All Comments on 'All I want'

This poem does not have many flowery words, however, I really like it for the simple and honest words that were present in every sentences. Wishes and dreams could only be fully understood when stripped of meaningless, flowery phrases that would divert the reader's attention. I would like to print this poem for myself if the author would not mind. Please say ok Stormy...Pretty please...

P.S. The only thing I would like to change is the "green" word. ^_^

Powerful feelings here, diluted by too much repetition;

Combine these 2-line pairs into about 4 strophes

And only once in each strophe let the words, "All I want is," appear. Just a couple small suggestions but should give your words much more kick.

All I want ~ seems quite a lot. Reads like a list ~ but there is a heartfelt quality to this rendering.

loved it.

...and gave it a 5*

is the other willing to share, TK U MLJ LV NV

has one recall a broadway play and movie and wouldn't it be loverly. TK U MLJ LV NV