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Could You Help Me Unzip?

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous01/17/06

Decent

...But confusing. There was at least once, maybe twice, where Lisa and Ella seemed to swap names in the narrative, and the use of "defiantly" where the word needed was "definitely" was jarring, pulling the reader out of the narrative. Spellcheck alone is not enough, most folks should make use of the volunteer editors just to prevent grammatical errors of this nature.

On the good side, you used names, rather than falling into the pronoun trap which makes other same-sex-sex stories so hard to read ("She kissed her on the mouth", etc).

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by Mainliner01/17/06

One Good Lick deserves Another

I liked the story line and it is erotic, but there seems to be a mix up of names and it is hard to follow who is talking and when.

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by Anonymous01/13/08

Kerrie

I really enjoyed this story but i was confused because if the top of the dressing rooms had a gap so you could talk to each other wouldnt other people using the dressing rooms hear Lisa and Ella.

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by Anonymous01/08/10

Confusing

I really like the topic, but can't keep up with who is talking! For future stories, please notify your audience of a new speaker by starting a new paragraph! I'm sorry to say I couldn't finish reading this one because of that...

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by Anonymous02/21/10

Really confuzzeling

Good story but the talking was confusing :D

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by Anonymous11/28/10

I WAS CUMMING WHILE I WAS READING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I am busexual too and me and my friend Danica did almost the same exact thing last week. I tasted he cum and it was so sweet.

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by Anonymous04/17/11

Wow!

Omg i masturbate while readig this story. Im not lesbian but ive always wanted to try it out with a girl. It sounds really good!

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by Anonymous04/19/11

Confusing

well, idk if u can change stories on here but i know 4 a fact it was really confusing.. idk who wAs who..

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by Anonymous06/19/11

CONFUSING :D

its good but i did not no who was who but i cumed my girlfriend did to im a lesbian though my girlfriend used to be my bff since i was 7 but now shes my girlfriend

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by Anonymous06/20/11

Oh my god I so want this

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by Anonymous10/03/11

.

Omg this is so hot! ^-^ ;)

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by Anonymous12/31/11

Woah

I'm straight , but I always wanted to eat out girl , for some reason.

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by Anonymous01/06/12

amazing

i am straight but lesbian porn and lesbian sex turns me on. i really wanna try it once

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by Anonymous01/10/12

Wow

I am straight but I wanna try lesbian sex

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by Anonymous01/12/12

I'm so turned on right now

I am a straight girl, but lesbian porn turns me on so much. I can't even say how much I'm questioning my sexuality because I want to go down on a girl, and make her cum, and have her make me cum.
This was an aweesome story, that turned me on so much!

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by Anonymous01/21/12

Fabbbbulous!

I'm completely straight but this was hot! Cummmmmmm

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by Anonymous02/27/12

Awwwww

Ok I'm also into guys but this story made me cum like hell

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by Anonymous02/28/12

I'm straight

I'm straight but I've always had tat curiosity to make a girl cumm and I would eat it...I so wanna kiss a girl and have lesbian sex with her! I just need the right time!! Plus 1 time can't hurt anyone...

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by Anonymous03/12/12

this makes me want to cum....

I'm bi and this reminds me of my girlfriend and our
Little adventures ;)

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by Anonymous03/19/12

Hehehe

So this is how lesbians have sex.

Hehehe, I just need to figure out what Bellend means then I'll be an educated woman. (or maybe even teenage girl)

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by Anonymous06/27/12

Sexy

It turns me on makIng masterbation easier!!! Oh I am so fricken wett!!!!!

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by Anonymous07/18/12

This reminds me of my girlfriend and I. Only we were camping when we first had our adventure.

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by Anonymous02/08/13

Got me wet

Got me so wet. I thought I was straight, but now I think I might be bi. Really wanna have sex with a girl now.

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by Anonymous02/19/13

were can i fine me a friend like this :0)

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by Anonymous03/18/13

Fuck I need some help I am so wet right now

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by Anonymous08/20/13

Cum

I am sooooooooooo horny right now get me two women

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by Anonymous12/30/13

7 want to cum so badly right now

Cuuuuummming

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by Anonymous01/27/14

Super wet want a best friend like this

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by Anonymous01/28/14

Yum

Often dream about me and my best friend (I am not lesbian but Bi and my best friends body in a swimsuit is AMAZING!!)

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by Anonymous02/27/14

yum

Love to have a best friend to do this with so wet and horny

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by Anonymous06/06/14

horny lesbo

yummmm plzzzzzz any girl free for me im a hot girl wid BIG tits and ready to sex and make ur pussy wettttttttt.........................

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by Anonymous08/10/14

horny

Wow.. made me so wet ,wish I cud taste pussy rite now

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by Anonymous09/14/14

about to cum

I'm so wet and playing with my pussy right now. So close to cumming

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