by Randi Grail
I just love an intelligent write
That demands thinking of its reader;
Sends my mind reeling in myriad directions...
...the background story, this is nothing short of astounding. Sargodha, Indus, Eden, Cresent... no wonder you haven't written in a while. I genflect in your general direction, girl. :)
/M
The first couple of lines are a wonderful beginning. The entire poem is good, even staggering souls--mention of souls doesn't turn out the best in most poems.
I have read your work...strong title and it fits the poem so well..discriptive images are haunting and colorful...nicely done...bluerains
The story is engaging and the images are enthralling. I was puzzled by some of the line breaks, but enjoyed this very much.
Fly
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