All Comments on 'The Homeless'

Really good story about coming out of a shell, been there it's very easy to just stay in it.

With all the interaction of Natty trying to set up Tom with Julie, I thought it was gonna end with a threesome as her parting gift to Tom for all he did for her. I mean, It is Literotica after all ! :) But I did like your ending as well, it is your unpredictability that draws us in. I am soo soo sorry that the selfishness of the dregs of society has torn from us your skill that is our little respite from reality. I hope in time you will come to see how much you are appreciated on this site. But if not, I hope you are happy in all you do and let us know on here when and where you are published so we can patronize your efforts.

Dr Karen Palmer became Susan, twice. He decides to “lesson” the pressure. “Will see” where it should have been “We’ll see”.

Otherwise, a nice story.

Another love and understanding story.............keep it up!

If only there were more stars to give! This one got a little personal because I'm Dyslexic. I would have loved to know the strange technique Dr. Palmer taught Natty.

Another amazing story as always DreamCloud. I hope all is well with you.

Story's just ok. Could use a good editor.

I have only read this once, and don't understand why betty and Tom couldn't be together, especially since they both love each other. For me, the ending was confusing. I would have liked the story more if they would have stayed together.

This could have been the same old pervy old dude thing but she sort of led the story. It's not like either of them pushed or dragged the other to someplace they didn't want to be. It was like they both came together to give and receive what the other person needed. He helped he regain confidence and she re-connected him with human relationships. Where he wrote lesson when he should have wrote lessen and a few too's and what not definitely some editing to do but I thought the premise was kind of sweet. I would have given it more stars if they were available. I would suggest the people that rated lower were looking for more gratuitous sex and control. This was romantic in a way. I could see this fleshed out- softened up and made into a movie script.

Regarding my comment two posts earlier: Oops, should have written "Natty and Tom".

I swear, in the future, wars will be fought because of unnoticed autocorrect errors.

There are authors who have multiple stories, wherein i pick and choose and hope I read their best. There are authors that write one big long tale (BusyBadger) wherein I read their entire work.

DreamCloud is the only author I have found that I am reading every one of his tales.

I will taking lessons, and I hope to emulate his wordsmanship in my own writing.

I loved this gentle and tender story - he saves her, then she saves him. Beautifully witten and the odd grammatical error didn’t detract at all :)

Very well crafted story, but I was hoping Tom would have ignored the age difference and proposed to Natty in the hospital anyway. 5 stars, though.

Natty gets a home and Rick gets a home in prison which includes more sex than he ever anticipated. Now there is an idea for some tales from the dark side.

I truly enjoy your writing and intend on reading more of your work. 5*'s and thank you for sharing.

Can't comment much except this is definitely a 5 star ⭐🌟⭐🌟⭐🌟⭐🌟⭐🌟 ratings. Thank you for your lovely story.

Ali Singapore

Touchingg story

What a wonderful story of two souls rescuing each other. I was disappointed in the end of not hearing more of what happened to the characters. For one thing what kind of relationship did Tom and Natalie maintain, if he adopted her as his daughter that would been have a real twist, then did Julie and Tom find a happily ever after together. So many possibilities in this tale and they all could become one big family with so many paths that could be taken. Well done. 5++stars

Again and again, DreamCloud, your brilliant imagination entertains, informs, and enlightens. You truly have a wonderful gift with your storytelling. Thank you for your honest efforts; I'm grateful.

Steve Scott.

We all have a special friend that helped us at low point in life, although not always sexual, they forever have a place in our heart. Thank you to all the "Nattys" in the world!

Thanks for another awesome story Dream Cloud!

great story, but tons of sloppy errors...

Such a wonderful and touching story, warms my heart to read stories of others helping those who need help getting back on their feet.

Loved this story. Both lead characters lifted the other’s life in a profound way. Definitely a “feel good” read. Much praise for this story and the author.

Man I love your stories! 5*

probably the worst dreamcloud story. which is to say a 5/5 that's just not on par with all the other 5/5s.

MAYBE NATTY WAS HIS GUARDIAN ANGEL AND HE WAS HERS. Maybe Julie will give him a baby, the ultimate gift...

It's another 5'er.I From the idle chit chat about the author I get the impression he's moved on to greener pastures, a situation I can easily understand BUT damn it, I do like his work!

Re little Natty - stay away from that young stuff, she'll do you in surer Rick, more fun maybe but surer all the same!

Thank you sooo very much!

No idea how often have reread you stories here. You and your creativity are such a great loss. Thank you for all the pleasure, and regret that you were treated so poorly. May you fare well.

excellent. just sort of risky with a "homeless" girl, STD and birth control? Some people just need a nudge to open back up to life

Don't really see why she couldn't be with him. If they love each other why not go for it?

A story worth 5 stars except the end with ungrateful Natty moving on Julie at the door warranted 2 stars ONLY

The end seemed to be a bolt on, hurried. If only dyslexia could be got over that easily. I have heavy dyslexia some have it light. When a persons asks explain dyslexia I liken it to a library. Some may have one book from one self one one department of the library. Some may have a whole shelf in one part. I have many books from many shelves in the library. Problems - fonts, how something is written, slow hand eye co-ordination, poor short term memory, poor concentration, very bad spelling, very bad hand writing are just some. Good stuff - exhalent visual skills, lateral thinker, good at engineering, health and safety, auditor, investigation skills. Rubbish (trash) at transposition of formula. Rubbish at academic leaning. Good at speed read especially if words or letters or there are grammar issues, we just glide past them and automatically adjust or add the words. Dyslexia is a two edged word. The biggest problem is academics, they normally think dyslexics are idiots as they cannot handle how we think, act or do. Without a dyslexic being assessed they will know know what their wear areas are. Hence the term Dyslexia is a cover term every dyslexic may well be different . Hay Ho.

DreamCloud is a great author, but this was not one of his best -- even then it is better than most stuff on this site.

I could not understand why Natty would push intimacy but then withdraw as if they wee merely passing distant friends. The whole thing with Julie (often called Susan) also did not seem right.

[10.08.22]

Great story!

11/10!!!!!

[10.08.22] Pt. Duex

Loove this reference:

I was whistling the old Frito bandito tune on my way to the car.

Fun Fact: Doritos were created at Disneyland!

Wonderful story!

5

This was a re-read of this engaging story. I enjoyed it yet again. Wonderful. I too wanted more, but do not feel I was left hanging. Life goes on. Thanks for sharing. John.

I do wish we'd had a little more about Tom, his wife Julie (Susan was the lunchtime diner lady), and his "daughter" Natty, giving birth to his "grandchild" , or he gives her away at her wedding.

Like several of the comments - chapter 2? Even on several reads, it's still great!!

[29.08.23]

I just noticed this possible (?) reference:

Dr. Bounder...I am reminded of the Monty Python sketch 'Travel Agent' with Michael Palin as Mr. Bounder and Eric Idle as Mr. Smokedtoomuch...or it could just be a coincidence.

Ciao,

'Sin City' Spence?:>}

Your stories all have a glee and optimism curiously strewn with eroticism and sadness. It seems like something I should pay attention to. I wish to write also. Infotainment! Thank you.

I'm a FAN, love most your work here, and have read most of these more than once, The Link, The Mountain, and The Cotillion are favorites. Sorry you no longer post here and understand why, but I do hope you are still posting/publishing somewhere.

Wonderful story! Thank you.

Great story well told

Great story but needs to have part 2!

Yeah I agree! Bloody great story but needs a Part 2/3 to make it great!!!

OMG ! You just keep on keepin' on! Thanx!