All Comments on 'Deflowering Jenny'

I thought it was a great build up as it lead into the bathroom scene, then seemed rushed or tapered off from there. I was looking for a more detailed ending based on what you started with.

Good story, but I think it could have been a lot better with a little more work.

Well you start off fairly well, up to the point where you have Jenny stroking mark off, the next thing we know, he's fingering her -- how'd he get through her skirt -- and then we hear Jenny's mom going "damn neighbors"... poor girl didn't even have time to enjoy

this story has a great start up until they are both in his room with the porno laying out on his mattress. after that it just seemed really rushed, i'd like to have more detail of what is happening, how every peice of clothing comes off, what both there emotions are, words that paint a picture in your mind like your in the room with them and are watching this right in front of you.

I read it thru and got extra wet towards the end. I just needed to read thru starting at the pleasuring of her up til the end to finish ;) i liked the story; the coupling was hot too

Very good story