by poeticlicense91
Is it switching between surname and first name that is confusing? Or is it that the narrative voice follows multiple mindsets? Either way I'll try to fix the confusion in the coming installments. Thanks for the feedback.
That was another incredible chapter, and I can't wait to see what happens next!!! I'm so curious about what happens with Cecilia now, and just exactly what Ashton plans to do. I can see how some would perhaps find the use of both first and surnames a little tough to follow, but personally I had no trouble keeping it straight. All in all, this was another fabulous update, and I am waiting with baited breath for more! 5* from me, obviously! Please, don't make me wait too long!!!
All The Best!
Question: Will James rescue Cecilia? I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
@Phil: I've already submitted Chapter 8. I was hoping to have it up on Christmas, but I think it should be up soon... So you'll just have to wait and see. I wouldn't want to spoil the next chapter. Happy Christmas!
Switching between surname and first name is both irritating and confusing. Otherwise very well done thank you
Switching between the two is not a problem, as long as it is not over done or done randomly. Which you use can convey respect, distance, familiarity, over familiarity/contempt or a host of other levels of interact between people. Which you use, the situation and any possible descriptors can do much to set a tone or advance parts of the plot.
I had no difficulties with how it was done here.
I was rudely awakened to a totally different Lace than I had visualized. As soon as you gave that short description and increased the degree of his accent and colloquialisms, my visual changed completely. It was interesting to acknowledge that to myself. It shows, what a wonderful gift you have in your writing. Your words create specific images for the reader...some not so attractive!
I take back what I said in a previous comment about Lace. Looking forward to what comes next.