by My Erotic Tail
Just drop that "a" in the first line of the second stanza. Go ahead and read the entire poem aloud. Try it with and without the "a". The "a" is one syllable too many for that line. Other than that, it reads quite well.
It wouldn't be yours...You are a perfect balance in stories and poems.. I always enjoy your work, Art.
Keep giving us more....
This has good flow. With or without the "a"....nicely done. Great title, by the way.
~Merry