All Comments on 'Scenes from a Marriage'

And with each read, my emotions pour out for Matt and Lynn and the destruction of their marriage.

really sad tale. too bad it is too often repeated. one of the most gripping flash stories I have read

and it just gets better, no doubt best flash story on LW

nothing i've read conveys the emotions better. thanks 5

Excellent job. 5*

Incredible story.

What a powerful story. As one who has been there, the husband's emotions were especially true. Just as you can't un-ring the bell or get the pee out of the pool, you can't un-fuck a cheating spouse.

Well what did the cheating whore wife expect? You play you pay. I hate cheaters.

Probably the best I've read on this site. Very minimalist. Not a single extra word, sentence or paragraph. Leaves just enough to the imagination for the reader to easily fill in the blanks.

get going Ohio.

wrote a story where the husband wasn't a total wimp. Will wonders never cease?

the kids "tell" part of the story was a very nice touch. There are likely many guys out there who love to get involved with a woman with two small children. NOT!

best flash story on the net!

If you are going to fuck around on your partner, make sure you love the person you are having the affair with. Because hopefully you are going to need a place to live after your cheating ass is thrown out.

...the best? I don't know, but it was quite good.

I have said it before but is worth repeating. The best flash story ever written!

....I once dropped a dish.....regardless of the events that led to dropping it was shattered all that remains is that knowing it was fragile I should never have dropped it or got myself in a situation where it could happen.....

..."Do you love him?"..is catch 22...damned if you do, damned if you don't....you are history....if you do you're in the wrong bed...if you don't then your love for rates lower than a casual fuck.......not what any "normal" spouse signs up for.....

Now imagine feeling like the husband did after finding out two years after your wife dies.

Damn

It would be awsome to read a copanion though to show details

Although I know its a flash story

Ythebadger was quite right there were no winners. But he failed to mention the two little people. What she did distroyed their chance to grow up with two loving parents together. They were the real losers!!!!!!

and i mean everyone shoud read this - the best flash story on the net - and give it five stars. in one page is says it all.

Short. To the POINT. Extremely REALISTIC in actions.

5 stars and favorite story!!!

No winners - both losers. Beautifully written.

Short and yet the most powerful I've read. Excellent work.

In a very short story, you managed to convey the damage infidelity can cause to

a relationship. There is no dramatic language, no loud yelling and cursing, and still it is one of the most moving (and painful) stories posted on this site.

Five stars

THE BEST FLASH STORY EVER WRITTEN!

Stupid slut got off easy compared to what she actually deserves-never would have let the slut see the major holiday.

The opening of this story was Electric !!!

Just four words;'' Do you love him? ''

The first story I've read, that depicts the great pain that a Man goes through.

The brilliance of NOT wanting to hear How or Where & etc.,the love affair started.

Too true - why give ease to others whilst suffering MORE yourself ?

Another sad and painful story,that will linger long in the memory.....

Often once the pain of infidelity is received and processed there is no going back to a loving life with the adulter. The wife was sad and sorry and well aware of her own emotional reaction if the situation were reversed. What she was never aware of that if she had been her husband she would have acted just as he did. No future for them.

The problem is the person who sought out the cheater, the predator. ALL of the family members lose.

offers a "cuck's eye view" on this story - unfortunately his cuckeye view as an admitted cuck on other ohio stories is less insightful.

this was a great story.....5 stars

I may have commented on this story before, I don't know, but this is masturful storytelling...enthralling.

Excellent word command, superb emotional depiction. I stand in reverent awe.

5*****from me.

Regards,

-Pultoy

I don't have the words to express my admiration for your work, so all I can do is rate and give you a five.

The kids are the real losers......as well as the cheater. OR is it everyone?

what can a man realy do about trust when it is gone, keep writin, you are very good writer. I get realy pissed, but you make things more reasonable in my own soul, first I would KILL and that would'nt workout too good so make us see a better road to take....TY...bill

can't say i have ever read a "flash" story as good as this. just great - already gave it a 5 - and probably commented about it before too.

Really touching and compelling slice of life.

the cornhole rudely buggered, the fat cock smoked, betrayed!

You almost have to loose someone you love in order to fully understand the emotional pain involved in divorce or death. Very well written and a fine story.

