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- Rehab 101
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Click here"You held my hand all night, didn't you." Tears ran down her cheeks. She said, "Chucky, I love you, just give me a little time. Thank you, I needed your touch. That was the best sleep I have had in years."
- COMMENTS
Anonymous4 months agoWhat a returning wounded vet story. What imagination and a daring operation. Kudos to author.
114FSO11 months agoFurther chapter or chapters please.
Not bad. Being retired military, I do understand the abbreviated or truncated language. Still, it could use more information. Possibly Chapter-2 in a background filler role, expanding and explaining in better detail what transpired leading up to the final shots fired. It would be nice, along with closing many open holes.
Anonymousover 1 year agoWhy would he take her back? Why do these people in these stories get so fixated on to one person when that person treats them like shit?
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoAs it stands, the story is disjointed and half the time sounds like it's in code! Not well written.
Anonymousover 5 years agoThis has the potential to be a grwat story; however, I believe you should consider expanding on the plot as it rather trunkated. Also the story ends too soon.
Anonymousover 7 years agoThis is like reading Chapter 12 of a 24 Chapter book. Far too much prior information missing. Readers are expected to fill in the gaping holes. Needs a helluva lot of work.
Tw0Cr0wsabout 8 years agoAntwhan Escobar
First name is Ebonics for Antoine (which is French).
Last name is Hispanic.
If he was Cuban (Hispanic) his first name would be Antonio.
Anonymousover 8 years agoReally enjoyed this story though as i have noticed with many of your stories you seem to end them a bit too soon so it was great having the murphy's come together in this one and help tie up a few loose ends.
Tavadelphinover 9 years agoPosse Comitatus has lot's of room for feds to do what locals need them to de - whether he likes that or not.o now a days.
Activate Homeland security concerns and most bets are off
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The story was good for what was there - but would have been much better with what was missing - how did she get into trouble? Did she go looking for fun in the wrong places and get in over her head? Did she get conned by someone she trusted? What did she do to make the asshat want her enough to threaten people with death?
I still liked it and outcome though - he now has his wife back and owns Mari
Tw0Cr0wsalmost 10 years agoThere is too much missing from this.
How did she get involved?
If she was a normal wife was she just snatched off the street?
Just picked at random?
What was she doing?
An ordinary whore is not worth the surveillance gear in an empty house, much less that many people actively watching her.
That many people following her husband?
If they know or even suspect he is that dangerous why would they make an enemy of him?
This writer has not been here in a long time, but maybe others can learn from his mistakes.
