by iluv2fuk
This story was flat-out pathetic............No "personality" to it at all.
hot story. i first fucked my sister when she was drunk. that was about six months ago and we have been fucking hot and daily ever since. i get an instant boner just thinking about sucking my sister's tits and unloading my cum into her hot wet pussy.
This story wasn't developed fully enough. Group "rape" is already a distasteful idea, but there are ways to make it seem sexy...
The protagonist seemed to be too detached from whatever was going on. For this reason, I didn't really feel like she enjoyed being in relations with her brothers and her friends. Next time, build up to the climax instead of rushing the reader right to it.
Hello I enjoyed this story. I use to think it could never happen but the more people i talk to the more i believe and then it happened to me. my sister and I also got drunk and was with some friends and we all got naked and fucked each other. I knew what was going on and she did too.
The essence of your creative thoughts/ideas come across to fans of this genre quite clearly. Pulitzer prize maybe a ways off...but there're more than a few of us that've put food/drink on thetable with much worse pulp! Write 'til your brain locks-up or fingers fall off.....then dictate.
not a bad story by any means, a little short with under developed characters but quite well written and fairly hot. I particularly like the thought of sisters using their bodies as deal makers in stories, so would be interested if you had more to share. remember, little boys with limp dicks who slag you off anonomously are not worth worrying about. I am more than happy to leave my name. Jim
total BS begining seems ok but to go from virgim to gang bang and anal to me is BS
another fucking asshole,using he s sister for his drugged mine and some readers even like that,what a PITI,THE WRITER IS A DRUG ADDICT NO GOOD SON OF A BITCH.
the story was too short and wasnt interesting at all not to mention ive read lots of stories with dozens of chapters and long pages and i still havent found typos there but i did on here
Hey I come here to read stories fantasize and masturbate, this story made my cock hard. Rich