Great story. Short and to the point. Matt the calm husband. Lynn the cheating wife. No I didn't call her the usual names I call cheating wives. She obviously regretted what she did, or should I say obviously regretted being caught at what she did and immediately started making amends to Matt. He was so broken hearted, however, it was only a matter of time till he left and moved on with his life.

Definitely a "How what not to do for a good marriage" tale.

DON"T CHEAT ON YOUR SPOUSE

In the end, everyone suffers.

There are just things that cannot be repaired no matter how much you want to.

Ohio, I believe you have caught the essence of the emotion of what occurs between spouses when one cheated. This story is short to the point. This is one fault in this story.... It to dammm short !!!!

five stars.

is there enough to go around. TK U MLJ LV NV

I think you really well made the point that there are things that you cann not repair, as much as you may want to. Some may say we all make mistakes. That may be true but there is no law of nature that, I know of, that states that mistakes have no consequences or that one should not be punished for making a mistake. Driving wrong way on the highway and killing a family with 3 little Kids may very well be a mistake but do you really think you shouldn't be punished ?

Short, but straight to the point. The whay the story started was superb, and how it ended, realistic. 5 stars!

The non-confrontational way he said;- 'Do you love him?' - just blew me away !

His efforts to overcome the pain,images and etc.,going on holiday & trying to overcome the angst - superbly making his point when taking her from the rear,whilst realising her lover had seen her face in orgasm...

Very good story.

Thank You.

really

This story was interesting in that it showed the slow disintegration of a marriage. I, having been there, know this is probably the norm as opposed to the spectacular end so often depicted in most stories.

As for DWornock, your convoluted comments about superior genes are way beyond stupid. You must think you're some kind of intellectual but, in the end, you just sound moronic.

There must be more to this story! What happens later, divorce reconcilliation? I consider any story incomplete until it reaches a stable condition or resolution.

He only did what most males of all species do; that is, to punish any one who disrespect them.

She only did what most females of all species do; that is, find a good provider and then have sneaky sex to select the best genes for their eggs. For the most part, women that did not cheat when ovoluting given a low risk opportunity with superior males (males with greater bilateral symmetry) are not our ancestors. Even a 1 percent advantage over 1,000 generations (a very short time in evolutionary terms) would be an overwhelming advantage.

It serves no worthwhile purpose to divorce his wife when most likely the next wife will also cheat.

This would be one of most difficult style to write without story to appear disconnected. But this Author made it with consummate ease and skill.

One of the best on this site.

It was great, even including that one little bright spot where they tried very hard to make things work on that vacation.

One of the better short stories getting around, was kinda sad really...

Most authors submitting under the "Loving Wife" theme, when they do include the counseling aspect, show it to be ultimately successful. It seems to me that this account is much more realistic. How is trust ever to be restored?

I know this is coming a little late but I just saw this story.. I find that if it was the man that cheated everyone that commented will not write as they did if she did the something like he did in the "pissing scene".. i find that most people are always urging women to go back to the man that cheated on her.. to try and forgive him but when it comes to the woman cheating, most ppl are like "screw her" she deserves everything she got..

Why is that?

Your stories are very good and I find a nice trace of realism in them. Please continue your writing and I'll be waiting to read more of them. R.T.

Ohio you are very good. I wonder if you could try a follow on to this one explaining the wife's actions. Many have tried to rationally explain cheating and have failed completely ;may be you may be able to do it.

In any case pls keep writing you are near the top of my list on this site

Great story about the price one pays for ones actions.

It could be a blueprint for the futility of marriage counseling after a partners infidelity. After all, sex is just one part of the equation, its the loss of trust that is the most difficult if not impossible to ever forgive or forget. Great Story!

..... what a perfect description of what "every" cheating wife should go through after they "screw" their loving husbands over. If REVENGE had a name it would be this story! 5+++ OHIO!!!!!!!!!

Excellent Story! It was very sad but it probably painted a picture that was closer to reality than many of these stories where there are spectacular depictions of cheating and revenge. The wife is left with the choices that she made for herself and her family. Her mistakes caused everyone a whole lot of pain and she now has to live with it.

Thanks for sharing this cautionary tale!

A very realistic story. Including the pissing on the table. Angry betrayed folks will do crazy dramatic things. I only hope I can have my wits about me to do something as clear and dramatic in a similar moment.

