All Comments on '"Scammed?"'

I liked it. what goes around comes around. Thanks for entertaing us. Mike from Texas

Really enjoyed this story, keeped me interested all the way. Thanks!

Nice job keeping your loose ends from getting away. My only (small) complaint was that with the PI Donna said that both Walter and Crystal were trashing him at the prom. I assumed that he was on to them from the first, so it didn't make as much sense that he only found out from the mike in the purse.

A little longer than I usually read but it flowed well. Thanks for a good story. Keep writing what you like. PAPATOAD

I really like stories with happy endings, where the good guys win. Nice plot also.

Another outstanding tale. Enjoyed it from beginning to end.

I thoroughly enjoyed the revenge after you revealed they were going to scam him again.

Well written, easy and enjoyable to read. Some of the sex may have been over the top, but the only thing wrong was a spelling error - caret is a "^" symbol, carat is the unit of weight for precious stones. Keep up the good work.

This is truly a story that keeps you reading to the very last word. You certainly know how to write an interesting story. Boy, you sure had me fooled, though the story's titled did give alway the plot. Please write more stories with southern California as their main setting. Give more details regarding locations within California in your stories.

Thank you. RAG

The mike in the purse really got me. Clever.

Kind of reminds me of the Who song, "Won't Get Fooled Again." Very good story!

That was awesome!!! I can almost see someone doing something like that to someone else... WOW.... Very good detail; and I am looking forward to reading more from you

You write extremely well, but this story is a bit complex in terms of whose conning whom. You wrote a real sexy erotic desciption of his week-ends with Crystal and had me convinced he an Crystal were going to live happily ever after, until you pulled your big scam of showing Crystal and John as con artists and pairing him up with Donna. Nice job, but pretty abrupt. Donna went from salsgirl to fiancee in a day or two, You could have shortened story by eliminating latex episode which added nothing to story and explaining who Mr. Peterson and Mrs Culver were. Great overall story though and very aptly titled.

60 year old George

It is up to your usual standards. thank you.

pretty complicated when he gets the sweet chick he didn't really want in the first place. what's the odds she would forgo a life to wait for someone she never had anything with. he could go to vegas with a few hundred and leave with a few mil. with that luck.virgin too, wasn't she, huh? kind of made a good story go off the deep end i thought..

<p>Given the length of this story and the obvious effort involved in the writing and construction, I thought you deserved more than a short and simple critique.</p>

<p>First of all, I liked many elements of this story. The sex scenes were some of the best I have ever read. Those passages could act as a model for other writers.</p>

<p>As for the plot, I did not find it too complicated. In the one twist where Nick almost falls for Crystal’s assertion that she was afraid of John and is on his side, I too was almost drawn into believing her. However, given the ease in which she agreed to prostitute herself, I never found it possible to accept that Nick and Crystal had any real future.</p>

<p>The plot device related to the termite inspection seemed to come out of nowhere. No foundation was given to support that declaration. You appeared to use it to allow for some return of Nick’s money but you compounded the problem when it was discovered that John and Crystal were the actual owners of the house. I found those two elements of the story to be poorly developed.</p>

<p>Nick comes off as a fairly controlling individual. Notice how he directs both Crystal and Donna to have their public areas shaved and decides what clothes her wants to see on both women. </p>

<p>Donna’s second appearance in the story is some attempt to provide Nick with a happy ending. The problem however is that Donna comes off as a woman obsessed, and for very little reason. She had no direct connection to Nick while they were in High School, so why would she carry such deep feelings for so long? Nick’s sister said Donna just about drove her crazy.</p>

<p>In fact, the entire interlude with Donna culminating with Nick’s proposal of marriage and her acceptance was so unbelievable, so impulsive, so over the top, that it dampened my enthusiasm for the story and forced me to downgrade my rating to 50.</p>

I really feel that this one could have been in Humour or in

Erotic Couplings. A nice balance between erotica and story.

