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Click hereLike hail his hand rained down
on malleable buttocks
each smack echoing in her ears
as cheeks grew fiery hot
ablaze in heated fury
her wetness dappled
down silky shaven thigh
until softly she began to cry
I like your brief poetic description of a spanking. It is rather erotic. I wonder if you've considered some of your word choices, like fiery hot and heated fury. Maybe the poem could be even more exciting with some fresher phrases.
i mentioned this submission in the New Poem Review thread in the Poetry Forum. please feel free to come along and join in with other poets. the 50% temperature rating is given so that it does not alter future temperature ratings. - wildsweetone