Folks who think cheating is sexy, read this, understand this is really what it's like, and stop thinking creating pain for people who love is sexy.

Good story the whore got what she deserved

Tightly written. Just enough from each scene to enable me to imagine the hurt and the destruction caused by cheating and the efforts taken by both to 'get over it'.

I liked the description of how the 'duck' was being drawn by the little girl ... it made the scene so normal, so real, so true to life. Just as your story captured the emotions and actions of the husband and the wife.

No supermen or women here ... just normal people trying to deal with an event that destroyed trust between them. And leaving two damaged adults to continue life as best as they can.

I like the way you get the message across that trust in a relationship is vital. Such a small word that means so much. Distrust is certainly a killer.

I conclude that most Liter. authors have a hard time creating realistic communication between spouses. When we see high ratings of stories they often go to the stories where regardless of the situations the characters relate realistically in communicating with each other. In the stories where reconciliation is stonewalled it seems common to find unrealistic fantasies being played out or fetishes being served. I see Papatoad listed to the right and remember several of his stories with extensive talk between aggrieved partners that made the stories fascinating. Am hoping to find more in LW.

But, The trip with her seemed unnecessary. it all worked out in a good way, esp for ex-wife and her condequences.

Most of the time when somebody tries to write a compressed time segment story it turns out too fragmented and a horrible read , one of the most difficult types to pull off successfully without putting off the reader . I dont like that style but in this case you did a great job of pulling it off ! It wasn't all jumbled up and was just enough information to keep your attention and want to know how it plays out . Excellent .

That was a lot of hurt. I scanned through the comments and WOW near universal praise. I find it so sad though, this story should not be realistic at all. Why is such dysfunctional communication accepted as normal? The affair was a deal breaker for him, but he wouldn't admit to it in therapy, wouldn't discuss his pain, wouldn't even talk with his wife. The story doesn't reveal it but I'm guessing it was when she learned of the position restriction is when he finally made it understood he had emotionally checked out and had no plans to come back. And I'm guessing it was the wife who finally stated what he had been thinking all along.

I'm glad he found his happiness, but he won't stay happy. He's too screwed up to keep a relationship connected. But she might, after serious soul searching and facing her guilt, she just might not make the same mistake again and next time she'll give him a warning that her needs aren't being met; give him the opportunity to meet them or send her packing for being too needy.

so far. I've read all your stories in chronological order and to date, this is the most realistic I've read. Amazing job!!!

She could not have her memories because she literally fucked them away with her jocker. She deserves everything that comes to her . . .

I love the story, especially how you have some of the most crucial conversations and events happening during the most mundane of moments: raking the leaves, reading in bed, children unknowingly revealing ex-husband's new woman. Nice job.

everytime i read it. just so sad

This is an incredible snapshot of the real aftermath of cheating. Actually gave me tears. Terrific read. Thanks

What a superb author to create such a insight into human nature. Please more!!

Frigging sad man, but accurate.

Just enough information in this story to make it heart breaking. Would be nice to read a follow-on because this was so compelling. Liked it so much I read it more than once.

A very touching story. And very realistic. Wouldn't it be nice if PEOPLE, men AND women would think before they head down this path. Almost impossible to put all the pieces back together. THANK YOU

Superior in a number of ways.

The real essence of a divorce story distilled down to leave only the pain. Skilfull. Concise. Thanks

Short, succinct. Happy ending for husband, kids seem ok. cheater comes to realize what she lost. Best of endings.

action..reaction- cause...effect - realization

Great slices.

Like a series of photos. Great stuff.

It appears as if many of your readers miss the subtle depth of this story. A famous composer once said that music was the spaces between the notes....your story was music with the meaning in the words not used. In its simplicity, was the depth of reality.

Cheaters are so fucking stupid when they risk a good home, family and spouse. Cheaters who have nothing good to lose? Another matter, and another story.

that's life and the way it usally happen without the bullshit.

