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Sunflowers

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by Anonymous

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by LeBroz03/11/08

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Quite a contrast you've painted here, between the young and the old.

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by Angeline03/11/08

Wonderful sustained metaphor

of flowers for women--bright and reaching for the Sun in youth and drooping and huddled in age. I'm not normally a fan of the sort of simple rhyme scheme you're using here, but you've done it with such a light touch that the poem doesn't seem childish or sing-songy. It feels just right, and I've really enjoyed reading it. Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum.

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by UnderYourSpell03/11/08

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It was probably the sun worshipping that played havoc with the older ladies skin!

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by KOLKORE03/11/08

Sunflowers at night...

do not seem to me more older looking than during the day, but the whole image in the poem was intriguing. For the older women I would have tried the same sunflowers after they produce the seeds... their look than fits perfectly to the image I believe you were trying to portray (and parallel in the way of nature of course).

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