by Borgen
Interesting story and take on the girl/girl thing. Quite descriptive and somewhat graphic. Well Written.
I liked the way you used the character's voice to make your story unique. I'm looking forward to more of your work
Loved your narrative style and how the story concluded with a bittersweet ending. There's nothing harder than pretending something special never happened. I hope to read more submissions from you.
yeah what people are saying about the first person voice. This is exceptional. You've captured perfectly the sensation of attraction and falling in love and you've done it with a narrative style that is sooooo easy to ready (unforced) and allows us such an empathy with the narrator
well done
Loved the humor and the interaction between the narrator and the reader. Very well written.
Leto423