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I loved the sound of this poem. I can envision most of it, but the sound clinches likability for me. The "our lean" part was confusing at first. Another litster had to explain it to me, but then I got it. Perhaps there should have been a comma before it. Other than that, I loved it.

You know I loved this poem, but the part in between centrifugals and our lean, needs a comma, or else centrifugals sounds like it comes right after... whatever I got lost there, but then when I read it again and again, I saw what you meant and rounded that sharp corner with you. This is a smooth poem that moves like it's on rails<to quote the movie pretty woman>.

nice job.

...this racy, erotic ride an unqualified 5. Wild, loved it.

smack that hand, left away wild

unnerving at curves

freedom found in tachy ways

revolves around us,

mends us

break us, breaks down

your hand on my leg, shift

slowly into low

rumble grin and keep me

to yourself

Im really gonna miss you, you flirt,:)