Every now and then ... there is a rather interesting story ... far above the rest ... this is one of those times ... you must be very proud of your work AND you should be ... I certainly enjoyed reading it ...

Nothing about this fooled me for a second. Mind you its a great read and hence the 100 score. One reader -- ANONYMOUS some elements were good pointed that that the ease of Crystal accpetance into fucking Nick was suspicous.

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There is something more obvious than that.

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even if NICK had not discovered the truth about Crystal and John... there is No reason why he should of wanted to see her. Except maybe to spit on her.

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Lets assume for a second that Crystal's bullshit story about being afraid of John AFTER discovering the truth about the prom picture..was 100% correct.

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Why would Nick after all that pain and torment be interested in a Girl like Crystal who KNEW Nick was NOT Gay... KNEW the Picture was fake... and said NOTHING to anyone ... and was supposedly afraid of John???

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My point is that NICK should of never wanted to see Crystal. John is evil... but she new the truth and did nothing.

rala nd john...

that elp John set up Nic,,.. then

This is a good story. On top of that it is well written. If you made any stupid mistakes, I didn't see them, unlike most other stories I've read here. I'm about to read other stories you've posted. I hope they meet the standard you have set with this one.

srgeek

Fine, fine work. It kept my attention all the way through. It did find a couple of minor plot holes. First of all, no one, but I mean no one, buys a house in California without an inspection by a certified house inspector, especially if the price of the house is 2 million. Any certified house inspector would have picked up the termites with 5 minutes. The realtor should have suggested an inspection. Since he did not he could be professionally and civilly liable at least up to the price of the house.

If John suggested a "tame" inspector who would ignore the termites, once the termites were discovered he would be liable for professional and civil damages, as well as criminal ones for joining in the conspirency.

So the presence of the lawyer was not necessary. Just a phone call to him and a little bit of advice would have been enough. Oh yes, sellers are supposed to disclose all defects to the buyer before the inspection. There is a criminal fine for not doing that.

Nick Joshua didn't know who owned the house? An offer to buy is a legal documenr, signed by the propective buyer. An accepted offer is signed by the seller. Unless John was using a DBA, hia name would be right there, and so would Cryatal's.

I realise that an author needs a critique to improve their writing skills, I don't intend to give one, I just liked the story,and not being from the USA I missed the holes anyway.

enjoyed it from start to finish - and the sex was not in your face either. Like others I thought he would end up with Crystal until he bugged her purse - then he found his one true love who had waited for him and saved her virginity for him too. That is not hard to believe as I met a girl who was 30/31 before she lost her virginity. A fine story and a damn good read. I don't know about American real estate laws but that is a minor point compared to the whole story. Well done - very well written.

I absolutely love this one! Steamy sex scenes combined with a surprising twist, honey keep up the great work!

beautifully written.... keep it up

I am never quite sure why so many want to tear apart the plot. You never said it was a true story... I love it because it was intriguing. I love tiny titties myself. The old saying, "Any more than a mouthful is a waste." My second wife never had to wear a bra until she got pregnant. She got plenty of attention from men wherever she went. She always worried about their size as well. Kind of like average sized or smaller dicks I guess. Anybody that understands about nerve endings in a vagina knows that you only need a few inches. Oh well, women want bigger tits and men bigger dicks...fads!

but I couldn't stop reading. Thanks for a wonderful morning.

He's lying to Donna by omitting his involvement with Crystal. How is that going to end well?

You had me enthralled from the beginning to the end - I even missed an important appointment in order to reach the end. I don't care if there are things that may be wrong in the story, it is only a story, make-believe - but it sucked me in and I loved it. Thank you.

The Scorp also didn't tell you about the two termites having sex or how many breaths he took while screwing the whore or whether he had a zit on his butt! It is a story, not a 4000 page trilogy. Quit with the nit picking and get real. Tell him how much you enjoyed the story. I will buy him a box of pre-picked nits so you won't have to be KEWL at his expense. Is your life really so empty that you have to try to rain on somebody else to bring them down to your level? Geeez Louise, CHILL

Lynn

I like a happy ending with comeuppance. I had to smirk at the pictures in Donna's house though.

