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Roses in Hospital

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by My Erotic Tale12/08/05

this poem touched me

mostly because I just got home from the hospital nice write wild~

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by WickedEve12/08/05

nice poem

one small suggestion. You could drop "in white."

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by Anonymous12/09/05

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The break in your stanza's is distracting but your imagery is wonderful, with some editing this could be a strong piece.
~Sabina

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by Anonymous12/09/05

Pleasant read.

This was a nice read, showed nice separation between writer and words with subject matter that a weaker poet would drool sentimental over.

I definately agree with the previous comment...('in white' is redundant and must be removed), but do not at all agree that the linebreaks were distracting. I think they are fine, and your linebreaks in general lately have begun to display a more sophisticated feel for your material. They are not random, for the most part, as they used to be.

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by TheRainMan12/09/05

The comment below

is from me.

Forgot to sign in, as usual. :)

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