........is mentioned in the new poems review thread.
don't work cous the vandals stole the handle
Okay ~ I'll give it a 5
For the beat;
Almost something to dance to!
This rythmic poem could almost be converted into Rap. The poem is fast paced and moves rapidly from verse to verse - almost as if the Poet is in a hurry. Interesting!
"with their white teeth and ya starin' eyes". The images were just pouring out as I read. Nice job.
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,500 poems.
Your rhyming makes a definite rhythm for this "tune"! Cool!
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