Sad but true, the story was told without pages and pages of how it used to be..It was right to the point and couldnt have been better written..i loved the comments Risq and Kolkore made on the true dilemma of cheating..I loved the pissing part,it showed Her that She had done the same to Her Husband,Her Family and the Childrens secure home.. as for forgiving dont mean that He had to live with Her..The story told why He could not,ie the sex at the resort..looking into her face knowing that She done the same to another and that the look of love and tenderness was not and has not been for Him exclusively cannot be wiped out of someones mind and heart..Sadly it became another broken Home for the Children,like so many are in these days..As for His moving on well why not?? There was nothing to wait for..As for the Wife crying at the end well thats what you pay for the play...I bet She never thought of that when She stepped out on her marriage..I certainly dont feel sorry for Her , just for the Children..awesome writing Ohio,thanks for the great read..

nuff said

I'm glad it was'nt an extrovert revenge story. This left a deep well of feelings far richer and more complex than that could have done. They came so close to surviving, their love strong but broken, crushed to dirt by her utter stupidity and human fallibility.He tried, she was contrite and the kids...but much as I willed a happy ending it was far too clever a story to pan out sentimentally. Gutting. I'm off to Group Sex (maybe even Fetish) to get over it! Mancelt.

Proof that a particularly short story can be poignant and say a lot without using words. Ohio remains in a group on a very short list as those who have to be regarded as our site's leaders in this genre. We hope you can find time to write often.

She cheated and it ended --end of story

In real life, sometimes the pain is to much and you just have to move on. Great story.

I hate to see a marriage end, but some can't be saved. Great writing. Care to write a reconciliation for it, it would be a challenge.

Describing so much with such a paucity of words. Talent was never more evident! Many thanks.

I can really see your improvement as a writer. With a sparsity of words, you told the wole story with feeling. Thanks

The Cobbler

one of the worst stories ever written in the literotica history i guess ohio is not able to understant the meaning of the word i forgive you. every time he writes a story his is interesting to humiliate the person who has done the mistake. i am sure you have not read a piece from the holy bible.lord says the one without sin let him throw the stone first . and something else only a real pig would piss on the table where people eat this pathetic husband did it oh you are way to sick my brother

leo katsaros

Instant Classic? Yep, added it to my fav's. // Anything else to add? That was the most literate nonerotic/erotic story I've read. // What part did I like best? Everything that wasn't written; the unsaid empty spaces were awesomely perfect and powerful.

No, I could not count them…Instead; I’ll just thank you ohio for this INSTANT CLASSIC. <P>

It’s a demonstration of a pitch perfect assembly of carefully selected scenes, which together build a cumulative eulogy for a dying marriage<P>

The whole story is on one hand a work which reminds you of a collage were each ‘piece’ has at surface level a pace which ranges from quiet and restrained to perhaps angry in short bursts and quickly coming back to quiet. <P>

On the other hand it’s only in the combination of the pieces – which happens in the reader’s mind that you get the other rhythm – the deep rhythm of a n approaching and inevitable train rack…<P>

The story (and the implied author of this story) assume an intelligent reader; one who can connect the dots, one who can do without the non essential details – where each partner went to school how was the first date etc etc ad nauseam … It demonstrates an acute awareness to the two greatest principles in any writing:: selection and composition. You select only the most necessary scenes –than you put them back together in the best position next to each other to create the best effect for reading in sequence as you ‘collect’ in your mind more and more information from each ‘piece’. Change the order of the same selected pieces and you get a somewhat different story in terms of the effect on the reader. <P>

I loved the fact that there is no ‘teller’ in the story to summarize and to explain or prepare you before and in between each part. It’s all pure ‘showing’, and the reader has to pay full attention in order to anticipate the plot or understand each character. <P>

Add to the above the fact that while each part in the story is a marker in the progression of this couple’s last period of time before they are officially divorced (or perhaps shortly after), each part is at the same time different enough from it’s previous part to keep the reader constantly on edge: one part is a quiet dialogue another is a wild action yet another a dialogue between the wife and a friend another the couple and a therapist – the underlying message – it does not really matter what scene you choose to reflect – in the grand scheme of things this couple’s life as a couple was doomed from the time the wife chose to recreationally have sex with another person other than her husband. The varied selection SHOWS rather than preaches this in one of the most dramatic and artistically convincing ways I can remember reading. <P>

This was a superb work, I just want to tell you that it would be ok for you NOT to have your next story achieving this level of excellence - I am sure that the readers would still enjoy it…Just to let the pressure off…