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La valse des rayons: Apache

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by WickedEve09/09/07

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Okay, I admit it, I don't like the word wank. Not particularly fond of dick, either--um, the word dick. But it really doesn't matter, because the rest of the poem is so fucking excellent.

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by vampiredust09/09/07

Good Stuff

Love its imagery and tone. Funny and touching, in a bittersweet kind of way. Mentioned in today's new poem reviews.

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by KOLKORE09/15/07

Wonderful!

How touching in its mature sober observations, melancholic but not depressed all in that minor tone and those wonderful images. More please.

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by Bill Dada09/24/07

^

This is so very good. The ending was not at all what I expected and like Vamp said the imagery was great.

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