by noplex
but i think that she went too fast what with her past and all...
overall i would saw a 8/10 for this submission...looking forward to more chapters soon...as well as in your other stories...
Very nice,
I absolutely enjoy reading what you created, be it this story
or the others.
Thought I have to second the previous comment, she did come about a *bit* fast - but then, two month is a lot of time where you wouldn;t just write crap to make it feel long for us...
I absolutly like his attitude, please continue,
I'll be allways eager to check back for new content by you;
Cheers
Killerdog
I really love this story. I cant wait till you post again so that i can read what happens next. Please continue soon.
you've put a lot of detail into the background of Dave. I thought that you have done a very good job of setting up this story and I think that it shows a lot of promise for future chapters. Maybe if you have time you could give us more background on Danni or a problem that develops because of her past. Please continue with your story. You've got a really good style.
This is a great story! Please continue it, I will read every chapter you write.
please write more of this story love the peolpe in it and love your style of writing
Great little story. I could have read a hundred more pages. Look forward to reading your next story. Thank you.
This was a good story, how ever you might want to have some one proofread them prior to publishing on the site. The typos or word usage was sometimes confusing.