous? That's the type of comment you should be proud to stand behind. Well considered, thoughtful and respectful.

I voted 5 stars and have read several of your stories and love them all. Even though you said the story was for the 2013 Nude contest I hope you consider continuing this as a series.

i hate it when a sub from inside the family is passed around like a frisbee. it just seems to show no love or care for the family member. plus we have all heard you cant serve 2 masters, so she would need to choose who to be with the cheating wife/friend or her son.

Hello, long time reader, and a big time fan, I hope you take my praise and criticism with an open heart. Unlike many if ever I give negative it is only to try and raise the craft of what I am reading.

I like the story for sure, the sex scenes were very intense on me. I will say the best scene was the teacher discussing how she put on her wedding dress for her new master, a fantasy of mine where I take the place of an adulteress woman's husband at what should be the most intimate moment of their lives. But I will say that the build up seemed a bit hurried, what I mean by that is in many of your stories the main character seems to become a sub almost immediately, or the explanation is wild college days. The mom just gave in within a day of discovering her son's activity. Next thing we know she is bi with the teacher, it all just seemed like it could have been better paced.

Anyway, I felt a little more build up like in She Male School, or the brilliant What Mom Doesn't Know series where the target of seduction isn't totally submissive right away would have done wonders for your competition. The rehash of the same characters seems to be coming more frequently, your characters are push over subs like in Pantyhose Tales: Blackmailed MILF or Like Mommy Like Daughter recent work with the same main character. Look at your earlier writing, i.e. Lesbian Love Story is a favorite, because up until submission, doubt always existed in the story until the two made love which made the reading more than just erotic, but also carry a lot of heart which if I am a judge would pull me more towards you. The characters here just seemed to played out for me, and oddly people I couldn't get interested in. A more modern example to draw on would be sibling love story, the two in that story were so much more gripping as people. A bit more growth in the way of the mother, or a slower, more methodical seduction from the son would be amazing.

For what you have written I give a 5 because it was a fun to read, but as I stated I know your work can still be greater.

PS: Can't wait for your next story.