All Comments on 'Visitor'

the next time you look down and see the lips of your cunt pulled tightly along a withdrawing cock, imagine it is mine

Your imagination is obviously in high gear for this fantasy fuck. You could do more to describe what you and your lover are seeing as you watch the cock slide in and out, especially in reverse cowgirl.

It would make the reading much easier if you considerably shortened your paragraphs and used some dialogue. Even though this is fantasy, dialogue helps you break the paragraphs and avoid overuse of "then". Don't forget the scents and smells of sex, and the existence of cum in your pussy when he eats you the second time.

Keep writing.

the sex explanation was great....but I have to agree with the other critics....it needs more description of the characters and what they are seeing...Winemaster