- Non-Erotic Poetry
- born of a journey
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today's pale milk moon lights the way
for a hope nourished path.
dreams of tomorrow's endeavers transcend.
magnetic pull,
embracing the haze of luminating love.
those who step from shadows,
filled with hunger suckle strength.
a guide when midnight blinds, truth shines.
born of a journey
through many moonless sorrows.
- COMMENTS
LeBrozover 17 years agoMetaphorically laced journey of hope
With enough promise to keep leading the reader on.
lostandfounderover 19 years agoI think this poem would have benefited by being longer. The journey ends after some marvelous first steps. Nice work, I just wish there was more.
Vampiric_Mirageover 19 years agoThis is an excellent poem, filled with beautiful phrases. Personally I like the poem the way it is and feel "filled" sounds better than "fill." Both are good, but I don't think you should change a thing!
PatCarringtonover 19 years agothere are some well-chosen words here / there is a bad tense change in the third grouping, it seems to me / ~filled~ should be ~fill~, i think/
Tathagataover 19 years agoI had to look twice to see if it was really you.
: )
sparse and direct.
Some great word choices
your writing has grown by leaps and bounds.
excellent work
