by tickled_pink_69
Very hot but way too short. You have a talent to make things hot but a buildup, more dialogue, more story is needed.
You have promise, maybe in you next story give a little more context, build up.
I guess the comments about needing more of a build-up are well founded... but I liked it just the way it is. It is feels like the vaguely conceived scenarios one has in a masturbatory fantasy... followed by the details which appear like flashes of imagination fueled by your own, very personal desires.
And as I said.. I liked it. Keep it up, as you do.
-aswpc
It may be short, but at least it's horny.
To many stories drag out, this is engrossing from the first sentance, "no bullshit", just sex as it really is.
Give us some more insight into your pleasures, you certainly are a "Bad Girl", but I for one don't mind.
Nothing gets my cock harder then a woman with a Nasty mind. This Lady has does.
Nothing gets my cock harder then a woman with a Nasty mind. This Lady has does.
i think your daddy/daughter story line is very hot and sexy!! love the unfiltered sexual play...i think you need to keep exploring this theme, TP 69...perhaps a secret mutual sexual attraction that blossoms into a hot love making session between daddy and daughter...a nice massage for baby girl's sore muscles is a good way to heat things up...anyway, i'm sure you know how to carry this forward without my two cents...please keep submitting...i'm anxious to read and listen to more!!
Love to hear you do this story as an audio or listen to you masturbate as you tell Daddy how much you want him.
Usually i find I need I nice long story to push me over the edge into orgasm, this is the one exception, I came so hard I'm surprised I stayed conscious! Please write more of this! 5*