Nice writing but a tiny bit too detailed. Some details are not followed up and dangle, like the aunt in Denmark. Your tension between the two principals is nicely done. You have a few typos, missing characters, and a few misspellings. Nice work. You should consider chic lit.
great story and writing but please continue want to see where it goes
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