by JUDO
I think this is a story well handled in a form I seldom dare to try. There are a few places where I was slightly confused by some phrases that might have warranted a comma... but I'm tenacious enough to read until I "hear" it.
Despite that possible need of tightening, I cannot understand Anon's comment. Consider letting this sit a while, then perhaps try a little polishing. I, for one, would love to read that version!
so nice to see a JUDO poem. It's a lovely sonnet as always--a beautiful combination of modern subject and language and yet an Elizabethan tone. Welcome back sweetheart! xo, Ange
A difficult subject delicately handled
In a format providing its own unique challenges.
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,000 poems.
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