Enjoyed the story very much. First thought Crystal could have been an unwitting character forced to play her role but when it was revealed through the bugged conversation she was an accomplice there was no excuse. But then the story continued to Donna White and her wait of 10 years it is a really compassionate situation and passionate reward really deserving to her.

Appreciate the tasty narration by the author.

This story deserved my full 5 out of 5 stars vote!

If there was one weakness it is in conveying the feelings of your protagonists to us readers in some parts. When Nick came to know that Walter and Crystal were scamming him the second time, I would've loved to have seen more of an emotional reaction from Nick.

Absolutely delightful! One of the best feel good stories I've read in a while. I'm working my way through your work and have been quite pleased so far.

Finally a writer who has given tiny tits the recognition they deserve. I Hate big tits, It drives me up the wall how often I read stories where big tits equal a hot woman when I think the opposite, I wish more writers would have Scorpid44's imagination and at least write half the stories to big tit women and half to tiny. Sorry I will get off the soap box now.

And yes it was a feel good story I agree I gave it 5 stars.

Well done

Just unbelievable

To anon 03/08/15. Of course it's a fairytale. You want believable, go buy a newspaper.

Great story, the good girl wins and the assholes get their just desserts.

This it a cute and cleaver story nice job

Just as a matter of interest - yellow diamonds, that he (as a millionaire) chose for her engagement ring, are the least valuable of all the diamond colours.

Diamonds to begin with are at bets a semi-precious stone, worth about 40% of what they sell for.

De Beers has been going broke buying up other mines production to artificially keep the price high.

And yes yellow diamonds are among the most common, so worth even less than the others.

Most new millionaires are not cheapskates, usually it's the old money that are tightwads.

Miracles happen every day. Real life has far more fantastic happenings occur than fiction has happen. This story has nothing in it that stretches the imagination. Oh, as for why someone would buy a yellow diamond it could be that they just like the color yellow, or because they know that it won't attract the attention of thieves or advertise the fact that they have lots of money.

For myself, I find this story to have so many things that strike a chord with me, romance, revenge and justice finally obtained. I love reading this story every time I do so.

The ending is what made it worth the read. Thanks for the entertainment.

Really enjoyed this story. Shocking beginning and lustfull middle, then great ending. Please keep writing.😆

You also never really explained why Crystal turned so viciously on Nick during high school. She could have just dumped him and went with Ass Hole. Since Nick's family had money I'm surprised Nick didn't have the photos examined for fraud.

Still, a good romance and revenge story even if the details don't quite add up.

its time to re-fill the cauldron, TK U MLJ LV NV

Love and retribution, what's not to like!

I enjoyed this story. Hope the next are as good or better.

Excellent story. If you're going to put it in THAT catagory, I'll be expecting more chapters. Don't see how you could extend it... Although I havent finished yet. And there might be a devious twist still to come. Gotta say: If you're going to use a line from a popular movie, get the attribution right. When Meg Ryan said it... It was to Maverick (Tom Cruise's character). Cannot recall the actress' name, but Goose's wife said it to him.

fantastic story everyone got what they deserved and then some ! five star all the way

A woman that didn't get over her HS crush in ten years and filled her house with pictures of him? Run man! Run as far as you can!

That crazy bitch will end up shivving him, or herself, or most likely both.

There are two almost unrelated stories here. The first is good. He tries to get the wife, but the wife is a collaborator so he gets them arrested.

The second is unbelievable. 5 minutes after the first story ends, he finds a virgin who loved him for the past 10 years and has many photos of him at her house.

She needs to be in a mental institution and he needs to run away fast.

Excellent story. Very well written and erotic though some of the demands that Nick made of women were really over the top (author’s perogative) and found it hard that Crustal was faking it. Lived up to its title