Nicely written and paced. You have a good command of the language and describe events beautifully.
More important right now, this was AROUSING. Keep writing please.
The first 2/3's were so fucking hot, I didn't make it through to the end:) I'll have to read the end later, when I can properly appreciate it. Whew!
I liked the imagery here, and the fact that you experienced this with someone before you wrote it makes it that much better *s*
Keep writing and we'll keep reading
parts of the story are really good however if you read BDSM literature you will see that each time you need permission from the master to cum, certainly terminology seems to be used, etc. Details like that are missing. On the other hand, the core storyline is good, keep it up the good work.
You can be a Bad Girl For Me Anytime Susan.. Loved the story and wish I was there letting me have my fun with you... lar1818
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