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Click hereThe Song of Ruth & Naomi
by
Denise Noe
This is the song
of Ruth & Naomi
Woman followed
woman freely
Living in the desert
Each carried
a pocket of sea
Slippery cavern
called femininity
When Ruth
loves Naomi
she loves softness,
fine silver hair
the creases
in multiplicity
Ruth cannot fear
the wrinkling
of her skin,
the graying of hair
Aging holds no terrors
for Ruth loves Naomi
& loves what she will be
A good woman teaches a woman
to love
her femininity
A good woman teaches a woman
confidence
joy &
ecstasy
Female body
warm &
warmly best
Oh Naomi! Teach the fountain,
the wish &
the crest!
When Naomi loves Ruth
She loves herself
in memory
Hills newborn &
Flesh supple
Black jungle
And the red sea
parts in privacy
Ruth's miracle
for Naomi
Nothing more; just wow!
.
Well actually, thought and feeling and senses and ... and ...
Thank you!
I enjoyed the erotic expression in the poem. I just wish you used a different couple as a reference. The direct allusion to the biblical text on which (I assume) the poem builds at least as a starting point worked against the poem not with it. I'll try to explain. The brevity of the bible is known for its flexibility in allowing numerous interpretations to fill the gaps. Still, not every thing goes. Anyone who has read the scroll of Ruth knows that the story of Ruth and Naomi comes immediately prior to one of the 'hottest' most touching and romantic love affairs in the bible -that is the story of Ruth and Boaz. The immediate and explicit context of Ruth and Naomi (her mother in law) is that of not being abandoned immediately after Mahlon, Ruth husbands death. A lesbian connection squeezed in between the death of her husband and the big story of this book, that of Ruth and Boaz, is just not one the text suggests, or in other words is not one of the legitimate gap fillers the text allows. Now David and Jonathan for example is a whole different story...
Normally, I'm not at a loss for words.
I don't know what else to say, but...
"Wow!"
This is really quite a good poem. And like Normal Jean wrote, I would also like to see you on literotica's poetry forum.
The bestowing of an E does not surprise me here. A job well done. Congratulations!
best wishes, and still would love to see you in and around the poetry forum. I know I could learn from you. Your style is clean and fresh and it is good to see someone giving a voice to those women of us who are less than blond and bony,yet there are those who are perfect and beautiful in their own ways, (regardless of what some people in various media outlets have decided is the definition of perfection). I don't know what else to say except I enjoyed your work and I apologize for babbling on). Keep up the good work :)
best wishes,
NJ